What is the best sentence you wrote today?

raspberrymoon — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 12:27:38 -0500

I saw this somewhere else and thought it might be fun. Who knows, we might have a bestseller by the end of the month.

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Catana — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 12:52:00 -0500

"It was no secret, hadn’t been a secret even when he was growing up, that the news was censored, and now that he was seeing the reality of the Reclamation and Restoration Corp, even if only a tiny corner so far, he reconsidered his future."

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Halili Akoma — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 13:52:35 -0500

One char saying "You don't know much about horses do you?" then the main saying "I know they're delicious."

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cecilia_peartree — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 14:52:08 -0500

I think this is my favourite so far: There must be a self-help book somewhere that told you how to go about replacing a man when the first one had unaccountably gone off to Gdansk with some blonde floozy.

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reey — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 14:54:11 -0500

"When I moved closer and discerned dark liquid surrounding the head of the human, I recognized that this was not proper, not for an Earth person or even a Milgarian; bodily fluids should, for the most part, remain within the body."

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tzor — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 14:55:00 -0500

“After you die a few times,” Kenny replied, “you learn to be a ‘light’ sleeper.”

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 15:07:16 -0500

(I want to read all of your novels. Such great starts. Here's my own offering. Pretty lame but it sets up the scene. LOL) For good measure I gave another loud sniff and said, “Well, how would you feel if you had just inherited a dog that you had only met once and that you absolutely, whole-heartedly, couldn’t stand?”

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Timkford — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 15:12:04 -0500

"I can take us anywhere, anytime and we can be anything we want to be." It's my opening sentence - It's taken me most of today - was it worth it do you think?

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prospero2 — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 17:17:51 -0500

The only builder ever to finish on time was Noah.

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Aventurine — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 18:53:19 -0500

Loving all your sentences, here's mine. As she stood on the cliff, she heard a faint humming drifting up from the void below......

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maxlyte — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 19:19:11 -0500

Joe scratched his itchy armpits through his tee-shirt, burped beerily and lifted his leg to let out a fart. He grinned, shook his leg as if it had bells on and bent over to grab the waste basket to put the beer bottles in.

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waterloon — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 20:11:20 -0500

Wow, I want to read all these potential best-sellers! "She would have given her sister the moon if Gileha had asked for it. This was no great sacrifice on her part, to share one last sunrise with her."

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BryanMc — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 20:37:36 -0500

"He watched the dust as it danced about in a curious sunbeam that had found a way in between the slats"

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Kat Gentian — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 21:50:16 -0500

Great sentences! Here's mine. "We were all professional, whether we showed up for work in a suit and tie or shorts and sneakers with an xkcd cartoon on our t-shirt."

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taleweaver — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 22:05:34 -0500

How wild an idea, how free from the world’s impoverished state, to travel in a car!

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benjan — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 23:16:50 -0500

My sentence breaks quite a few writing rules, but I like it: There was hardly a difference between the real Chunky and the rock he had been turned into.

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Siouxxie — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 01:28:43 -0500

"The letter arrived on the first day of the end of the world." or.... "The letter arrived on the day the world first began to implode." as you can see, i don't even like my first sentence. haha but no, it's not a dystopian novel. ;-)

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Timkford — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 14:46:55 -0500

The pitchfork was motionless on the floor, looking quite harmless in a sharp and stabby sort of way.

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Sereana — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 15:06:27 -0500

She shuddered at the thought of him touching her let alone . . . other things.

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Luna54 — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 16:28:03 -0500

"This side of my eyelids the world is red"

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raspberrymoon — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 16:33:39 -0500

(These sentences are just too grand. However, I’m afraid to think where some of them are leading. ROFL. Here’s my offering for today.) "Wait a minute, what do you mean you’re afraid of dogs? You were a marine biologist in your past life. Before you died you played with jelly fish and sharks, how can you possibly be afraid of a dog now?”

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horanel — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 19:33:35 -0500

Yet Max could see it for what it was, a wan offering of fatherly love, so rarely expressed that it was difficult for Butch to show him in any other way than this murky pantomime.

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bernie_noble — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:10:18 -0500

[MMC/Husband] would be leaving his monthly Misuracaucas meeting soon -- this being an event where he and his peers drank in moderation as befit their position and probity, congratulated each other profusely on their wisdom, their aesthetic finesse, their devotion to their calling, and eventually floated home on clouds of self regard.

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MargoMcP — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:27:57 -0500

Mother always said I was too willful to marry, no man would have me.

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MargoMcP — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:30:06 -0500

I wish I knew what this Harriet died from. I have Harriet Gillett’s death certificate but dying before Queen Victoria came to the throne, all those men in charge, no one thought of practical sociological issues. Sure there was a long-time War on and statistics were beginning to be thought of in a way relevant to its needs but I think men are slower to see the human connections and needs than women are. Harriet and I could probably have a meaningful conversation whereas my brothers and hers would have a hard time of it, despite all the men being well travelled, ship- and war-knowledgeable.

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writerwoman — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:36:48 -0500

"Money ain't about nuthin' in the face of love," my elderly Aunt Ada used to say.

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Doug Story — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 20:57:18 -0500

“ I then had to loud the jukebox and no TV the old men drunks out of ”afternooning” here."

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krudyard — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 21:47:49 -0500

"I think my eyes are melting."

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Elicia — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 22:02:14 -0500

“What's going on?” “Either we're going to explode, or we're being boarded.”

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kyahpearl — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 23:44:42 -0500

It was dialogue between the main characters (set in 1870): "In every life a little pain must fall." "Not pain, RAIN! And damned if we haven't been rained on enough today, don't you reckon?"

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jonrkc — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 01:27:40 -0500

(We're expected to write _sentences_?! Now I find out...)

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goldberry — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 08:31:53 -0500

A round, furry body with feathery red antennae, the heavy moth struggled around Anna's fingers. Unbalanced and awkward, the one bent wing kept it from flying away. Later Anna awakened from her sleep, afraid of being alone in the dark. She slipped down the hallway, one arm flapping uselessly in the dark; a creature of disaster, alone and needy. Sorry it's not just one sentence.

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bonnie824 — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 10:01:33 -0500

At this reminder that it was once again their turn to be "parents" to the red headed demon twins, she gave up all hope of getting to any kind of zone or happy place, floated down, and reformed herself.

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Timkford — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 12:24:43 -0500

"So you're telling me that was Lawrence of Arabia's bike that we just stole?"

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 12:57:52 -0500

I’m having a hard time here because I want to add comments to everyone’s posts. Some of them made me laugh. Some peaked my interest (is that the right word?). Some have sent me off with a plot bunny. But, if I comment on every sentence(s), I won’t get my own writing done. So, please forgive me for just saying to everyone all at once “please keep the sentences coming.” Happy Writing

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Sereana — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 13:38:47 -0500

She walked to the fire and hoped it would dispell the chill that permeated her body and threatened to deaden her soul.

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Siouxxie — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 16:13:58 -0500

All those years of telling parents their children were going to die, believing I’d been so compassionate, when I didn’t have a clue, I couldn’t even have imagined the depth of pain, the numbness sliding to nothingness, the hole in your soul where your child should be, the knowing with absolute certainty that you could not go on, there was no reason to go on...to continue living was a cruel joke perpetrated by a merciless God.

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deddragoninn — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 17:55:37 -0500

Don't really know what I'd be looking for, maybe a big sign that says "I am a Freakin' Mermaid!"

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 18:07:48 -0500

She then turned around and said, “How many of those have you had anyway?” Whee, she thought I was drunk. Well, that was better than thinking I was crazy.

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Stixx — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 19:29:03 -0500

A single drop of Winter Beige number 672 fell from his motionless brush to splatter on the tip of his black sneaker.

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Novel by Ms Playful — Thu, 03 Nov 2011 19:50:06 -0500

So I asked her what happened when a man and woman had sex and got stuck together like those two dogs and the doorbell rang?

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chriscoonen — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 07:16:58 -0500

"lick my boot you worm"

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goldberry — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 10:27:37 -0500

Dark roots were sprawled on the spongy ground. Some seem to pulse and glisten in the moonlights and she strained her eyes to discern between the roots and the smooth, cool snakes that lay intertwined on the sleeping earth.

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goldberry — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 11:00:21 -0500

oops, I meant moonlight, not moonlights, DOH

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RutaBaker — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 12:35:49 -0500

"I showed him some eggs hoping for a nod or some indication that eggs would be fine, but he politely looked at the box of eggs, as if he were doing me a favor, and then went back to petting cats."

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Timkford — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 15:46:55 -0500

"Guy, I don't really know this works, but I think I have messed up the time-space continuum in a story-line cum virtual-real world sort of way - if you know what i mean"

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raspberrymoon — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 16:42:03 -0500

Sex, and boots covered with worms, and roots in the moonlight, and eggs in a time-space continuum. This is all making sense to me. Either I have been writing too long or we have a bestseller on our hands. (I haven't written my best line yet today so will post again later.)

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Fiona W — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 17:21:35 -0500

"Why why why are you here?!" they would shout right in her ear, over the constant spiky roar of moans, cries, yelps, orders from doctors, screams, wails, groans, orders from nurses, bubbling sounds, rattling sounds, orders from technicians, yelling, squealing, chortling, sobbing, metallic noises, beeping noises, ripping-plastic ripping-paper ripping-cloth noises of sterile wrapping being removed from medical equipment—all of these sounds bouncing off the tile walls and caroming around in the space between the people and objects like so many pool balls in the hot humid blood-smelling fear-smelling pain-smelling atmosphere.

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raspberrymoon — Fri, 04 Nov 2011 20:43:22 -0500

“Listen Elmer – uh Mr. Richardson – I am not bound by her Will. I bet Muffy would just love it in your office. She likes chewing on couch pillows.”

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benjan — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 00:14:37 -0500

I have 2 sets that I liked today: "Who better to present his case to the courts than himself, a man well-versed in the research and one that he trusted implicitly?" and "On the other hand, had Max grown to be a foot taller, he would have been a major god among men. As he stood now, he was merely a minor god with one hell of a major chip on his shoulder."

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WalkTheDog — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 13:00:05 -0500

"Phillip was naked except for his tie. He stood in front of the bathroom mirror talking to himself ---his penis and his Ralph Lauren each swaying from side to side as he looked into his own eyes and then nodded his head for emphasis." ---Okay -- that was two sentences. But they got me started on a session of INTERESTING writing... the first exciting session I have had in 5 days and 8000 words. What was the rest of it? Warm-up?

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Kataja — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 16:31:12 -0500

"He was whistling a bit out of tune. The blackbird singing its arias "this is my revir" and "hey, cutie, how about a nest together" gave a bit sour puff. Oh, that singer would not compete for the lovely blackbird maidens." Lousy translation, sorry...

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somberg — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 16:34:51 -0500

But Sam was the kind of guy who didn’t necessarily need to be sure of anything in order to be absolutely certain of it.

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 19:40:37 -0500

(everyone else's sound so interesting that mine seems pretty tame. But, this was one of those days that I had to do all that background stuff in order to tie the story together.) It was going to be a pretty stiff order proving that Julia Richardson was still alive, but I had a few thoughts about that in my head.

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goldberry — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 21:12:04 -0500

Kelp, that’s what it reminded her of; the sensation of kelp in her mouth, rubbery and thick.

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benjan — Sat, 05 Nov 2011 23:37:21 -0500

“He’s been in bed with a number of she-devils, but I don’t think he’s ever been in bed with the big guy himself.”

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Kat Gentian — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 00:03:40 -0500

I'm finally caught up reading this thread. Everyone is doing so well!! Here's my sentences from yesterday: The server was a twenty-something woman with neon pink stripes in her bleached blond hair and skin that looked like it had never seen a beam of sunlight. “You ready here?” Her name tag said Sunshine. And today: The only thing in the fridge was light. The freezer didn’t even have the light. Least they could have done was leave me a six pack.

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Timkford — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 07:21:23 -0600

Pretty well bombed out yesterday,but back in the flow today. It amused me that my fingers typed this "It sounds like you come from another planet - you're not American are you?"

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dancingfool — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 07:55:33 -0600

ugh... still feel like I'm setting the foundation of a normal-appearing world, so that I can throw in my monkey wrenches. So nothing very exciting yet. The best I can offer is "We expect the unexpected and unexplainable." But I promise more for the future. And RM -- I LOVE this thread!!! thank you thank you thank you, for starting it up!

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goldberry — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 11:34:42 -0600

Gently and with purpose the fungus haunted the shadows of Anna’s mind, signaling and directing its purpose behind the curtains of her needs and desires. Wet footsteps left patterns in the hallways of her awareness as smiling eyes peered through coquettish tendrils of thought. (clumsy at best but oh, so fun)

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ros77uk — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 12:14:52 -0600

Emotions chased each other across the younger woman’s face like clouds scudding across a sky in a high wind.

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deddragoninn — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 12:17:18 -0600

If the timeline works out right I can attend Rocket and Jenny Boom Boom's wedding ceremony, and snuff out an alien, all in one fun filled adventure.

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raspberrymoon — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 17:42:11 -0600

(This is my MC & ghost talking to each other.) “I want to know if someone has died.” He sarcastically answered, “Have you tried the obituaries?”

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Timkford — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 17:52:07 -0600

"The thing I still don't get is the talking seagull and the neutrinos."

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Elicia — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 18:34:23 -0600

“So when do we get to shuffle off the buffalo?” “I believe the old phrase is 'shuffle off TO buffalo.'” “Two buffalo?”

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dancingfool — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 19:24:38 -0600

ok... things are starting to move... Here is today's submission: "People always assume that Mac is a nickname — well it is, I suppose, but not what they expect. Mac is short for Macintosh, my brother Burnie’s full name is Braeburn, my sister Gale is actually Gala, and my brother Cortland - well that one’s self explanatory. Yes, my mother had a thing for apples."

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benjan — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 20:50:46 -0600

Once again I can't post just one sentence. lol Tom had been bored silly, since her expertise was Cantonian literature, a sub genre that was known for its monotone delivery and passive verb tense. When she had droned all 127 verses of “A Love Was Had By Him and Her, When Once The Sun Had Been Set,” he had gone home and blind dating had decided he to never do again.

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RutaBaker — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 12:50:19 -0600

. The waitress had mentioned the CIA, or maybe it was the FBI, in either case I’d let that go, deciding maybe she watched too much TV, besides there was enough to worry about without that concern.

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raspberrymoon — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 18:40:01 -0600

“Maria, I don’t want to offend you but I don’t have much time here. Are you telling me that a group of women are running a bordello in Room 310 of the Hilton?”

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Cynthus — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 18:48:38 -0600

Oh yea, the small-town gossip was already in full swing. He paid for the wine, took a sip of the coffee, and asked Mrs Moretti, "You have any idea what's going on with the Harrow case?"

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dancingfool — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 20:11:50 -0600

It would appear that both Alex Brooks and Cliff Brooks died instantaneously, and simultaneously, from the same lightning strike.

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benjan — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 22:13:43 -0600

He believed that as long as he was aware of Sal’s duplicitous nature, he would be fine and dismissed the man from his thoughts.

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Timkford — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 09:29:36 -0600

Jane Eyre fell to the floor, making Victoria jump, waking Mister Thomas with a start, and halting the conversation in the study. (Actually I wrote that on day one - it's posted just for Benjie

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intrikate — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 09:46:15 -0600

“Oh, come on, Nicole Elizabeth, you are not now expecting to get messages from pepper seeds.”

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Geolie — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:43:09 -0600

“George, it seems I have a tense problem,” she thinks as the front of her head tightens in illustration.

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:46:36 -0600

How could I ever forget Bull Dozer? He was the quarterback on the football team. As the saying goes he wasn’t the smartest monkey in the tree, but he was built like. . . well a bulldozer.

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Dixiegirl — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:47:03 -0600

My snobby British, psychic spy, Simon's statement regarding the safe room he had to go into: "Although the accommodations are well supplied and surprisingly adequate, they’re well below my level of comfort."

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benjan — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:59:34 -0600

My main character and his friend's reply: "Okay, maybe I don’t know if her name is Camille or even if she’s a she, but I’d like to think that if my apartment is going to be haunted, it’s haunted by a really hot girl ghost.” “A ghost? You’re off your rocker. I’d suggest you get back on it in the near future.”

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Kazbert — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 22:14:42 -0600

After a few more seconds, Agent Sheridan turned to Agent Allred. “The vehicle will move faster if you turn the engine on first.”

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Idahocat — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 01:30:10 -0600

She died suddenly when he was 15. He came home from school to find his dear mother sprawled on the kitchen floor, splattered cake batter around her, a spoon still in her hand, and a surprised look on her death-shrouded face. Her eyes were open. Open, like any moment she would jump up and say "I've lost the cake, now what will we do for dessert?"

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Walt3rd — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 01:32:46 -0600

"She picked up the rucksack and digging into it, discovered the dead man’s wallet." Very Minor character, minor incident in the story, but I just liked the sentence.

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chriscoonen — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 10:12:20 -0600

Everytime she makes a suicide pact with someone she always manages to survive while the other person dies, murderess by proxy or just good or bad luck?

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intrikate — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 11:25:51 -0600

“Welcome to the next episode of Hoarders, Antique Furniture edition.”

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RutaBaker — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 13:23:37 -0600

"When was that? 1988? 1989? So long ago, but one of those experiences that in the remembering seem like, if not yesterday then the day before."

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Sereana — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 14:36:38 -0600

I'd thought you both had lost your minds when you informed me you were moving to Arkansas.

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PowerUnit — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 18:06:38 -0600

"Talking about the Toronto Maple Leafs during the playoffs was like trying to teach immigrants English by reading them Shakespeare -- it’s pointless."

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raspberrymoon — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 19:05:20 -0600

(I think we have a bestseller here - Maybe we should name it 'the best lines from NaNo 2011'.) "I have some nice sherry we can have with dessert.” Oh no, I remembered the last time my mother had pour sherry for me. She’d ended up putting me to bed to sleep off the effects.

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Kazbert — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 20:35:57 -0600

Have a few I want to share. Keep in mind that they are from different parts of the story. It's NOT a continuous dialogue. * Chase thought that Missy was in good shape for 102. She didn’t look a day over … 85. * As soon as Missy hung up the phone she sprang – well, it was more like shuffled – into action. * Checking in once every half hour was dreadfully boring. The locators sometimes would seek after frivolous things during the sweep without telling anyone. The ones who flew over the South Pacific couldn’t resist looking for Amelia Earhart. If they found her, they kept mum. * Spirits can come and go and they please, but they don’t drag chains or wear bells around their necks. If Brooke returns later, there would be no way for her to let me know that she is here.

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Kazbert — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 20:42:46 -0600

I like many of the "best sentences" in this thread. It is too bad that there isn't a "Like" button (a point made by other Nanites).

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benjan — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 21:34:13 -0600

“Please, call me Mosey.” He grinned a toothless grin. “Forgot my teeth up in my room.”

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deddragoninn — Wed, 09 Nov 2011 21:42:04 -0600

I check over the Sarah Jones Clone (Hmm, that would be a great name for a rock band) but she doesn't have anything on her that I need to take with me.

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Siouxxie — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 01:44:12 -0600

daughter to pediatric oncologist mother: "Do you know when I was little, I used to pray, yes pray, like in, God, please give me cancer so my mother will pay attention to me.”

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 08:09:34 -0600

Greetings All - Looks like we got hit with the Spam Gnome during the night. I reported it but do Not click on the links - who knows where that would take you. LOL Happy Writing.

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dancingfool — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 08:15:13 -0600

On the first spam post... I actually (blushes in embarassment) thought someone had put that line in their story! I thought to myself... hmmm, that's not a very good line. But then I figured it out. Duh!

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Kat Gentian — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 08:59:34 -0600

There was a laugh; short, controlled, high pitched and insane. “We’ll be takin’ the bike.”

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Aggie80 — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 10:33:40 -0600

It is the last line of my book! I was working on the middle, had some great sections done and realized that my character had a craving that evolved over the time he was marooned. When finally rescued, his first words were: "Got any toast?"

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benjan — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 14:08:03 -0600

" ... These damn kids. Why some parents are ever allowed to procreate, I’ll never know…” The muttering old man tucked his white head back into the window, slamming it shut for emphasis, like an exclamation point.

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Sereana — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 15:00:11 -0600

This paper should really be ashamed to put the word 'News' in it's title.

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 15:01:54 -0600

I tried to put Muffy out but she acted like it was raining boiling tar instead of water.

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Kazbert — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 18:39:16 -0600

“Jifero! Do not bruise him!” The Cuban shouted to his henchman. “His death must appear to be a simple drowning. Do not disappoint me on this.”

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intrikate — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 23:28:01 -0600

“You know what you need?” Nicole said playfully, “You need that infomercial guy who can move a car with a crowbar and a couple of coasters.”

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intrikate — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 23:45:50 -0600

Here's another I like a lot: Dad went to one of those big antique sales in Texas. You know, they last a couple of weeks. It’s like a ren faire for old people who like even older dusty things.”

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kyahpearl — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 01:18:05 -0600

"Can I eat without the dead horse and maggots, please?" LOL.... ;-)

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Walt3rd — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 01:22:40 -0600

"The owner was willing to sell because a Japanese tourist had bunged up the shower drain to try and turn the small shower into a bath. The guest ended up rupturing the water pipes and flooding most of the hotel underneath him. The hotel now needed to replace plumbing, carpeting, and redo the walls and furnishing for nearly half the rooms. The owner would be in debt for years." Not the last sentence, but one I really like. Based on a true incident I was told when I found out the hotel I had booked in Interlaken was unable to accomodate me. At least they paid for the taxi to the nice hotel they rebooked me into.

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dancingfool — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 07:13:16 -0600

"The thing is, I’m now questioning whether my so-called epiphany was indeed a brilliant idea, or whether - like Scrooge - it was just the result of a bad piece of meat."

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intrikate — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 09:44:26 -0600

A trio of ducks swam across the water, and a blonde-haired girl, about three years old, ran toward them, a slice of bread smashed in her tight grip.

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RutaBaker — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 12:14:41 -0600

"Would the book be anything more than an advertisement for rain coats for dogs? Maybe you should just make a video and stick it on YouTube?”

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intrikate — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 12:21:48 -0600

Also this one, in which my MC is running: Even the most complex thoughts could be slowed to match her rubber-soled metronome.

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raspberrymoon — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 16:24:41 -0600

(Today's is really more of a paragraph.) We hadn’t gone three blocks before I ran smack-dab in to ‘Mr. Wolf Hound’. My sneakers were muddy, my jeans were soaked from the knee down, my tee was covered with paw prints, and my hair was hanging in wet tendrils. Truly a sight to stir the heart of any man – life was so unfair.

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benjan — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 21:07:17 -0600

"I wonder if she blinded him when she showed her true colors."

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booboobear — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 03:42:15 -0600

"His entrails briefly coloured the red water grey."

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intrikate — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 10:45:41 -0600

After a few breaths he could feel the temperature change again. It was colder still, as if winter had been sleeping here and been disturbed.

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ddcross — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 14:35:55 -0600

"Every class needs a clown, but the smart clown uses his humorous interludes to demonstrate his complete mastery of the subject matter at hand."

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benjan — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 14:55:02 -0600

"I guess I should thank the old coot." "Naw, I think your discomfort was thanks enough."

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RutaBaker — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 15:41:06 -0600

"Children in day care are subjected to rote learning. They say the pledge of allegiance to the flag and to the republic for Richard Stands and then wonder who the heck Richard Stands is."

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:57:03 -0600

“That’s the third police officer that's decided to take his break in front of our house. The least they could do is bring us some donuts.”

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tzor — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:57:52 -0600

“So I’ll check up on anything interesting one could throw around in casual conversation, and you head to that Washy Wash. Don’t forget hygiene is important, clean is supreme, and most importantly, we both get equally fined if the bed inspectors find you have a dirty bed.”

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Timkford — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 18:07:50 -0600

Wrestling with logic, he struggled to remember a Sherlock Holmes quotation something along the lines of ‘when you have eliminated the impossible then what remains, however improbable must be the truth’ - but Sherlock would have been considering doors, windows and chimneys, not the verification of reality as we know it.

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deddragoninn — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 19:03:52 -0600

Unless I can sleep learn to be a ninja, I've about reached my limit.

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benjan — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 21:44:13 -0600

"Right here where the rock is almost transparent, if you look down at it, those very same inclusions are still there, but they look like they’ve retreated further into the rock and the rock has healed over where it was cut. Do you see it?” “But that’s crazy. Rocks don’t heal.”

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kyahpearl — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 02:52:30 -0600

The sight of skin falling away from muscle and bone, blood staining the earth, the flowers ... and his screams of pain....

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raspberrymoon — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 18:02:16 -0600

(these are two of my favorite minor characters) Laura yelped, “You didn’t tell me you saw him again.” Shirley giggled, “Well, I didn’t think it was important. You didn't tell me that you had the hots for him. I mean, get a grip he cross-dresses for god's sake. I don’t think he’d be interested.”

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benjan — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 22:25:58 -0600

Sandoval Zumyre ran his sausage fingers through his greasy black hair which parted as if commanded by Moses himself.

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dancingfool — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 07:45:02 -0600

"Ta dah!" (might not be my best, but I've always liked it!) and also “as long as I’m getting the result that I want, I’m not going to worry about why.”

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RutaBaker — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 13:03:40 -0600

She smiled and said, “You know there’s plenty of room at the top but no place to sit down.”

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Timkford — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 14:15:17 -0600

"Shit!" Not a great sentence, not even a sentence really - but it was a reaction from one of my characters that was echoed by myself when I re-read the complete chapter. Re-write, press on or take time out and read something (other than Nano forums!)

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raspberrymoon — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 16:29:42 -0600

(This is for Tim and benjan) Occasionally he would have a true breakdown and start lobbing stones through the local windows, which would get him put back in the psych-ward for the requisite five days.

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3DogMike — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 18:20:47 -0600

The 'favorite sentence' and 'second week second thought' threads are next to each other, so I read it as ‘What is the second best sentence you wrote today?’. It’s not necessarily my best, or even second best, but my current favorite sentence is: Your manner is crude, your clothing is common and your shoes, sir, are dirty. In context it is an appropriate response to an a$$.

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Fiona W — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 20:06:24 -0600

I'm gonna cheat and quote two sentences, just because I need something to celebrate in what otherwise has been a shitty day. =wince= She was working to rise above her darker feelings, to pull on the strands of joy and hope that pulsed erratically from the songs on the radio. Aural environment, physical environment—these had always been vital to her flow of rejuvenation.

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Kazbert — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 21:48:46 -0600

He was so very tempted to say something like, “Yes, we’re all psychics here. Wait. Wait. Yes! I know why you have called. I’m sorry but we can’t help you with that.” And then just hang up before they could explain what they wanted.

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 11:02:38 -0600

(I still have a bunch of writing to do today, but I think this is the best I'll get.) June squeaked, “The police think somebody kidnapped her from the airport just so he could borrow her clothes?” “That’s crazy.”

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tzor — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 14:24:23 -0600

I have a great sentence even if it does begin with "After all." But it is even better in context so I'll throw in the whole paragraph with the ultimate sentence ... at the end? The technician smiled. The drugs worked. He would never tell her about how she screamed her head off in absolute pain during the entire procedure. After all, if you can easily erase memories, what is the need for anesthetic of any kind whatsoever? Note that the operation in question was taking a sample of bone marrow.

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benjan — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 16:24:08 -0600

His mother cried, but whether they were tears of mourning for the loss of her only son or tears of joy for his freedom, only Anora knew, and she held that secret close to her aching heart.

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Kazbert — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 19:57:15 -0600

"The pair that goes in would have to possess a healthy amount of paranoia and not take naïve risks once in country.” At the word “paranoia,” everyone’s head turned to look at Casey. “What?” Casey asked. Then she caught on. “Oh, no! Not interested! Just waltz into and out of China *and* Russia? Are you peeps crazy?”

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RutaBaker — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 10:54:54 -0600

A cheater with more than one sentence. It refers to the FMC waking from a dream about planting zucchini seeds in the winter. "I lay in bed in the morning wondering if this somehow was a symbol of all my plans being quashed? Seeds can’t grow outdoors in Iowa’s winters. Or maybe it was my plans being squashed, I wondered if I’d ever dreamt a pun before?"

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Kazbert — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 21:03:18 -0600

My best sentence today my best sentence because it is the very last sentence in my novel as I cross the 50,000 word barrier! Woot! "Now it’s time for me to get going. I have to take this information Brooke just gave me and go help send her murderer to prison.”

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raspberrymoon — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 22:38:55 -0600

Hi Everyone & especially Kazbert - well you beat me but only by a hair (or is that hare?). Jumping up and down with glee! However, my goal is actually to finish it by the end of the month which will require about 10,000 or 15,000 more. Sigh. This isn't my most original sentence but some how it is appropriate. Quietly he said, “I think you should start at the beginning.”

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benjan — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 10:40:45 -0600

“Just sit here with the ice pack. When you’re feeling better, you can get back to work stabbing people in the back. I’ll set out a few more knives for you.”

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Timkford — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 14:56:17 -0600

Like a scene in a cartoon, they seem to hang for a moment in the air, detached from his hand, they continued to press against the wall until they realised that they were no longer supported - and then they dropped.

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dancingfool — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 16:29:00 -0600

“No, you don’t get it,” she said, “there’s no such thing as a unipole.” And she picked up her magnets, and returned to her room. Hmmm... doesn't make sense without the context... hopefully it does make sense, with the context!

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Mother Goose — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 19:23:04 -0600

I think one of the sentences below will be the best I wrote today: The (video) images of her sixteen year old son being physically attacked by that young man, and then fighting against six others as they stripped him naked, took over everything in her world. Nothing entered the realm of her senses except the sights and sounds of Vic struggling, and fighting, and losing much more than his underwear. Tears splashed unheeded into her coffee cup, clutched numbly with both hands. The worst image of all was her Vic, her baby boy, cowering, ashamed, his bare bottom exposed to the world as kids stood around and laughed, called him filthy names, and recorded what they were doing to him. That vision etched itself like acid in Paula's brain and would stay with her until the moment she died.

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intrikate — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 21:17:37 -0600

"This is the perfect desk for a writer like me." she said to Donna. "It's a desk you can't write on, and I'm a writer who never writes." (not at all autobiographical, only because I don't have a magically sealed desk that no one can open.) :)

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benjan — Fri, 18 Nov 2011 15:28:58 -0600

Sometimes, inexperience is the anathema of a good lie.

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dancingfool — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 17:39:59 -0600

'best' can mean many different things. “I really enjoyed your paper on double critical current density, and the paper you did with Alex Gurevich on suppressed conductivity was maybe the best thing you’ve written, and, oh my gosh, the stuff you did with electromagnetic granularity was earth shattering.”

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 18:52:13 -0600

(MC talking to resident ghost) I started to say, “You can’t do that”, and then I stopped. “Charlie, you can’t really levitate plates can you?” “You’ll never know until I do it will you?”

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banditsrubyangel — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 22:51:07 -0600

"The mood of the world has turned bloody against us."

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Fiona W — Sat, 19 Nov 2011 23:43:18 -0600

This is my main character, writing a letter to herself about how to improve the book that is underway. I would love a dimly illuminated scene where you pound his remains into splintered fragments with a sledgehammer, then suck on his powdery marrow and swallow some of it, and bellow up to the lightning-lit clouds your barbarous glee in the fact that you have outlived him, that he will no longer be a part of you, that he can no longer give you shit over your every instantiation!

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Trafalgar — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 00:34:27 -0600

I liked chocolate like I like breathing, I'd even had it for breakast before now.

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LynneInPborough — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 02:24:23 -0600

‘True, and I wouldn’t have found myself in Paris with my uncle.’ you had to be there.... Looking at these others I think i need to increase my sentence length...

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Discerning Spirits — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 11:10:46 -0600

Your best sentences are great. I enjoy reading them. I guess mine today would be: Then he said, "Whatever you do in life, even if it is just picking up a rock, do it the best you can." My father was in the Marine Corp for twelve years. It was a line he use to tell me when I was growing up.

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raspberrymoon — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 19:21:10 -0600

If he didn’t know he was dead or how he died I didn’t want to be the one to break the news to him that he had driven his sports car into the plate glass window of the hardware store, at 93 years of age; and was killed when the hammer display collapsed on top of him.

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Dixiegirl — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 23:23:28 -0600

“Tell you what, Mr... what do they call you besides son of a bitch?”

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Mother Goose — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 23:34:46 -0600

Brent could feel his popularity waning, an ebb tide sucking away his self esteem.

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chrisdd — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 11:01:11 -0600

My inner editor is so disgusted that she's changed careers and becoming a music therapist to the elderly.

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maxlyte — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 17:04:50 -0600

Suddenly he sagged and the fight went out of him when he heard the unwavering determination in her voice.

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deddragoninn — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 17:13:54 -0600

And I have became extremely tolerant of other people's quirks, so if I say she was nutty, then she was as nutty as a five pound tub of peanut brittle.

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raspberrymoon — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 18:23:35 -0600

“Well, I think we were only planning on watching the next episode of I’m Pregnant and Living in Seattle.” “Mom, do you think you could live without that reality-drivel for a week?”

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benjan — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 18:26:39 -0600

Then Braxxis, that silly little planet, had up and eaten some miners.

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jobydog — Mon, 21 Nov 2011 19:45:11 -0600

"I figure I would die of exposure in less than an hour. If I was lucky." (Well, technically, this is two sentences.)

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tzor — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 15:18:04 -0600

This is two sentences but the first is a set up. It's the second sentence that is good. I've got better paragraphs but they all have multiple sentences. “This should be good,” Kenny replied. “Cameras don’t explode, right?”

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 17:34:17 -0600

I cut her off before she could rave about Charlie’s physical attributes - that is if ghosts have any physical attributes.

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deddragoninn — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 17:38:48 -0600

And if I'm going to die, I really don't want the last taste in my mouth to be those lame ass fries.

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69MustangMom — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 17:50:37 -0600

The rifle's kickback was a loving push and the target quivered in the scope's cross-hairs. or “It’s Rabbit, not Bunny,” JD grumbled. “Wait until it’s my turn for code names, Hound Dog.” Not nearly as good as the stabby pitchfork sentence posted earlier! I love that one!

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chrisdd — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 18:25:41 -0600

Margedd was not sure what she was witnessing but it looked an awful lot like farewell.

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benjan — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 23:42:37 -0600

He envisioned himself with his hands around the old man’s neck, squeezing, squeezing, gently at first, harder and then harder still, until grizzled whiskers were digging into his skin and the old coot was hanging limp and lifeless like an old rag on wash day.

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Kazbert — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 08:21:39 -0600

"For all of five years disguised and pretending to be a man Alexi didn’t allow herself to cry. Men don’t cry. She sat down now and cried five years’ worth of tears, and there was no holding any of it back." Me --> This whole NaNo experience has been unlike anything else I've ever done. The character above didn't even exist two days ago, and she immediately lead me to weave romance into my story -- as though I know anything about writing romance! And all along I thought I was being clever in framing the story without romance. I'm starting to think it's not MY story at all, but theirs.

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RutaBaker — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 13:15:35 -0600

Super cheating, I'm posting an entire paragraph. "The good, pleasant, cheerful, and sunny events in life are easy to describe but the pains and the hurts, the terrible losses life hands us, are almost indescribable. Unless one has endured them how can they be understood? And even once one has endured them, how could they be imagined? There seems to be some uniformity in the joys of life, they make each of us feel good in similar ways. Even if we can’t define love, most of us recognize love when it knocks us sideways. But the sorrows are another story altogether, each of suffers alone and differently."

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intrikate — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 14:52:57 -0600

“This is the last call for the train to fantasy land. If your intended destination isn’t past the edge of reason, you should get off the train now.”

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raspberrymoon — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 15:32:41 -0600

"If you can think of any way to explain to that detective how my ghosty friends clued me in that Elmer Richardson, is a mass murderer and is trying to kill me just for the fun of it, please tell me.”

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Kazbert — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 17:56:02 -0600

I would think that explaining would be easy. Explaining without sounding psychotic is another matter. My locator characters have similar issues. It does make for an engaging story conflict.

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benjan — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 22:47:35 -0600

Main character hasn't eaten for a day or two, so he grabs some food and then washes it down with beer. I just thought this was cute, but now I'm wondering if it's too cliched: He followed it with a beer that must have been sent from heaven because it tasted divine.

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 11:29:54 -0600

I just want to jump in and say that there have been some amazing sentences here. I am tempted to try and write a short story using them all.

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RutaBaker — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 12:48:13 -0600

OK today's best single sentence, hope no one will be offended: "That was the unfortunate moment that Ben peaked out from behind me, pointed at Richard’s goatee, and whispered, “Nookie beard”, in the loud manner which small children always seem to use at just such inopportune moments."

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 15:42:41 -0600

(Not only is this my best sentence today, but my best sentence of the book. I hope it will also be your best sentence.) ```````````````````````````````````````````````````````THE END

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 22:48:30 -0600

Thank you all. I am so excited. Benjan - I wish I was that exact but it was just an appoximate because I have notes I want to edit out before I verify. I think we can do that pretty soon?

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Timkford — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 09:25:00 -0600

Adam sighed heavily as he flicked through Max’s sketches. There was one with a silhouette of a man wearing a hat and billowing cape, which he took to be Max’s signature; and another of a rabbit with long floppy ears, which was signed Love from Flopsy. He wondered how he was going to tell Guy that Laura had decided that she was having fun in 1913 and was now out of reach. Ok,that's 3 sentences, but I haven't posted any for a while, and these were my last three. And I'm validated!

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Kataja — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 14:51:46 -0600

This is half a paragraph, but I feel it's good enough to try to translate. "It met him suddenly. The sea. First the salty smell and the rolling vawes, cries of gulls, then the glittering water going on for ever." (My dwarf sees the sea for the first time in his life)

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pagewrites — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 18:48:56 -0600

“Where I come from lobster is not normally served in the soup kitchen.”

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tzor — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 19:15:41 -0600

"Secrets aren’t something that can just he handed to you; they wouldn’t be valuable if they were."

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intrikate — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 21:22:56 -0600

For a moment he forgot the craziness of mysterious desks and energy fields and trouble in far away realms, and just enjoyed the warmth of fresh love for a beautiful woman.

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RutaBaker — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 07:17:47 -0600

"I’m quite sure that if I read him the story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears Ben wouldn’t question the thermodynamics of the Baby Bear’s bowl of porridge being just the right temperature whilst Mama Bear’s bowl, a much larger bowl, was too cold, indeed he’d talk about the illustrations instead.”

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 16:58:24 -0600

Ruta - you got me - LOL. Now, I'm going to have to go back and reread it because it was one of my all time favorite books and it is now stuck in my head.

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intrikate — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 01:31:34 -0600

Y'all - Context is everything, and I know you guys don't have the context, but I have to share this sentence anyway. You are just going to have to trust me that it is hi-freaking-larious. Or I need to go to sleep. Or both. "I promise not to participate in any high risk activities, and I will remain very calm if at any time I have to pee.”

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ros77uk — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 18:22:27 -0600

THE END

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Mother Goose — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 20:24:29 -0600

The three best sentences I wrote today were: “Mom, Dad,” she said after they’d gotten home from the funeral, “I have to tell you something.” With those words she started the longest story of her life. By the time she was finished several hours later, three things had happened: her mother had called a therapist; her father had called the police; and both of them had insisted they go see Vic’s parents. She didn’t know whether she felt better, or worse, but at least she felt free.

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RutaBaker — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 14:13:23 -0600

" You know as well as I do that Zita would never have dared to wear her old uniform, she would have made a grand entrance in her old gym costume dribbling a basketball of an improbable color.”

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tzor — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 15:00:27 -0600

By best sentence ... is my last one. (Ignoring obligatory citation of heart wrenching song that really doesn't have anything to o with the story unless you are thinking too deeply ... As a reward for my diligent effort to Friend Computer I have been exiled, or rather chosen to lead an exploratory force into the unknown to see if there are other bastions of humanity out there; fresh air and sunshine.

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Kazbert — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 20:44:10 -0600

“If someone’s not dead, I’m going to be pissed.” Lizzie said she crossed the room to meet Agent Chase Sheridan Agent and Jared Allred.

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intrikate — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 22:33:38 -0600

Maggie studied Nicole’s face as if she’d found a lost puzzle piece long after discarding the box.

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Kat Gentian — Tue, 29 Nov 2011 19:16:29 -0600

Ending sentence (I wrote to the END!!!!): “Wherever this cruise is headed, sailor, count me in.”

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Kat Gentian — Tue, 01 Nov 2011 22:45:32 -0500

LOL I have a feeling main is supposed to ride but is a bit reluctant???

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mstrom — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 15:54:46 -0500

*chuckles* South Park fanfiction?

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booboobear — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 16:22:46 -0600

yeah, i do.

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Elicia — Wed, 02 Nov 2011 21:54:36 -0500

Hahahahaha. I so want to read this. :)

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Kazbert — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 08:02:22 -0600

After nine days of "best sentences" this one is still my favorite. Great humor and great wording!

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Geolie — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:22:32 -0600

Me too!

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MerryHall — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 03:57:43 -0600

We're supposed to write good sentences? I'm having trouble reading what I wrote the last six days.

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Kat Gentian — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 08:55:45 -0600

ROFL I resemble that remark!

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Geolie — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:23:17 -0600

Bravo! I like it.

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Geolie — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 18:23:36 -0600

Ha ha... : )

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benjan — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 20:51:46 -0600

Love the names and the explanation!

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raspberrymoon — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 21:13:44 -0600

benjan, Was that Tom that I was blind dating? I really thought he enjoyed my 127 verse ditty.

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benjan — Sun, 06 Nov 2011 21:23:02 -0600

Sorry, RM. He told me you used a little too much inflection, especially in verses 79 to 81. Ruined the whole monotony thing for him. ;)

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benjan — Mon, 07 Nov 2011 20:51:39 -0600

Darn it! Found me out! Oh, wait. You said 'the Hilton.' Never mind!

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benjan — Tue, 08 Nov 2011 19:31:29 -0600

Thank you, Tim. That Jane Eyre. What a klutz! ;)

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intrikate — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 23:29:43 -0600

I LOL'd at Amelia Earhart!

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Kataja — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 02:57:07 -0600

It was again daytime in Europe, and I sourly spent a coffee-break reporting spam...

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 14:21:40 -0600

What can I say - I did the same thing. ROFL. (If I remember right, since it has been removed, I think it was something about an escourt service. Maybe we can work it into our novels?)

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Kazbert — Thu, 10 Nov 2011 18:36:32 -0600

Like!

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benjan — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 21:09:08 -0600

Oh, the agony! Who hasn't been in a similar situation? Great paragraph. It made me laugh.

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raspberrymoon — Fri, 11 Nov 2011 21:40:49 -0600

Okay, benjan. That wasn't even funny! Oh you mean that was your sentence of the day? I thought you were criticizing my MC. :) (note - has anyone else noticed how well some of the sentences fit together with a little imagination. It is kind of scary. LOL)

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dancingfool — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 15:45:48 -0600

Richard Stands? That's perfect!!! I need a name for my MC's boss -- hadn't realized until this afternoon that he was going to be in the story, but I know he has no sense of humor at all... so this will work great. Thanks!

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:41:28 -0600

Ruta - I'm breathless with laughter. For years my husband has been trying to explain to me that God's name is actually Harold - as in "harold be thy name." You made my day. :)

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deddragoninn — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:50:31 -0600

No, No, No...it's Howard...Howard by thy name!

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benjan — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:56:36 -0600

I have to agree with Dragon. Howard is God, but there is an angel running around by the name of Harold. Remember the Christmas song: "Hark, the angel Harold sings ..."

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RutaBaker — Sun, 13 Nov 2011 18:34:07 -0600

And for the Catholics amongst us: Hail Mary full of grapes.

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 12 Nov 2011 16:56:12 -0600

Oh no, now we are going to have to stop and ask him which it is. I just don't have time today - I'm trying to write here. ROFL.

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Kazbert — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 19:26:25 -0600

A bit late saying it, but I really like that line!

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benjan — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 16:17:43 -0600

I have one of those lines too, Tim. NaNo wouldn't be NaNo without a lot of it. ;)

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dancingfool — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 19:29:27 -0600

LOVE your sentence!

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3DogMike — Mon, 14 Nov 2011 20:11:53 -0600

Thank you!

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dancingfool — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 06:51:02 -0600

Kazbert! Your line was so intriguing, I went to your profile -- and I love your synopsis! What a terrific storyline!

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intrikate — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 21:26:42 -0600

I've had thirteen years of call center experience, and I love love love this sentence. :)

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Kazbert — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 08:53:40 -0600

Thank you for the kind encouragement! NaNo has been an amazing first-time experience for me. The character who uttered those lines above didn't even exist two weeks ago, and now I have him and all these other minor characters pushing their way to the front. There are several characters in the story with that sixth-sense locating ability, but the character I've quoted above isn't one of them. He was hired to answer the phone, amongst other tasks. His name is Dzislaw “Suave” Pujanski. That impossible Polish first name is pronounced something like “G-suave,” so everyone just calls him “Suave.” I got the name from my 23-y-o son, Nick, who spent two years in Poland. Nick told me that he likes the name Dzislaw and wants to name a son Dzislaw. Once I knew that I just had to name a character Dzislaw.

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 11:00:58 -0600

Kazbert - Can I use your line for my answering machine message? No, I mean really - it is wonderful.

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dancingfool — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 14:40:01 -0600

Tzor... what a great line! (I'm loving this thread, Raspberry Moon, really loving it!) So I took a look at your profile, and read your synopsis. {speaking in a whisper: come on, buddy, how much for a small jug of wakey wake? I've got cash, and I'm prepared to pay.}

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Kazbert — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 19:32:19 -0600

tzor: The logic is disturbing on several levels. I like it!

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raspberrymoon — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 17:36:46 -0600

LOL - I'm glad you're liking it. (whispering - I'll meet ya in the alley)

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intrikate — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 21:29:41 -0600

Beautiful!

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deddragoninn — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 15:47:56 -0600

Also, a bit late saying it...but Thank You! And CONGRATS on getting to 50K!

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dancingfool — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 21:28:39 -0600

woo hoo! attaboy!! way to go! and thanks for paving the way for the rest of us... watch out kaz, here we come!

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benjan — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 23:40:38 -0600

That's just Awesome Sauce! Congrats!! I knew you were close to the mark. It must feel good!

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Kazbert — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 06:02:13 -0600

Congrats! You've written 50,000 in two weeks, how hard can it be to write another 15,000 in two weeks? I said my story is "finished" but I meant that loosely. I have a beginning, middle, and end, but there are places in the story that need more fleshing out and characters who want their own chapters. With hitting 50,000 I've kinda lost my motivation for the moment. I'm taking today off. I have no idea how many words it would take to finish it. It could be 100,000 words by the time I'm really done. My son is already askiing me if I'm going to write a trilogy and I haven't finished the first story yet! I think my next book will start with a father strangling his annoying son.

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raspberrymoon — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 15:40:32 -0600

LOL - can you add a mother in taping her annoying daughter's mouth shut?

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Kazbert — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 19:27:28 -0600

Just what every serial killer needs -- an enabler! Reminds me of that exchange in "Princess Bride" between Count Rugen and Prince Humperdinck: Count Rugen: Ah. Are you coming down into the pit? Wesley's got his strength back. I'm starting him on the machine tonight. Prince Humperdinck: [sincerely] Tyrone, you know how much I love watching you work, but I've got my country's 500th anniversary to plan, my wedding to arrange, my wife to murder and Guilder to frame for it; I'm swamped. Count Rugen: Get some rest. If you haven't got your health, then you haven't got anything.

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Kazbert — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 19:29:43 -0600

Well, I don't know the context, but as an engineer I know what you mean by "unipole." Does that count?

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Kazbert — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 19:34:42 -0600

If you are aiming to produce a visceral response in the reader you nailed it!

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benjan — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 20:51:40 -0600

Great movie! No serial killer in this case. Just some sarcasm. The subject has just been cold cocked by a friend that he betrayed. I never thought of your interpretation when I posted this, Kazbert! Context is everything, isn't it?

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intrikate — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 21:19:05 -0600

I think it's best for everyone involved if I don't share what I thought of when I read "unipole." *blush*

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Mother Goose — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 20:44:40 -0600

Well, yes, Kaz, thanks! I am hoping to reproduce the unimaginable nightmare of being a bullied gay teen. I'm writing from alternating perspectives. The bullied boy; bully 1; bully 2; the teacher; the girl friend who tries to beard him; the horrified mother; the bitterly betrayed father; the principal who is unwilling to do anything about it - and I'm sure new characters will enter as we wind our way to the final/opening scene. In the end, someone is going to kill someone else because they just can't stand the emotional pain any longer. I'm half way there, but I still don't know yet who is holding the knife on whom.

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chrisdd — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 18:28:43 -0600

Great sentence. Does, um, that say 114+ words? Holy toledo!

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dancingfool — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 10:03:44 -0600

hey... don't let us interfere with your style.... you've made the 50k, so you're clearly doing lots of things, right!

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Mother Goose — Sun, 20 Nov 2011 22:25:37 -0600

[quote=raspberrymoon] If he didn’t know he was dead or how he died I didn’t want to be the one to break the news to him that he had driven his sports car into the plate glass window of the hardware store, at 93 years of age; and was killed when the hammer display collapsed on top of him. [/quote] What a wonderfully evocative sentence! Brava!

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banditsrubyangel — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 00:25:11 -0600

Thanks! Yep, my muse has been on a roll. I re-arranged my work schedule each week in November so I could stay home and write.

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Mother Goose — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 09:41:49 -0600

LOVE this sentence. Yes, it is gruesome - but evocative!! Very good writing!

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Mother Goose — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 09:52:42 -0600

Kazbert - isn't it the truth? I had to spend yesterday rewriting three chapters because I'd had the wrong one do something important. Well, the names kept getting mixed up, the story sequence wasn't flowing and then it suddenly became clear. The wrong character had made a significant change in the story. And they weren't going to cooperate until I got it fixed. I love the idea that you have a woman character who's pretended to be a man for five long years, She must be very good at it to have gone undetected for five years. I don't know if she'd really believe men don't cry, however. I think a woman who'd been living among men as a man for five years would know good and well that men cry - just wouldn't take the chance of losing self control for even a minute herself. When you're living disguised (real life experience speaking here) you take no chances at detection. None at all. For her sake, I hope she's hidden far, far away from everyone before she let's loose.

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benjan — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 22:38:28 -0600

Thank you so much. I really appreciate that! I liked this one too. In context, it's a thought borne out of frustration for my main character, so it may sound gruesome, but it's more like wishful thinking.

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Kazbert — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 14:05:52 -0600

Her life had a tragic start (saw her twin sister executed by ignorant people) and a tragic end (husband and five sons die at sea -- all on the same ship -- many years later), but there were a lot of good times in the middle. Her disguise was mostly her choice. It was Eastern Europe in 1840 and she wanted to travel (get away from the ones who killed her sister). She was only 18 when she set out and figured traveling as a man would mean fewer hassles and fewer dangers for her. She was good at it, but one of her methods was risky -- cut weight to intentionally induce amenorrhea. She ended up marrying a male traveling companion five years later. That's the reason for the tears. He rejected her at first, but not for pretending to be a man. He was surprised but took it well. It was something else that freaked him out. But he soon came back. As for men not crying (refusing to), it depends on the culture -- the time and place. Even in modern America there are harsh neighborhoods where a young man crying equates to hanging a sign around his neck that says "easy victim." I grew up in such a neighborhood. You learn fast seeing what happens to others not to draw attention to yourself.

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Kazbert — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 14:17:54 -0600

Great paragraph, Ruta! Very thought-provoking. I agree that there are many things you have to experience first hand in order to understand them. The words alone are inadequate -- unless the reader/listener has had a similar experience. Then even the most inadequate words are filled with nuance and meaning. I don’t quite agree about writing about good experiences being easy. There are levels of joy that also evade adequate description unless the other person has had a similar experience. Joy and sorrow are also tied together. Our ability to experience a present joy depends on our past sorrows. Experiencing the depths of pure sorrow opens the way for us to experience the heights of pure joy. See all the thoughts you provoked?

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Kazbert — Wed, 23 Nov 2011 17:57:13 -0600

I like it!

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Kazbert — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 08:23:55 -0600

Sometimes cliche is appropriate to use. Just my amateur writer gut response, but I think a cliche might fly better in a dialogue than in a narrative, even if the character is just talking aloud to him/her self. Then it's the character who is being cliched, not the author.

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benjan — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 10:35:25 -0600

Very good point, Kazbert. Thank you. It would break up the narrative. He took a swig of beer, then held the bottle up to the light. As he watched the swirling liquid inside, he said, " Beer. That divine gift from God to all mankind. Amen." I want to edit so much! I just want to get in there and tear the whole thing apart and make it better, but I know that if I stop to edit, I won't finish the tale.

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Kazbert — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 11:01:40 -0600

I had to cut my internal editor loose last night for a couple of hours because my chronology needed some quick fine tuning to keep to make sure the beginning and the end tie together well. That's mostly because I didn't write the chapters sequentially. I had an outline, and I tended to write first the chapters that I thought sounded like the most fun. Now that my characters know they can tie up and gag the internal editor I'm not having too much trouble keeping him in line. I have a bad memory, so sometimes the internal editor threatens to have an anxiety attack. I usually just jot a short note to myself [in brackets] and keep writing. Later I can do a search for "[" and make sure I've addressed all the notes. That assurance that I won't forget anything is usually enough to quiet him down.

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RutaBaker — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 12:30:09 -0600

Great Idea. Go for it and come back during the lapse between NaNos and post it on the geezer forum for those of us who hang around all year.

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benjan — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 22:13:13 -0600

And I love your ending word count! Right at 76000, not a word over or under. LOL Good job, Moon! Congratulations.

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intrikate — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 22:39:01 -0600

::Applause::

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Kazbert — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 22:40:20 -0600

Woot!

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benjan — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 12:18:03 -0600

Congratulations, Tim! Happy dance. :)

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Kazbert — Fri, 25 Nov 2011 19:56:58 -0600

I like it!

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Kazbert — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 11:09:24 -0600

Love the sentence! Maybe Mama Bear was in the midst of the latest diet fad and had a very small bowl? Wow. I'm an engineer who has rasied three kids (now all in college) and I never caught that particlular flaw in the story. Then again, I don't recall ever reading them that story so maybe that's how I overlooked it.

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raspberrymoon — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 12:35:25 -0600

Hey you two make me smile. Who would have thought anyone would be discussing the three little bears on the 50 forum. It made me think of what the Queen said to Alice - "Why, sometimes I’ve believed as many as six impossible things before breakfast.”

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RutaBaker — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 15:28:30 -0600

Kaz, one of my nephews pointed that out to me. The scientifically-oriented child was about 3 at the time.

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RutaBaker — Sat, 26 Nov 2011 15:29:53 -0600

Oh little Moonie, the Queen also said "Off with her head" in reference to Alice and she said it in a bored voice.

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RutaBaker — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 13:07:49 -0600

Must be one of the younger characters, Intrikate. Who of geezer status can remain calm when Nature calls? Most of us need to answer the call quickly or get very nervous.

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intrikate — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 14:53:47 -0600

Hah! Too true. :)

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Mother Goose — Sun, 27 Nov 2011 19:23:10 -0600

[quote=ros77uk] THE END [/quote] Congratulations!! Is the novel finished?

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ros77uk — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 05:18:51 -0600

Well, this one is. I think I'll make it part of a series. A series which I might even start today...can I still update my word count, even if it's turned purple? and will updating it turn it back to blue? I just LURVE purple!

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Kataja — Mon, 28 Nov 2011 05:21:07 -0600

You can update the number and it stays purple. Unless you by mistake put in a number that is less than 50000.