Your Best Line So Far

ObiKimono — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 08:06:01 -0500

No one's started it yet, so why not? Post your favorite line from your novel so far. Feel free to update as you go. My favorite so far is in my first scene. First line is given for context. [quote]Even Kensington felt a little more awake as he watched; feeling the small prickles on his skin at the sound of it, breathing the smell of burning flesh, seeing the hideous look of the man being tortured. Or maybe it was the electricity traveling through the air that made the hair on his arms stand.[/quote] Your turn!

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kertwang — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 08:43:20 -0500

[quote]And besides, if you ever did rid Surfeit of the lawless, there would be many more gone than left.[/quote]

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MarcyT — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 09:14:35 -0500

[quote] It’s like one of those times when you’re on a roller coaster and you go down a big hill or flip upside down and then, just as you’re struggling to get back your breath from that, something else happens. [/quote]

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MandyBroughton — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 12:06:32 -0500

"Great Uncle Odell bought some baby pigeons," Kento offerred. I looked over at him, surprised that he spoke up and curious as to where it would lead. I raised my eyebrows asking the silent "and?" "He lets the baby pigeons go and shoots them for his cat," Kento said. Okay, my favorite three lines but it just tickled me. Squab for an eighteen year old cat.

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DudelRok — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 16:28:51 -0500

How about's two half paragraphs? [quote]Anyone there would say to you they heard fanfare of success as Grato burst through the trees. That face showing the warrior everyone knew he was; mouth wide, saliva dripping from his teeth like wild beast, axe high above his head. “Rrraaaaaah!” SKEWCK! Blade of Grato’s weapon embedded deeply in the nightmarish creature’s face. Or what Grato assumed to be the beast’s face as that is where all the teeth were.[/quote]

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SandyGunfox — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 16:45:31 -0500

While Cruizshef’s position gave him power, Charlie’s gave him even more power. While the sleek, modern black rifles of Cruizshef’s foreign bodyguards – so charitably contributed by the world’s modern liberal democracies – held power, their power was wasted. Pointed downwards in a safe direction as the men clustered protectively around the speaker. No rifle ever did any good pointed at the ground. Charlie’s own Dragunov sniper rifle wasn’t as modern as theirs, but it held infinitely more power in its current position, with the scope’s glowing reticle playing over Cruizshef’s heart.

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Josa — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 17:08:06 -0500

[quote]April chewed on the bread slowly. She looked at Preston, her eyes proving she had been asleep also, and she asked, “How’d you get this, and why does it taste like bleach?”[/quote]

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kcde — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 17:42:09 -0500

This exchange, from the very beginning: [quote]Will leaned in closer to the fire, half because he didn’t want to be overheard, and half because it was fucking freezing outside. “You sure this’ll work?” he asked Jack. “Of course it’s going to work.” There was that familiar flicker in his eyes, and Will was certain it wasn’t just a reflection off the flames. “When has a plan of mine ever failed?” “Every time,” Will said. “They fail every time.” “That,” Jack said, smirking, “would depend on your definition of ‘failure.’” “Getting punched in the face feels like a failure.”[/quote] UGH, I have so missed writing them as actual friends.

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SandyGunfox — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 18:44:10 -0500

[quote=kcde] “Every time,” Will said. “They fail every time.”[/quote] I read this in an amusingly dry tone, and laughed out loud.

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xXDeaths_AngelXx — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:00:13 -0500

[quote] "You can stop hitting [the car], you know? [The air conditioner] broke up somewhere near Nashville; four hours ago." "I'm not hitting it," I insisted. "I'm just patting it really, really hard."

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xXDeaths_AngelXx — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:01:15 -0500

That made me laugh so hard xD

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.harmony — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:07:01 -0500

I love this.

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MarcyT — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:51:17 -0500

[quote]The tradition was to have a suprise party for each person’s birthday done by the other two. However, since they did it every year, it really wasn’t a suprise anymore.[/quote]

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LizzasaurusRex — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:53:56 -0500

"This is our world. It might not be the world we began, but it’s the one we’re going to end. When flesh for flesh is traded in pound for pound ratio, when life and death is nothing but two sides of the same coin, that’s when we will call it done. That’s when we will lay down our heads to rest. We’ll look at the world, not the one we built, but the one we crumbled to the ground." It's the very first thing I wrote and I'm just so dang proud of it. ^_^

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spawnofpersephone — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 20:28:15 -0500

"Well, Cherry," he beamed as the wagon rolled along, "Let's hope the king has need of an adventuring mage and not just one to prepare him a salve for some boils."

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Arianna Erlaine — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 23:06:02 -0500

"Nothing." If her parents didn't already know, she wasn't going to tell them.

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ObiKimono — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 23:11:37 -0500

Ohhh. I very much like.

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ObiKimono — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 23:12:24 -0500

Seconded.

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Grahamdoh — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 06:34:16 -0500

"I hope you boy's know your history cause we're about to fight the battle of Gettysburg."

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YellowYoshi1 — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 10:39:11 -0500

“And in case you were wondering, no you don't have a 'No' option. The call knows where you live after all."

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KieRanaRan — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 10:54:25 -0500

[quote=]“He's not dead if that's what you mean," Barry replied, flexing his fingers, "but I definatley felt SOMETHING in there break." [/quote] Not great but hey, it's from my excerpt.

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DukeMaximum — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 11:06:12 -0500

[quote=]The Brigadier chuckled and leaned closer. "My boy, Hallmark doesn't make a card for what they'll do to you." [/quote]

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DukeMaximum — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 11:09:12 -0500

[quote=]I’d met men like him before, who thought that reading a book about a thing was the same as doing a thing, and would stubbornly argue with you about your first-hand experience. Men who believed that experience could be absorbed from the page by intellectual osmosis. You know, an arrogant prick. [/quote]

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HogansHero — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 13:28:22 -0500

[quote] Perhaps I never really forgot that terror I felt the day she was murdered. To see her hurt, to witness the light go from her eyes as she whispered for me to run and never look back...those are things no child should ever have to go through. No child should have to see his mother die. But I did.[/quote]

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ObiKimono — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 14:35:36 -0500

Oh, excellent line.

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Silence Dogood — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 15:30:06 -0500

HAHAHAHAHA! Now this is why I love to write. Thanks for inspiring me to get my butt back I gear. You, my friend, are awesome,

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amazonsei — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 15:52:05 -0500

"Oh Laaaawd!" the older lady sitting across from me shouts. "Lawd."

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amazonsei — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 15:53:29 -0500

interesting!

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TAMaxwell — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 18:25:48 -0500

[quote=] “You’re going to break my chair if you sit in it like that, Gabe,” Kate pulled up her sheets, holding them above her chest with one hand and stretching with the free one. “Good morning to you too, Sunshine. If I recall correctly, it was my money that bought this furniture, therefore, it would happen to be my chair and I’ll thank you to let me sit on it any which way I please." [/quote]

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Darbrashelle — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 18:28:23 -0500

Rex pored himself a glass of ale and took a long drink. “So, I had an interesting conversation with Kera earlier.” Leander raised his eyebrows. “She said that Jentian plans to exceed spending, and wants to continue to fund his border disputes with Kalalit.” Leander snorted. “His people are starving, and all he cares about is more land. What a coward. If he was serious, he would invade Kalalit directly instead of chipping away at the landscape.” Rex shrugged. “Perhaps he’s trying to capture outposts first.” Leander shook his head. “When it comes to useless outposts, Dunvegan is as unremarkable as it gets. It’s in the mountains and borders both Kalalit and Keota. I’m no strategist, but I can tell a worthless piece of land when I see it.” “Well, it could always be a ploy for more tributes.” Rex said. “Ah, yes. More additions to his harem and gold for his coffers.” “Our king is a man of insatiable appetites,” Rex reminded his friend. “His appetites are going to get a lot of good people killed.”

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shuyo — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 18:31:07 -0500

"His slicked-back voice wafted outward from the television screen like a serpentine line making its way across a desert plain, soothing, greasy. The kind of voice you ache to take out to dinner at a fancy restaurant and throw wine in its face."

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Pastwriter — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 18:57:22 -0500

"It was a maze of gravity-fall-outs, gravity-slides, gravitational trap doors, reverse gravity pools, null gravity rings, and much much more." i like gravity... but i also have this line: "The Academy was like my home now, its unblemished white walls going on for miles were more recognizable to me then my own front door."

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Shizuru1412 — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:22:09 -0500

V wore a blue colored blazer, with light blue shirt and red tie under it, and she also has unique features that make her, well, special. A real light blue colored cat ears and light blue colored cat tail. Z’s gaze follow the trail of V’s tails, that is back and forth, left to right, before she shakes her head. ‘That was indeed distracting...’ Z thought, before focusing on the blond in front of her. And this. “I can’t wait... To end everything...” V stated, before she touched her blue colored cat ears. “But, Z, You really are evil incarnate... The Omega from Alpha and Omega, indeed.” Arrggghh.. excuse me for the grammar, but I hope you get the gist of it. :3 Hmmph, character name is a character. xD

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mrfeek — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:25:09 -0500

Surely, there was no heiress here. But I had to check. My employers had drugged me, thrown me on a plane to Thailand, and bought me a nice suit. I felt like I owed them a visit to this brothel, at the very least.

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calirocker — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 21:43:33 -0500

I can't help but put a couple, to be honest... [quote] "I advise against this course of action, on the grounds that it may kill us all." [/quote] [quote] "You want an internship?" Eleanor called, from somewhere in the gloom. "Can you make coffee?" "I've been a student for four years now, what do you think?" "I think if you're lazy enough, you can survive for four years on tea and avoid having to clean a coffeemaker." "Damn." [/quote] [quote] "A word of advice, Fungie: Never talk down to her, even under stress. I made the unfortunate mistake of doing as you did when we were reviewing our sources at Aix and we were getting nowhere." "What happened, she take a piece out of you too?" "Multiple pieces, actually. She ripped my shotgun out of my hands and beat me over the head with it." [/quote]

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.harmony — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 22:12:30 -0500

His blood splatters an otherwise pristine copy of Hume's Treatise of Human Nature. This only makes her angrier.

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Feathers — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 23:29:42 -0500

First two lines for context. Yes, this is the start of a fight scene. [quote] Arthur’s first action was to trip. He fell arms flailing. One of his hands caught on the belt of the closest officer and in his scramble to haul himself back up, managed only to take the man’s pants with him. [/quote]

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El Santo — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 02:38:48 -0500

Not the greatest buuuuttt: "You know the cruelest part about it? We're not even from Maryland. And yet everyone on the online message boards still won't stop asking me how the Ravens are going to do this year. What the hell are the Ravens?" "It's a football team, I think," Ben said. "Some of my co-workers are into fantasy football," he added, apologetically. "That's disappointing," Cecily said. "I suspected, but I thought that it sounded too poetic to be attributed to a sport where beefy guys slam their bodies into one another. Do they have poetry readings there, I wonder?"

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Jeds Eh — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 05:09:16 -0500

That brings us to Mr. And Misses Massey’s shared obsession, shoes. The basement has a section dedicated entirely to their favourite shoes and Locklin’s second finest shoe rack, that the room was built around, the shoe room. They used the shoes in the mud room as a set of distraction shoes so when the Palm Springs shoe thief tries his luck at the Massey’s he will be laughed at by all the other shoe thieves for being in possession of a plethora of small dress shoes.

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nonight — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 08:04:10 -0500

"The second stood for a second as he watched the boy flee, then walked away before pulling out his phone." In terms of my plot line, this is my favourite sentence. But out of context, then it would have to be this one: "The best so far was skydiving with no parachute, and only a rubber dinghy, an pair of extra long plastic toy snakes, and a packet of paperclips."

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Elaine Dalton — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 20:25:03 -0500

"I think I must be going insane!"

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HarpGuy — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 04:04:12 -0500

"Arrrr..." said the captain, "Boo!"

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nbcabaniss — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 04:26:46 -0500

Right now I'm partial to this one: "The automatics returned fire, a pair of muzzle flashes licked the darkness in quick succession, strobing the shadows around them. The men fell by the score, their white robes stained red." I'll probably read it again in about a year and hate myself.

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E.C. Oberon — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 22:12:05 -0500

My favorite so far would have to be: "So what are you, exactly? Aside from the obvious, I mean. Unless you aren't a gril because that would be pretty awkward. I'm pretty sure that you /are/ a girl. You have the hair and the eyes and the . . . well, you know." /Is he being serious? I wish I could tell if he was being serious or not./ Not necessarily the best, but I snickered in class. That must count for something.

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redram355 — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 23:08:18 -0500

[quote] "It's like a pregnant woman driving a forklift. There's something inherently wrong about it, but you can't quite figure out what." [/quote]

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MandyBroughton — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 17:14:34 -0500

@redram355 As a woman who regularly drove a tractor while nine months pregnant, please let me know when you find out what is inherently wrong with it! (-= Drove it to launch boat so hubby could ski... my center of gravity had shifted so I didn't ski. My line... "Have you called his doctor?" I asked. I really didn't need for the old man to have a heart attack while I was here. "No, we called the lawyer.” "Lawyer? Great, I'm sure he can treat a heart attack."

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Armaita — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 18:45:34 -0500

*after dodging a poisoned dart, chasing the dart-thrower, and finding village of the attacker, Yanic levels a curse at the village that will cause their deaths if they do not cooperate* "If several or all of them died from the curse due to their own obstinance—mentally, Yanic shrugged—at least there would be fewer people throwing darts at him."

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mlindbloom — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 19:10:16 -0500

"She stared at herself in the mirror, ignoring the water dripping down her cheeks like fat tears. There was no questioning it – either she was completely losing her mind, or she was being stalked by a real angel."

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Iron Petrichor — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 23:39:35 -0600

It's kind of a scene more than a line, but I still love it all the same: [i] When Jaina finally lay dead at his feet, Ferviss turned with a grunt of satisfaction, his neck still flushed and pulsing with fury. The same murderous glint was now apparent once more, as he glared at Lucian, livid. “It’s time for you to grow up, boy.” Lucian did. Lucian’s first kill was a good one.[/i] (Yeh, I know Ferviss is an odd name. Probably one of the most odd that I've used. Forgive my naming transgressions. xD)

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Feathers — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 10:36:17 -0600

[quote] The plane tumbled through the air like a drunken acrobat. [/quote]

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lmburr — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 12:10:31 -0600

Eric returned to washing, and they worked in silence for a while. “Why?” Eric finally said. “Why do you have to know what’s out there?” “Don’t you ever wonder?” Jordan asked, almost pleading. “There are places out there, and people living in those places. Don’t you ever wonder what kinds of stories they might have to tell? What kinds of things they could teach us?” “I do. But Howell is a good place. And there are people here who have things to teach us.” Eric said. “No, no.” Jordan shook his head. “It’s not the same. These are people like us. They’re the people that we’ll grow up to be if we stay here forever. That man, Denby, told me about elves. Elves, Eric.” “Everyone knows elves aren’t real.” Eric said. “That’s what I told him, but he said he’d seen an elf. Well, at least one, I don’t know if he had seen more. Anyway, who are you to disprove him if you haven’t searched the world for elves?” Eric opened his mouth to speak, then shut it again. Finally, he spoke: “So is that what I’m supposed to tell your parents when they ask me where you’ve run off to? That you’ve gone south to look for the elves?”

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Sprakit — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 13:46:26 -0600

[quote=SandyGunfox] [quote=kcde] “Every time,” Will said. “They fail every time.”[/quote] I read this in an amusingly dry tone, and laughed out loud. [/quote] Same!!

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Sprakit — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 13:47:37 -0600

[quote=LizzasaurusRex] "This is our world. It might not be the world we began, but it’s the one we’re going to end. When flesh for flesh is traded in pound for pound ratio, when life and death is nothing but two sides of the same coin, that’s when we will call it done. That’s when we will lay down our heads to rest. We’ll look at the world, not the one we built, but the one we crumbled to the ground." It's the very first thing I wrote and I'm just so dang proud of it. ^_^ [/quote] This makes me think of Walking Dead and I get all warm inside. GREAT visual!

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Sprakit — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 14:00:04 -0600

Unfortunately I feel that most everything I have written falls between complete crap and drivel. This was the only gem I found: [quote] Elle was speechless. She took in a quick breath before Cross's lips met hers. She squeezed his hands as they kissed. "I've wanted to do that for a long time now," Cross said after he pulled back. Elle looked at him, not knowing how to proceed. "My legs are cold." [/quote]

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ar_cummings — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 16:18:09 -0600

Sophie's stomach was empty and it was a fortunate thing too. Otherwise she feared she'd dirty Mr. Wayne's lovely black leather carriage seat. That's a whole other kind of adventure. You kind of have to feel bad for Mr. Wayne's driver...

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Get_It_Written — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 17:14:36 -0600

"What should I do?" I yelled as the bullets rained down around us. "Do a barrel roll!" he shouted back, and I had trouble restraining myself to not beat him over the head with something solid.

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fojazz — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 18:23:05 -0600

Here's a favorite bit from my opening chapter... ===== The man had once been handsome. For decades his dark, intense eyes had flashed from gaudy posters and brightly lit marquees, the enigmatic half-smile on his painted face beckoning the masses to step inside. Come and see wonders, it said. Come and be astonished. Watch me defy Death. Time had not diminished the power of those mesmerizing eyes, but it had taken its toll on the rest. The old man’s hands, gnarled and leathery, gripped the windowsill with white knuckles, as if to let go would mean falling into a fathomless abyss. The jet-black, shining hair of the posters was now white and stringy, the lines of his face deeply etched and slightly sagging, as if they could no longer bear the weight of life.

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Mowo64 — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 19:48:20 -0600

“Well, chasing down answers to life is often a rather tricky business… it’s quite a bit like herding cats—if you’ve ever tried such an impossible feat.” Spencer couldn’t help but roll his eyes at the nonsense she was spitting at him. “But, also quite like cats, if you sit still for a while, the answers you seek may very well come right to you.” The way this character thinks just always cracks me up. I love her so much. :)

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ferriswheeljunkie — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 13:38:29 -0600

She needed an megaphone, so she was buying a gun.

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InconceivableArcher — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 17:25:14 -0600

“Considering we just ziplined between two buildings over a thirty foot drop, one might think a spinny chair wouldn’t be that exciting.”

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ameliaredwards — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:17:32 -0600

“You saved me, sheep”, he said, getting up and patting it on the side. The sheep looked up at him with soulful eyes. “Mehhh”.

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ameliaredwards — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:20:43 -0600

Haha, this one really really made me laugh. Excellent use of meme/pop culture.

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soniclaugh — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 22:33:57 -0600

May not be my best line, but it's certainly my favorite: "Ah, hell. He had already lost his mind. Why not play along?"

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RogueToken — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 20:21:12 -0600

“No. Well, yes and no. Consider me crazy until I start making sense” Always better without context

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sauron — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 11:17:52 -0600

The SBAR-7’s suppressor contained the expanding gasses that would normally make a loud crack, and the bullet exited the barrel at a sub-sonic speed, so no sonic boom sounded. But the noise of the metal slide ejecting one cartridge and chambering a second round made a noise that was, to Talmore’s ears, the equivalent of a blast of thunder. Equally loud was the clatter of the guard’s MAG-1 carbine as it fell from his lifeless fingers onto the rocky ground. Yeah... I know it's not a line, but it's my favorite paragraph.

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Smartiez101 — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 12:23:35 -0600

'But now I can control my powers, and intend to use them to get out of this crappy place. I'm going to save everyone from these stupid 'do gooders.'' Another, longer one. :) '“How many guards are there?” I guessed, assuming she’d say, ‘oh, just a couple.’ “Just a couple thousand,” Lea shrugged. I gaped at her for a second before realizing I looked really stupid. “You know, with the Institute of Discovery above us.” “Since when has there been an institute above us?” I demanded, crossing my arms. My hands were cold and clammy, I realized, and wiped them on my shorts. “Since forever and ever,” Lea rolled her eyes. “When hasn’t there been an institute above us? They use people to test on instead of rats, and just ship them down here when there are too many failures.” “Whoa, wait, what? How can nobody have noticed this? It has to be illegal!” My eyes kept getting wider until they hurt, and I brought them back to normal size. “Well, duh. Most people know what’s going on down here. The only reason the government doesn’t is because the Institute has contacts in the CIA and FBI who give them good cover-ups. You could take over a country with enough contacts and cover-ups,” Lea explained, sighing. “And why does a nine-year-old know all this information?” I asked, laughing. I stroked her cheek for a second and my smile faded away. “You’re not going to use it…are you? You’d be caught, it’s just like you told me. Trying to escape is suicide. Trying to escape is like…like…I don’t know, but it's like something.”'

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bentpiton — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 14:27:34 -0600

There are a lot of bad ways to wake up, Frederico Arias thought, staring at the two very rough-looking men pointing guns at him and his brother, but this has to be one of the worst.

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CallMeMara — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 17:33:00 -0600

"and this matters because my reputation will be ruined if anybeast sees me in the same dress twice?"

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CallMeMara — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 17:34:10 -0600

awwww :)

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NobleHeart — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 21:27:42 -0600

I have two that I like a lot, for different reasons. [quote] “They can’t be that bad,” he said as Vitaly grew quieter. They must have been coming upon the first room whose occupant they must greet. “They’re not,” Vitaly said a little less than enthusiastically. Then: “Although, they’re breathing, so that tends to count against them.” And, now she wasn’t positive about this one, but Lady Rowena would be willing to stake her finest jewelry on it, that Miss Morgana, the voyage’s patron beautiful maid (“because every voyage has one, you know”) as it were, was with-child – “something about the way she kept eying the pork, then shifting her gaze suddenly to the baked apples, as though she wanted to have them both together.” [/quote]

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NobleHeart — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 22:05:30 -0600

Oops, didn't mean to reply to that. Oh well - sorry!

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Smartiez101 — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 07:23:53 -0600

Okay, I changed mine, sorry people... [quote]“Yeah, you could beat her up with one hand tied behind your back if you wanted to,” Lea closed her eyes and nodded her head vigorously. Okay, so Lea was missing something. Maybe the fact that Betty had /super strength/ had skipped her mind? Or that Betty went to the gym /every day/ was above her head too. What about the fact that Betty had /beaten up a thirty two year old man/ with one hand tied behind her back…literally? Had she forgotten about that too?[/quote]

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femmeke830 — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 18:49:54 -0600

"As her eyes fixed upon the feeble pair, Lillian twisted her lips in an inscrutable smile that unnerved both of her targets and she quickened her confident pace. Both men admired her splendor, which generally inspired a series of contrasting emotions to surge through each who beheld her. One might feel simultaneously charmed and emasculated, enchanted and uneasy, and intimidated and envious all in a single moment. Lillian was keenly aware of her impact and watched while Tim and Phin mentally tallied the items on her person that could be used violently. Both were partially relieved by her smile but greeted her with unnecessary warmth for good measure." She bad ass.

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AaronPaulos — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 13:20:05 -0600

As I entered the room, people cowered, backing against the walls and trying to hide from my view. They knew that I had telekinesis at this point, and they must have known what I was capable of. /I’m not the bad guy here,/ I wanted to tell them, though they wouldn’t understand. /I’m not going to hurt any of you right now, no matter how much you deserve it in my eyes. Don’t be afraid./

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chessapphire — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 13:41:36 -0600

Whoops; I just started a thread like this in the 20s forum. Guess I didn't need to . . . well, here's a part I like that I've written since then^^ That night, I dreamed of Alexander again. We were on a giant glass chessboard, and he was a knight, sitting on the back of a prancing glass horse. I’m pretty sure I was a pawn, because I was standing in the front row holding a spear. He looked the same as he had in the last dream, with his coat and top hat and big buckled boots, wearing gloves and that same eye patch. And, like in the last dream, he seemed to have all four limbs. “So, you’re awake,” he said. “No,” I replied. “I’m pretty sure I’m dreaming.”

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sunnisarie — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 16:43:11 -0600

*Hitler?!?* “What year is this?” asked Jessica, half afraid of the answer. “1941.” Her new friend answered. “You really don’t remember anything, do you?” Jessica just leaned back and shook her head. “I could’ve sworn I was in Russia; and it wasn’t 1941.” or She still wasn’t exactly sure of where she had come from, but she knew that people didn’t look like this back ‘home.’

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TortugaRachel — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 17:21:20 -0600

I just wrote this bit and realized this character seriously scares me: A shrill, enraged scream sprang from Castina’s throat, the sound of it torrential and oppressive as she turned and stomped into the sitting room. “She cannot take my child,” the raven haired woman bellowed at the shelves lined with books and the tapestries lining the walls. The sheer volume of her voice caused the glass in the window panes to reverberate as she fumed and stalked around the room, picking up trinkets and ornaments, heaving them around the room at anything that she felt deserved a sound pummeling. Castina’s temper continued to flare for a long while, keeping the entire household away from the room. Only Seaven dared to stay nearby, waiting just inside the door from the entrance hall, ducking the barrage more than once. At one point he had tried to calm her, his voice tranquil and serene, but that had been reciprocated with an ornamental shield careening in his direction followed closely by an antique saber that had narrowly missed his head and still sat impaled in the doorframe, a lasting reminder to keep his tongue and thoughts to himself for the time being.

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ferriswheeljunkie — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 20:00:17 -0600

“Home again, home again, Jiggity jig.” He smiled and spit out a tooth.

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DJR_tlof — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 20:27:29 -0600

'Mister, I really wish we could have been partners.'

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mle160 — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 09:54:49 -0600

Personaly, I find this very amusing - specufculy because the person who picked out this line is also amusing and HATES choclate: Kara blushed, “You like chocolate?” she asked, "Uh, duh? Who wouldn’t?” I said matter-of-factly.

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mle160 — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 09:55:09 -0600

specificly*

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Smartiez101 — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 13:06:18 -0600

“Don’t ask me, all I know is, I wouldn’t waste my time on some inadaptable crap like you anyways,” I roared. “I’ve finished my paper, if you don’t mind, I will be going to talk to some more innocent, smarter minds such as myself!” Okay, it's probably not the best, but it's my favorite. my FMC is getting into an argument with a scientist (who pretty much rule this prison she lives in). He wanted to punish her for yelling at him by having her come to his room that night (for extra cleanup, nothing serious). Kristen takes it the wrong way, and they start roaring back and forth.

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Feathers — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 19:08:49 -0600

Ok, this is more than a line, but I'm rather proud of it. [quote] “My name is Professor Wickensnub,” he said calmly, raising his hands to show he meant no harm. “I had heard a rumor that all the old books were still in this library and wanted to take a look in hopes that something here could help me in my quest.” “The Professor Wickensnub?” the man asked, sounding doubtful. “Yes.” “The man who saved the Dunberry Province from the wasteland spider epidemic?” “The same.” “The man who recovered the treasure of Count Von Fronderg from the lost city of Redding and escaped from the pBebian tribe that was guarding it without a scratch?” “That would be me.” “The man who once fought off a pack of wolves with nothing but a turkey sandwich and a cup of tea?” “It was a ham sandwich actually. People always get that wrong.” The man fired and a sharp pain took hold of the professor’s shoulder. He glanced down and pulled out the dart feeling suddenly woozy. The last thing he remembered before everything went black was the man standing over him looking puzzled and hearing, “Hmm, and here I was half expecting you to dodge that.” [/quote]

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jojogogo7333 — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 22:45:43 -0600

Pretty proud of this seeing as I just wrote it today :D Sometimes I try to imagine how the world used to be when man woke up every morning to a blazing red horizon full of possibilities and bursting with freedom. How they’d bound from their doorsteps with smiles on their faces as birds sang in the new day. Now we wake to the sound of a siren and a bleak sun rising in a pale blue sky. Birds disappeared from the Empire long before I was born. They flew off to somewhere safe leaving us to mourn their passing and envy their flight.

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DJR_tlof — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 10:18:49 -0600

“But my momma always said that when the good Lord was handing out smarts, I was up a tree eating apples.”

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sewerrat — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 20:01:01 -0600

I laughed so hard at this.

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JuniorFrenzySista — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 22:48:03 -0600

“I just lost The Game,” Ben explained. “Four weeks. Record.” The wide eyes went even wider if possible and Andru’s grip on his hand tightened. “Just get me out,” he hissed. With a disheartened look, Ben continued to pull and in almost no time at all, Andru was up. The men sat for a moment, Ben apparently lamenting while Andru got his breath back and wrestled the urge to murder Ben under control. Finally, he hit him. “Ouch! What was that for?” “We’re trying to rescue Abigail, we’re in the middle of the Mafia’s nice little HQ which is filled with people who would love to catch us and I was hanging from a grate and you were worried about The Game?” A little more than a line but it makes more sense this way. Message: ALRIGHT YOU BASTARDS WHICH ONE OF YOU CHANGED MY RINGTONE TO ‘BABY’ AND ALL MY CONTACTS TO ‘SOME GUY I FUCKED’ Also need someone to hack this system Ip: 192.168.0.203 Pass: fishfingers And Abys hurt need help asap italy 2km N 3km E naples. Old centre My MC has a seriously screwed up sense of priorities.

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Wilson3sd — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 08:46:39 -0600

"This," he said, circling himself with a gesture, "doesn't get wet. Get on that shit, Nat, and make it snappy."

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ObiKimono — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 08:55:56 -0600

"Clear!" Context is too long to put in here. It involved a mook asking my MC if he had any last words, and a defibrillator.

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Bladesinger — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 20:12:12 -0600

Its really only the last line, but you need most of the rest for the context: "Sarn! Where are they! Get back here, you insolent whelp!" Like hell I was. If there was one thing I learned from being apprenticed to the Bladesinger, it was that there is a small twitch that he gets before he starts wailing on me. Its a good thing to know. "Sarn! If you value your life, you'll get back here and take it like a man!" "You know, master, for some reason I don't feel like getting bruised today. I don't know why. If you want some, though......" With that, I suddenly pivoted on one foot, at the same time drawing Raven. I had progressed enough in my training to forge my own named blade, and Raven was the result. With a two foot hilt, she handles like a quarterstaff, while still having the utility of a shortsword. She didn't yet have a singing blade, but then again my master was still around for me to torment. I finished my turn, and stood in the center of the path, waiting for the human equivalent of a firestorm from hell to arrive. "Sarn, where the blazes did you hide my clothes?

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MarcyT — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 10:20:15 -0600

“Apparantly, holding a governor’s daughter hostage is frowned upon.”

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Will64 — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 15:23:23 -0600

"Ah, how is Ian these days?" "He's a serial killer." "Ah, Ian, that rascal!"

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kcde — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 15:59:52 -0600

You made me lose. I hate you.

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kcde — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 16:01:11 -0600

[quote]“Now, come on, I didn’t come here to give you some stupid fucking speech about how change is good. Are you seriously going to study physics, or do you want to go set off fireworks outside the old folks’ home?”[/quote] Dear Jack Malarkey, Never change. Love, me.

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kcde — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 16:03:47 -0600

That. Is. Bitchin'.

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DJR_tlof — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 19:50:25 -0600

Then the stranger recognized what had been needling at his flesh earlier. He knew now what the source of the wrongness was and that his demons had found him.

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AaronPaulos — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 10:43:40 -0600

"God, this is the cheesiest ‘superhero verse supervillain’ argument ever.”

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DJR_tlof — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 15:53:00 -0600

Note: Cannon is my MC hero and Raith is the main villain. “I’m gonna pay you back for this,” said Cannon. “No, you ain’t,” said Raith and snapped bones in Cannon’s neck.

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Feathers — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 23:08:05 -0600

For once, here is a line that is better without context. [quote] Sure enough: elephants. [/quote]

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MarcyT — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 19:38:01 -0600

“I fell in a horse trough, saving a girl’s life. Long story.”

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hayleyduck — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 21:05:47 -0600

My favorite paragraph from my favorite scene yet: Bathed in the flickering light of the fire, the girl struck her tambourine. She danced half in shadow, her bare feet soundless on the soft ground. She moved slowly and sinuously at first, though her movements picked up speed with the rising tempo. Gerard was not sure if the song was simply familiar to those around him or if they were simply following the beat, listening as the song become more forceful, pushing harder. It seemed to command the gypsy in her dance, her eyes closed as the music led her. The crowd was chanting, repeating one simple sound to the melody. He found himself unable to take his eyes away as even the fire beside the girl seemed to grow in force and power, its flames reaching up like tongues of golden fire to taste the blackness of the sky.

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Elly With A Why — Mon, 12 Dec 2011 13:00:16 -0600

'He just needed something to get rid of the crab.' There's a sentence that needs a context...

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Espana — Wed, 14 Dec 2011 13:15:09 -0600

From Kole to Israel: "Hey Israel... with how you can summon the dead and all... what if you summon one of the people you'd manipulated so badly that they eventually couldn't take it any longer and committed suicide?" No context needed for THAT one. XD

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stingray306 — Sun, 12 Feb 2012 16:40:14 -0600

"Men are the Dreams of a Shadow..."

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Kittyhawk — Mon, 13 Feb 2012 08:03:46 -0600

(Sorry, this is still in script format- but it is one of my favorites so far.) Donna: “Stop bouncin' off the walls.” Jess: “There are no walls, and I object to the term 'bouncing'. I am on dog watch, patrolling this scurvy deck and keeping a weather eye open for King's Men or rival gents of fortune.” Donna: “Oh, shut it before I make you walk the plank.” Jess: “Do we even have a plank?” Donna: “We have an ironing board.” Jess: “That's somewhat less epic.”

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Typing Chimp — Mon, 20 Feb 2012 21:56:26 -0600

"Detective, let me point out something you may have missed when you glossed over my file. Twelve years in the Marines, as a Scout Sniper, trained in anti-interrogation techniques. Now that we have that out of the way, exactly how long do you need to realize your wasting your time?" He said flatly, as if he had just explained the sky is blue and water is wet. "I don't need you to talk, Marine. I just needed some place to tuck you out of the way while I search everything you own for the murder weapon." Laughs, "So what are you going to do with the other twenty three hours and fifty minutes you can legally hold me?" The marine put on an amused smile. Annoyed. "The harder you hide the evidence the easier it will be to convict you when I find it." The marine smirked. "Did you pack a sleeping bag, might need it at the rate you're going." "Your just wasting my time." Disappointed, "That was quicker than I expected."

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mle160 — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 10:27:37 -0600

Ok, so I defiently think that this really is one of my funniest dialouges yet: “Dude, do you ever stop snoring?” It was about twenty minutes since the last time we talked, and the old couple in front of us ended up getting mad after we had a little “accident” with one of Johnny’s “toys”. “This is the coolest thing ever since Pop-Tarts!” I remembered Johnny saying. “You mean colored crap? How can you eat such a piece of garbage, you toaster strudel wannabe?” I laughed at Talia’s response. “You mean that little dough man with the little chef hat? He’s probably some sort of addict! Pills-bury? Maybe his name should be changed to, Mr. Staypuff.” Ok, this was getting hysterical. “Maybe you should change your name to Ima Dooffus!” For the rest of the ride, Johnny decided he would rather stick dog food down his throat then listen about Toaster Strudels. Please: DO TELL about what you think!