[Fantasy] Requests for Readers

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Title: The Ballad of Mercy Kill
Length, Draft and Language: about 74k words, second draft (sortof -- first draft with some broad strokes edits really), English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Joy Stratford is a witch, a werewolf, and a cage fighter who drinks whiskey like it's water and hates your guts. Yes, you, personally. Alex Bonheur is a nephilim, a hunter, and a quintessential bad boy -- he stole his motorcycle from a fae and would like to tell you how awesome that is. The first time Joy climbs on his bike, he thinks she's just another one night stand, but he finds himself drawn in by her baffling mix of innocence and cynicism. Hijinks and hilarity ensues.
Sub Genre & Keywords: urban fantasy; werewolves, witches, nephilim, lycanthropy, fighting, relationship, romance, family relationship, scars, dead parents, motorcycle, bad boy
Known Issues: Joy needs to smell things more and Alex needs to establish as more of a cocky bastard. There's more, but I can't really describe them without spoiling and I'm sure most people would rather read ;)

Critique Requested: Does it hold together? Is it actually good? How can it be better? Are there any mechanical/grammar errors? Is it fairly consistent? Overall aimed at getting it ready for publication.
Critique Tolerance: Well, don't be super harsh. I definitely want honesty, but...well, feel free to sugar-coat if you can still get the picture across, lol. Critique me, but just be gentle. And tell me the good stuff so I know what to do more of!

Experience & Goals: This is the fourth book I've written. The goal is to edit and be ready to query agents by Christmas.
Method of Communication: AIM and email both work, nanomail me for the addresses :)
Anything else? Disclaimers? There is a lot of swearing and some violence and sexuality. This would probably be a high PG13 if it were a movie. I can give a more specific description of content by nanomail if you have concerns.

Title: To the Best of my skill and knowledge
Length, Draft and Language: 15k first draft, English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Nat Westside is the best Guardian in his Barracks. No question. So tracking down a conman should be easy. He is pretty sure he can do it with his eyes closed, whilst imultaneously persuading his partner to just wear his cloak already so the boss doesn't explode before he gives hs important speech. But this particular con man knows more about Nat that anyone else, and will bring to the surface issues he has been mostly successful in ignoring.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Psuedo police force? Case!fic Alternate POVs Flashbacks

Known Issues: I know the magic system is hideously vage, and its possible my characters have unintentional multiple personalities.

Critique Requested: This short story is a kicking off/background point for my NaNovel, and I would love feedback on how coherent the world and characters are, before I begin revision work on the actual thing.
Critique Tolerance: I can take anything you will throw at me. I would love constructive feedback however harsh it may seem.
Experience & Goals: I've never finished anything of length before, and I just want some feedback so I can work on tackling my full length novel
Method of Communication: Nanomail, then email?
Anything else? Disclaimers? moderate violence and swearing, mentions of child murder/ abuse
Would appreciate feedback by end of January

Title:Betrayal
Length, Draft and Language: 51k, First draft (but with a few edits), English.
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words)Seventeen year old Nikole Smith’s life has been an unstable mess constantly moving from town to town, that is until she arrives in the small town of Ripley, West Virginia. Just when she and her father start settling down she starts to notice strange things. While running from creatures she would have never thought existed she continues crossing paths with a mysterious handsome gypsy who seems to know dark secrets of her family’s past. All the while she’s oblivious to the fact that a grim future lies ahead for her and those around her.
Sub Genre & Keywords:Teen, gypsies, lycans, vampires, relationships.
Known Issues: I know I have difficulty with my POV. There is definitely more but I can't think of it at the moment.

Critique Requested: Constructive criticism, Is it good? Is it consistent? Does it hold together? Are there any grammatical errors? Spelling?
Critique Tolerance: I want honesty. Just don't be mean or rude about it.

Experience & Goals: This is my first novel finished. I have two more in the works and several ideas which I hope to get finished soon. My goal is to eventually publish Betrayal, and it's sequel.
Method of Communication: Nanomail or email.
Anything else? Disclaimers? There is violence and slight innuendo. No cussing though.

Title: The Gloryus Adventures of King Bryant, Sekrit Genius
Length, Draft and Language: Around 72,000 words. You'll probably get it in 3rd or 4th draft stage (several months from now, I'd guess). Language is English. And mature.


Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): King Bryant is such a kind and magnanimous ruler that he completely fails to notice the Machievellian politics at his court. Instead he uses his godly charms and magnificent heroism to defeat evil monsters and save beautiful maidens. Sure, his wife isn’t always so pleased about what tends to happen after he’s saved the damsels in distress, and his advisors warn him that fighting in the front lines of battle can be rather dangerous. But Bryant won’t let those of lesser birth keep him from his noble destiny.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Humor, parody, satire
Known Issues: Probably all sorts. If I know the issue is there, though, I will correct it prior to sending it off to you. I try to be polite.

Critique Requested: As thorough as you can make it. I figure that there are going to be entire chunks that need to be re-written and cut.
Critique Tolerance: As hard as you want without entering the world of personal insults. I'd prefer not to be called names, but who really does that? Otherwise, let it fly. This is about making the story better.

Experience & Goals: I've been writing for something like...oh, I have no clue. Forever. I've been writing "seriously" (as in critique groups, publishing stuff from time to time) for around 15 off and on. I've written something like 6 novels so far, and had an agent represent two. I would like to clean this up to where I can publish it.

Method of Communication: PM me through the system, and I'll shoot you my email address. After that, email is probably best, but I'm not picky.
Anything else? Disclaimers? This is definitely a mature story, particularly along the lines of sex. If that's not your thing, please don't volunteer. (Although I'm also working on a YA/horror manuscript, which is somewhat tamer, if you want to try that one.)

Also, I will gladly swap manuscripts, but I'd like to read the first 20 pages or so before fully committing to the exchange. (i.e. if we decide we can't work together after 20 pages, I really want to be able to stop without feeling like a twit. It's entirely possible that you'll hate my story or method of critiquing or vice versa, and if either of us thinks this is useless, I don't want to feel like we're both yoked together.)

Title: Breakwater
Length, Draft and Language: 170k (yeah, you're in for a long haul with this one XD If you want, you can ask to read the first few chapters or something and then let me know if you want to go on or not XD) It's in first draft stage, but with a few corrections and edits. English.

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) Saralynne Redfern is the daughter of one of the most influential families in the city of Crysta, trading capital of the empire. Ikurei Riteth was once heir to the throne of one of the most powerful mer clans in the Teriinen Sea. When Ikurei is captured by humans and accidentally delivered to the Redferns' storage company, their fates become inextricably entwined, and Saralynne and everyone she knows are soon involved in a desperate race against time. The Mythralian monarchy are determined to push through a law to outlaw all non-human races from the empire, and are currently in fierce negotiations with the isolated Malenshian race to prevent trade lines from collapsing, and Saralynne’s family have become inadvertently involved; at the same time, the mers have issued a warning that if the humans’ captives are not released, they will wage war on the human empire. The fates of two worlds are about to collide with devastating consequences.
Sub Genre & Keywords: high fantasy, some hints of steampunk - humans, merpeople, underlying romance
Known Issues: I know that I haven't gone in-depth enough with the different races, such as the backgrounds of the Malenshians and the mers. :)

Critique Requested: I'd like mostly advice on how well the story fits together, how well it's ordered, what I could add in/take out, and what you think could be improved about the characters. You can point out wording or grammar issues that don't work though, I'm pretty sure I have a few of those in there ;)
Critique Tolerance: Be honest, but please not rude or overly harsh. :)

Experience & Goals: I've been writing... well... forever. XD My series 'Cursed Legacy' has been written and rewritten over and over for nine years. Yes, nine years. =_= Breakwater is the first novel I've written with very little planning and in such a short space of time. I'm hoping to publish Breakwater as my first novel when it's been rewritten.
Method of Communication: Email would probably be best, let me know and I'll give you my email address. Either that or NaNomail.
Anything else? Disclaimers? Umm. There's some very mild swearing, some violence, and a M/M relationship on the sidelines in case you're not into that kind of thing, but no sex or anything, just mentions of the relationships in the story. :)

Title: The Laminar Chronicles

Length, Draft and Language: about 23k, currently on the 3rd draft, English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Teenagers Annabelle and Lewis are best friends with bad homelives. With parents that don't care about them, they comfort each other and wish for better days. They get their wish when they wake up one day in a strange new land that owes its life to a special race of fireflies. While trying to figure out how they got there and how to get home, they meet a pack of wolves, who tell them of a great danger that threatens the life of every living thing in the land. Only Annabelle and Lewis can help save this wonderful land and protect the mysterious fireflies that live there.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Young adult, adventure, sci-fi (the fireflies are a bit sci-fy when explained fully), wolves, teens
Known Issues: I'm not the best at grammar, and this current draft is still in-progress. I've also been told that I need to be more descriptive in places.

Critique Requested: I'm looking for someone to correct a few basic grammatical errors, sentence structure, character depth, and general plot originalty as well as overall smoothness, if that makes sense.
Critique Tolerance: I want honest feedback. I'd love if it you said it was "the best novel ever", but if it's not then don't tell me lies. Be honest but kind about it and we will get along fine. If you think it doesn't have potential, then just say so :-)

Experience & Goals: I've been writing seriously for about three years now, but have written a few small things since I was a child. As far as goals go, I'd love to be published someday, but first I just want to write for the joy of it.
Method of Communication: Nanomail or email. But I won't list my email here.
Anything else? Disclaimers? Mmm, not that I can think of.

Title: Letters to a Rootbeer Flavored Moon
Length, Draft and Language: 121 singlespace Cambria pages (52K), First Draft, English
Brief Summary:
Copper and Coriolis are two very different young men. Copper lives in West Avalon, a coastal Californian town known for its tolerance and general artsy feel, and Coriolis lives in Atlantis, the lost city known for being a strict, well-oiled machine. Copper is faced with the problem of his boyfriend dumping him, his sister and best friend getting pregnant, and his family slowly crumbling, while Coriolis is faced with the terrors of coming out as homosexual in a world where everyone is obsessed with reproduction, and with a deep-seated hatred of his family and the government. Still, when they start sending letters back and forth, a whole new world opens up.
Sub Genre & Keywords:
LGBTQ, Urban Fantasy, Romance undertones
Known Issues:
The plot jumps/skips a lot, and has no real coherence and little draw and the characters (*looks at Copper*) are ridiculously flat.

Critique Requested: I'm looking for general help with plot coherence and intrigue, continuity, and character depth.
Critique Tolerance: I can take whatever you have.

Experience & Goals: This is my first novel, though I'm a creative writer at an arts school, and had to audition to get in, so I'd say my experience is rather high. I'd like to publish or something of the like.
Method of Communication: NaNoMail or email. evangelinecrow@gmail.com
Anything else? Disclaimers? Not really~

Title: Luca

Length, Draft and Language: 13K, first draft with some edits, English

Brief Summary: In the blood-red glow of a lunar eclipse, a she-wolf is about to give birth. The three pups that follow will have many struggles ahead of them, including the harsh conditions of their first winter. However, something more threatening than snow and wind stalks this pack – a lone wolf with a coat as dark as night is rumored to be traveling in the area. An exile from his former pack, this newcomer will shake this small family to it’s very core and unleash a terror more frightening than any legend.

The story follows Luca, a white she-wolf with a craving for adventure, as she grows from a pup to a young wolf. Throughout the course of the novel, she leaves her pack with a dangerous and mysterious lone black wolf. As they travel together, the two wolves realize that they play a part in an ancient prophecy, a prophecy that is vital to the very survival of the forest.

Known Issues: There are two chapters that are "unfinished"

Critique Requested: Is the plot too boring in this part of the novel? Does the beginning hook you enough? Are my characters defined and well-developed?

Critique Tolerance: I can take any sort of criticism. I prefer tough, in-depth critiques.

Experience & Goals: I've been writing and editing novels since fourth grade, so I've had an immense amount of experience. (: I hope to make this novel publishable in the future.

Method of Communication: NaNoMail me for my email.

Title: Night Sky

Length, Draft and Language: About 10 pages (less than 5k words), first draft in this form, English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words)
Yuugin is tossed into battle between Night and Day to fulfill her destiny of becoming the hero of the Night Sky. But destiny should be what you make of it yourself, not what is written in the stars. Even with the pressure the Stars have put on all three of these chosen ones, humans were never meant to take part of this battle anyway.

Subgenres & Keywords: Prophecy/Chosen One Low magic Swords

Known Issues: I have issues with Show don't Tell. I'm uncomfortable with the chronological order as well. There's also some awkward dialogue.

Critique Requested: In it's first form, it was three full length novels. It's less than 5k words, but does it still feel complete, even as a short story. I've had trusted friends read it, but they've been aware on how it all works since the beginning.

Critique Tolerance: Be like my cool English teachers. Point out everything that stands out, what makes it good, what makes it bad, and how to fix it.

Experience & Goals: I'm no professional, I'll tell you that. I've written other things, but nothing I've taken seriously before. This story I've been writing and rewriting for almost 6 years, and I really want to just finally have a product that I would like to send out for publication.
Method of Communication: NaNo Mail, but will email if preferred.

Anything else? Disclaimers? There's some strong language in it. It's also one of those things that need to be fixed.

Title - Remember

Length, Draft and Language - about 50K words (156 Microsoft Word Pages), First Draft with a few edits, English (With a little but of Cajun accent)

Brief Summary - Prosper knows who and what he is, heir of an aincient wizard, last of that family, hunted by a centuries old being, bent on the total annihilation of said family... Or is he? Plagued by strange nightmares, Prosper learns that not everything is as it seems.

Sub Genre & Keywords - Brothers, magic(ish), ages long family feuds...

Known Issues - It's kind of a complicated story... Tell me if it's too complicated though. (And by complicated, I mean, 'What just happened, I thought the story was going this way?' and 'What happened to ____ ____?' Kind of complicated.)

Critique Requested - Um, everything? Characters, Plot, Continuity... Anything that you think needs work!

Critique Tolerance - Please, tell me what you honestly think. But would you be so kind as to say what you liked as well.

Experience & Goals - This is my first novel and I would like to know how it did.

Method of Communication - Email would be preferable.

Disclaimers: A little bit of torture and bloodshed. Not much, but 'horribly realistic' in the words of my sister. You be the judge of that though.

Title: A Heaven In Hell

Length, Draft and Language: 53k, soon to be more

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): The war has never changed. Until recently, with more Larek roaming the night, more than there has ever been since the First Battle. Now Elan, warriors from Amary, have to rid the Earth of the dark threat. And whispers brew of a foe of old that has returned to tip the scales of the war, and threaten the protected gates of Amary itself.
However, there are darker tales abound, when an Elan warrior saves the life of a Larek. When hidden truths are revealed. When phantoms long hidden away emerge once more.
The war will never be the same again.

Sub Genre & Keywords: fight scenes, romance, secrets, lies, monsters, loss, loyalty

Known Issues: For this story, it has to be pacing and tone. I want to know if the way the story progresses is alright, or if the tone of the scene stays constant.

Critique Requested: Mostly on character development. That is a big one for me.

Critique Tolerance: Just lay it on me! I can handle it!.... Just be gentle with your words please? >.<

Experience & Goals: I have been writing FOREVER, and this is a the first book of a series I have worked on for five years.

Method of Communication: E-mail or Nanomail, whatever floats your boat.

Anything else? Disclaimers?: Oh, and there are a couple of sex scenes, but I don't go into detail of it, otherwise I would be in the romance section. Teehee! ;P

Title: Swords and Thrones: The Legend of King Darlo

Length, Draft and Language: 51,604 words, 1st draft, english

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) : An old wizard travels to a country where he finds out the king is a ruthless man. So he plans to replace him with someone else. This is the story of how he goes about doing this and what happens afterwards. It is a prequel to a trilogy that I have written.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Fantasy, adventure, royalty, magic, humour.

Known Issues: I think at some points it isn't clear who's talking, I will sort that out when I edit it at a later date.

Critique Requested: I know I'm rubbish with grammar so a few points on that would be useful. I would also like to know if the story was interesting, made sence, etc.

Critique Tolerance: Please be as brutal as possible, as long as you're constructive about it. I very rarely get people to critique my work so i'd like as much feedback as possible.

Experience & Goals: May look to get this published but I'm not sure. This is the longest thing I've written, but I have also written the trilogy that come after it. I have lots of ideas though but never see them through.

Method of Communication: Nanomail and email is good with me.

Anything else? Disclaimers?: Bit of violence here and there.

Title: A tale of two sisters

Length, Draft and Language: 50004 words 1st draft English

Brief Summary Liz and Rawen are twins, living on the streets. Liz wishes for a life among the queen's knights, while Rawen only want her sister at her side
One day the twins see something they are not supposed to see, and Liz get's killed. As she holds her dying sister in her arms, Rawen promises to avenge her, no matter the cost
Follow Rawen's story, as she takes on a life she never really wanted, in order to keep a promise to her sister, and to bring justice to her city

Sub Genre & Keywords: Fantasy, adventure, some action and humor

Known Issues: My shift key stopped working a few days into november, so I have next to no anotations in the document wich sometimes makes it hard to know if someone is speaking or thinking

Critique Requested: I know that I sometimes drag things out in some scenes and sometimes I just follow the red line with little to none action outside the main storyline, if I can get any pointers like, here you could have your character do that, and here this could have been in the background and so on

Critique Tolerance: as long as the critique is going to help me become a better writer I can handle mostly anything

Experience & Goals: This is basically a prequel to another bigger story I am thinking of writing later, I just want to see how it holds up

Method of Communication: email, send a note with the subject NaNo to petrogal@online.no

Anything else? Disclaimers? For some reason I have this thing about making female characters... I think there is about 5 boys in the entire story, I dont know how it happened that way. Other than that I think I'm in the clear... will be some bloodshed here and there, and a small hint of serious injury to a characters eye.

Title: The Misadventures of Mordecai le Vogel
Length, Draft and Language: About 50k, 1st draft, in English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): A species of humanoid canine just "forget" how to love and at once an entire race is thrown into disrepair. Mordecai le Vogel is sent to investigate when out of the blue, another of his kind who he has never met before shows up claiming he just wants to help. The maid is more than she appears and a large troll suffers a mental breakdown and wants to kill everything he comes across.
Sorry my summarising skills are so bad :/

Sub Genre & Keywords: Fantasy, adventure, animals, love, humour

Known Issues: There is probably a good scattering of plot holes and some of my characters motivations for doing things might not be clear etc

Critique Requested: I want to know how bad it is, how I can improve, if my characters are believable and/or likeable and if I am melodramatic in places as I tend to be. Please tell me if I go overboard etc

Critique Tolerance: Anything at all that is constructive and will help me :)

Experience & Goals: I've written all my life but never a full-length novel sized book. I would just love to get this story good enough to show to other people and maybe think about getting it published one day

Method of Communication: Send me a NaNoMail

Anything else? Disclaimers? Possible self-harm triggers but nothing too bad. No descriptions of it happening or anything, just one of the characters noticing scars etc. And (I hope) it's a bit emotional in places, one or two of the characters are fairly complex (again, I hope) and my 2nd MMC has been through so much bless him :'3

Title Dragon Blooded

Length, Draft and Language 56k, Draft 1, English

Brief Summary In order to save her clan, Jin-Yu joins the elite military organization and finds a family. She doesn't trust them, they don't know her. Can she and they come to middle ground before someone destroys the remnants of her clan?

Sub Genre & Keywords Political intrigue, clans

Known Issues The antagonist's helper needs more development, and the antagonist needs introduced earlier. Also, the fantasy terms need to be explained more.

Critique Requested Critique it all. ALL OF IT. Give it to me.

Critique Tolerance Thick skinned. Be as harsh as you like.

Experience & Goals I'd like to publish it some day if it can be salvaged.

Method of Communication Email, preferably. PM for Email.

Anything else? There is violence (A few things that might be borderline abuse), and some terms that aren't explained real well.

Title: Drapetomania

Length, Draft and Language: 50,420 words, Draft 1, English.

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Following an 'incident' with a lion, a girl runs away to find herself travelling through different worlds, eventually making her way back home again. Expect: an 'incident', lots of running, different landscapes/cultures/beings/worlds, superstition, a curse and a reconciliation.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Mainstream fiction- it's fantasy because it involves other worlds. Keywords: Fairytale, magic, superstition

Known Issues: The characters are not strong, there is a pacing issue, some of the dialogue is inane.

Critique Requested: All of it please!

Critique Tolerance: Anything constructive - positive or negative

Experience & Goals: This is my first full novel. My goal is to become a better writer.

Method of Communication: Message on here, or email if you ask for it.

Anything else? Disclaimers? My novel is weird in parts!

Title: Inspirus

Length, Draft and Language: 50K, nano (so draft i guess), English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Caspian, a 600 year old Fera (or druid), has a problem. Her arch nemeses, the Revidon, are after her. When Inspirus, a fellow Fera, shows up, she has no choice but to run away from her carefully constructed life. First however, she must attend to the death of her fist mate, Eldric, who she hasn't spoken to in 200 years. A bigger problem arises when Capian learns how few of the Fera are left. She takes it upon herself to hunt down the Revidon and stop the slaughter of the Fera once and for all. This leads to a show down in the snowy north. Then Inspirus is captured by the Revidon.
Shay can see werewolves and fairies. At least that's what she calls them. Then she meets a girl who calls herself Snowspeaker. Snowspeaker knows Shay can see the Revidon. With several other of these Fera blessed individuals, Shay goes on her own adventure discovering her power as she goes.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Fantasy Thriller, fighting, magic powers.
Known Issues: My character development fell off right in the middle somewhere and Shay and Caspian kind of became the same character at the end. There's a lot of places that need more description

Critique Requested: Honest and thorough. Tell me what works and where you're confused. Make suggestions, even if you think they aren't great. They will get me thinking, don't be afraid to say 'i have no idea what you mean here.'
Critique Tolerance: I will take a lot of stuff but don't insult me. I won't tolerate 'this isn't done, do it this way.' I also don't like just grammar people who put in commas only for chapters on end. That's not what I need.

Experience & Goals: I've been in a writer's group for almost three years. I have pretty thick critiquing skin. I've been writing for about 10 years total but am not published or anything like that. I wish I were though. The point of this novel was to get me into a habit of writing everyday, however it turned out better than I thought it would and I would like a preliminary looking over before I take a personal stab at it because I know it too well.
Method of Communication: Nanomail and then email for those interested.
Anything else? Disclaimers?: A lot of characters die in this book, but their deaths aren't gruesome. There might be crying depending on your disposition.

Title: Lena

Length, Draft and Language: ~52K (Third draft, still a WIP. My NaNo novel though!). English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Lena Jones' eighteenth birthday is meant to be a magical day. It’s not meant to be the day where she meets Micah.
When she meets Micah, she comes to learn that her entire life has been a dream. She's not human, nor is her boyfriend Landon Reed or their best friend Evan Walker. But not only that, she's now forced into this ongoing battle as a key piece that's remained hidden to humans.
The war between the angels and fallen angels. Choosing either side means the end of life as everyone knows it. Letting her guard down means death to her.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Teen, Angel, Fallen Angel, Werewolf, Action, Adventure

Known Issues: Pacing. Sometimes I feel like I rush to the next thing while others need to move faster.

Critique Requested: Constructive criticism. What works. What doesn't. I know there are a lot of mistakes--it was my NaNo novel this year, but I'd like to clean it up and get it ready to try to publish.

Critique Tolerance: Harsh. I can take it :)

Experience & Goals: This is my third NaNo win. I've completed other novels and am working at getting this novel finished. I'm hoping to eventually get this cleaned up to get it published and so forth, so any help is appreciated.

Method of Communication: NaNoMail then email

Anything else? Disclaimers? This involves twisting things around to make the plot work. Also, there is an underlying line about Heaven and Hell--obviously--so if you're not the type that likes things like that (think Supernatural season 4 and on), then you might not like this. Also, this novel is not yet completed. I'd like to, if you would like to be the reader, to send in chunks (the chapters are pretty long), that way I don't overwhelm the reader and I can finish it :)

Title: Anja

Length, Draft and Language: 23k words.. Its my rough draft. English. (Some Latin, but the English definition is given.)
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words)
Anja and Sven, even though they are adults and should be responsible, aren't very responsible at all, within a year after they got married, the pranks and troublemaking got worse. And it had to be because Sven wasn't always working out in the stables anymore, Or maybe because they just had more fun being torublemakers then being responsible, What ever the case may be, Anja's paren'ts were fed up with all of the mischeif, it needed to be stopped. As soon as possible, and that could only be achieved by sending them away, because they doubted they would even be able to get them to stop. After quite some thought, Queen Amelia and King Xavier decided that they would confine Anja and Sven to a cottage in the woods that was to be guarded by soldiers, which were to be the escorts for them if they wanted to leave as well. They liked it for the most part, aside from kissing the castle. It meant Anja could have a garden and Sven could do plenty of hunting. Though, they did wish that sometimes, just sometimes they could have a bit of freedom. They are Prince and Princess of Adenworth, afterall.

Sub Genre & Keywords: It's really a YA Fantasy, so its posted in the YA and here, Witches,
Known Issues: Time period accuracy, It should be in Renaissance times, but not sure if it actually looks/sounds like it to the reader, its confusing, due to long nights without sleep trying to write it, it's also not in chapters.. I kinda.. got out of doing that, even tho in the beginning I meant to,

Critique Requested: I'd like critique of the plot and characters, really.. of all of it.
Critique Tolerance: Constructive, but also harsh. If you hate something, come out and say it, if something's confusing say it. Just say it. No matter how rude it could sound, it doesn't matter to me. I can deal with it. :)

Experience & Goals: This is my first NaNo, and It was a big step for me.. :) I'd like someone.. OTHER then fam to see it.. for once...
Method of Communication: NaNoMail me, Its on Yarny, so I may have to get your email to send it,
Anything else? Disclaimers? There is alot of fighting, and descriptive violence in the fighting, and many injuries. And having to deal with such.

I hope you'd like to read it, :)