1- My MC is dreaming and it starts going wrong. His conscience kinda realizes it and my MC comments about it in dream. Here's an example of how I write it. Is this good enough or is there a specific way to do this.
2- My MC is alone so instead of having him say things, I have him think about them. My question is, should it be considered dialogue and given it's own paragraph or should i just keep it as a phrase amongst others.
example: After hours of rummaging at random locations, the boy saw in the distance, a tall tower. It was half tipped over, as if it wanted to fall down but couldn't. I could see everything up there, tought the child.
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After hours of rummaging at random locations, the boy saw in the distance, a tall tower. It was half tipped over, as if it wanted to fall down but couldn't.
"I could see everything up there," tought the child.
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Nov 19, 2009 - 08 45
1 - I don't see your example, could you repost?
2 - The first one is fine. You don't need quotation marks around dialogue, and it can be integrated into other paragraphs, as you've done.
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Nov 19, 2009 - 09 01
my example didn't show up for my first question. the example is < insert dialogue > .
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Nov 19, 2009 - 17 50
I don't think that thoughts need quotation marks. Whenever I do dreams, I have the whole dream be in italics. Since I usually do the thoughts in italics, the thoughts in a dream would be normal (not italic). Are you doing your dream in italics or something else?
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Nov 19, 2009 - 18 21
Where is your example?
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Nov 20, 2009 - 11 52
I would punctuate dream dialogue the same way as normal dialogue. It should be clear from the way you're narrating the dream that it's a dream - maybe a shift in tense, or the way you transition into it, or a change in style (dreamy tone) or setting.
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