[Romance] Requests for Readers

Dragonchilde — Tue, 29 Nov 2011 21:32:37 -0800

Please use this thread to find a reader for your novel! When posting, please remember to use the Template as listed in the sticky thread at the top of this forum! PLEASE read the guidelines before posting... not reading the guidelines results in unnecessary questions and the possibility your request will be ignored. Please use the preview option when posting. At this time, there is no ability to edit, so what you post WILL stay as is. Post your request here for your readers. It does not have to be for the novel you wrote for National Novel Writing Month. (If you are interested in something posted here DO NOT respond in this thread, send the poster a NaNoMail.) Do NOT contact someone about reading their novel if you have no intention of providing feedback. Copy and Paste Template: Title: Length, Draft and Language: Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) Sub Genre & Keywords: Known Issues: Critique Requested: Critique Tolerance: Experience & Goals: Method of Communication: Anything else? Disclaimers?

[ROMANCE] The Road to Hell (Censored Version)

Harlow — Tue, 29 Nov 2011 23:41:36 -0800

Title: The Road to Hell (Censored) Length, Draft and Language: 50,431 (98 pages in MS Word), English DRAFT/EXCERPT - “How much is he paying you?” Ingrid tersely inquired, slightly impressed with how Reggie finally decided to find someone thorough. She had sent home most of her prospective hitmen with a gunshot somewhere on their bodies. She hesitated to shoot this one…at least for the moment. Perhaps it could have been because he was good looking, and perhaps it could have been that, when he spoke, with his deep, rich voice and sophisticated English accent, she felt her guard being melted down, a slightly girlish giddiness made her stomach jump. In fact, he was so effective at getting her to calm down that she lowered her handgun. “$50,000,” Everett responded. “Am I only worth $50,000?” Ingrid scoffed, agitatedly setting her gun down on the endtable. She stood up and started to pace about the room, upset with how little Reggie thought of her. Ingrid had grown up a rich girl, and some fat, balding has-been only thought of her being worth a mere $50,000 when she had been lavished with millions? She wanted to kill him herself. She stood against the wall with her palm pressed against her forehead in annoyance. “If I may inquire, what did you do to make him want you dead? Clearly there is something that you may have done to require me to be here.” Everett noted, keeping his hands on the back of his head, but turning to look at the upset female behind him. “I was too much of a lady to him. I was too kind. He fell for me and it was unreturned, so now he wants me dead.” Ingrid turned around, her back to Everett and facing the lamp. “Sometimes I wonder why I’m always so kind to people.” Everett stood up, removing his hands from behind his head, and in a show of ninja-like stealth, made his way behind Ingrid. He lifted his hands to the light switch, and in a single click, the room was back dark again. With the light now off, Everett turned Ingrid around, placing his large, strong hands around her delicate waist, pushing her closer to him so that she could feel the weight of him against her, their bodies pressed together. He wanted for her to feel what she had done to him. His breaths deep, he looked at her and told her what he thought. “Well, I’m sure that there are lots of men that want you. I even want you at this moment. You’re very attractive, you know, you wicked little temptress.” Everett leaned forward to her, teasing her ear with his lips, allowing his hands to trace over her sides. He moved them up, passed them softly over her breasts, and used his fingernails to trace her neck. Placing a kiss upon her neck, he moved his hands just enough to where he could pull a small knife from beneath his sleeve. He continued to trace patterns on her neck, but he ultimately began to press the blade of his knife deeper into her flesh. He’d at least give her the idea that he wanted rough sex with her. But the sound of a gun cocking brought him out of it. “Do you have a gun pressed against me?” Everett stopped his foreplay, his hands starting to release their grip. “What part do I have it pressed against?” Ingrid’s voice was set in a low, husky whisper. She knew what she was doing and she loved every bit of it. “You have it aimed against a part that is rather important to me, my dear.” “Oh, I’m sure you don’t want to lose that part. However, if you keep playing with that knife against my neck, you will. Now be a dear and let me go or I’ll be a bitch and shoot it off.” Everett cautiously lifted the cold blade from her throat, and Ingrid reached around and turned the light on, finally taking a good look in Everett’s green eyes as he towered over her. “I think some negotiations are in order, my dear. You’ve earned my respect, my little minx.” Brief Summary: Everett Belvidere is a sociopath with a sordid past - a past littered with abuse, incest, rape, murder and war. He now lives as a bachelor, working as a hired gun. Even in spite of his dubious morals, he is chasing an idea. Ingrid Morrison is a vivacious singer with a mysterious past - a mystery that adds to her charm and allure. She is running away from that past in order to forge her own path and live her life on her terms. She attracts the attention of various powerful figures, including a corrupt politician and a dirty cop. The two people met only through fate. Their relationship is one of convenience, revenge and control, but it blossoms into something more. However, adversaries always lie in wait, but will their biggest hurdle be what they don't know about each other? Sub Genre & Keywords: Neo-Noir Fiction. Known Issues: This is completely unrevised. There are points where it does not flow well. Bear with me and let me know where improvement is to be made. Critique Requested: Plot, Character Development, Continuity. Critique Tolerance: Consistently Positive, but don't take it completely easy on me. Experience & Goals: First Novella, just trying things out. No real goals - I'm not trying for publishing. Method of Communication: e-mail me at blood [underscore] red [underscore] roses87 [at] hotmail [dot] com. PM me here if there is no other alternative. Anything else? Disclaimers?: There are parts in this novel that are VIOLENT. There are extremely graphic depictions of violent acts, including a vivid description of a disposal of a body. There are moments in this work where you may have to get up and take a walk, particularly in regards to rape, incest, descriptions of war and racial slurs being used. Feel free to do so. Because this is the censored version, a lot has been removed and reworked.

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

Vedfolner — Thu, 01 Dec 2011 02:36:43 -0800

Title: It’s Complicated! Length, Draft and Language: 128 A-4 Pages in word, written in English. Brief Summary (not more than 300 words):The first part is about the female lead characther who gets sent to see the father she hasn't met in eleven years. She then proceeds to make a mess out of everything, has a few affairs, gets involved with the mafia, gets married, becomes a widow, has a child...The second part is about her daughter Victoria, who makes a few mistakes of her own and cleans up some of her mothers mess. Excerpt available for anyone who'd like a sample, just send me a NaNoMail Sub Genre & Keywords: Drama/Action. Known Issues: Boring action scenes, problems with punctuation. Critique Requested: Just a quick review to give a nudge in the right direction. A comment on the plot and development of the story, and something on character development. Critique Tolerance: Bring it on, be harsh! I feel I can edit it better that way. Experience & Goals: It’s my first novel and I have no previous experience. Not hoping to get published. This is just for practice, to see if I can spew out something readable. Method of Communication: I prefer letters or mail, but anything goes. Anything else? Disclaimers? Includes violence and sex, and is in no way censored.

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

Skryll — Thu, 01 Dec 2011 05:00:12 -0800

Title: In the Shadows of Fireflies Length, Draft and Language: 50,683 words (about 100 microsoft word pages) Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) 2300AD. Humanity's capitalism and corporate greed have poisoned the planet, leaving vast sections uninhabitable. Far to the north lies one of the last remaining colonies, surrounded by the biospheres that keep the last remnants of humanity alive. The city remains in perpetual darkness, with several hours of sunlight barely enough to keep life sustained. Thus began the Bioluminescence project, the last ditch attempt to bring light back to a fading planet, and the hope of one day restoring it to a habitable state. Within these walls lie the Deathwhispers, the keepers of the dead. When people from the main colony begin disappearing it is up to Detective Gray Anderson to solve the mystery. But with no body and no clues, sometimes the only way to solve a mystery is to venture into the forbidden, into the city of the dead, the Saqqara. And occasionally... if you listen close enough... the dead tell tales. Sub Genre & Keywords: Sci-fi, Romance, Slash fiction (no erotic scenes though) Known Issues: Plot holes, general poor creation of the gay relationship between Gray, my MC and another male character. One section where I had to make my characters act like they were in a musical (word sprint aftermath) Critique Requested: Plot help, assistance with branching out the description of the environment and the characters, general overall critique of the quality of the work and what can be done to improve it. Help toning down the romantic relationship (it's too feminine in my opinion... and a little too spontaneous) Critique Tolerance: I'm looking for constructive criticism, but I can take a little harsh criticism at times.. What I don't want are flames. I need to improve my novel, not decide to scrap it. Experience & Goals: This is my third NaNo novel, but the first one that I'm actually editing. I'm not aiming to publish, but it ideally would wind up pretty good. I haven't edited it as of yet, so it is still a really raw draft. Method of Communication: NaNo mail or I can provide my email address on request. I'm happy to provide an excerpt to anyone who is interested of 1500 words. Anything else? Disclaimers? This is a gay slash novel with a sci-fi environment. Please be aware of the content before you take my novel on. There also are descriptions of violence. :)

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

Liz10 — Thu, 01 Dec 2011 13:59:01 -0800

Title: A Time to Live Length, Draft and Language: 51,407 words (written in American Typewriter 12 pt. font = 210 pgs in Word), English Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) Celia and Ben work for a time travel agency and they are sent back to 1964 Mississippi to prevent the rape/murder of Barbara-Louise Mackensie and the lynching of Fredrick Douglas Freeman (he was accused of her murder, but was actually innocent). The first part of the novel takes place in early 2012 and centers on Celia and Ben's relationship and the things that they have to do to be ready to go to 1964. The second part of the novel, which I am only just starting, is what happens once they get to 1964. The focus broadens a bit to include Barbara-Louise--aka Bobbie--and Doug (he doesn't like being called Fred or Fredrick). At this point there are four different narrators with a possibility for a fifth (another character wants to be heard, damn it lol.) Sub Genre & Keywords: Sci-fi. time travel Known Issues: This is the sequel to another novel that I started writing, but didn't feel like using for my NaNo novel, so some of the background information (about the other novel) changes as I change my mind about the other book. However, this is really only mentioned in a few places. I also know that I have a slight tendency to switch from past and present tense. Last, I don't particularly like the 8th chapter, so I will probably end up re-writing that. Critique Requested: Does the presence of so many narrators in the 2nd part take away from the novel? I do want to tell Bobbie and Doug's story as well as that of Celia and Ben and not just say, hey look there are parallel relationships. Critique Tolerance: Be harsh. I can take it. Experience & Goals: This is the first actual novel I have written. The book that I started is only about 14k words and since I plan on changing most of it, I don't count that one. I do want to be published, so whatever you can tell me, i would appreciate. Method of Communication: Send me a NaNo-mail with your e-mail and I'll send you what I have so far. Anything else? Disclaimers? Just wanted to add that it isn't close to being done--probably another 30-50k words are needed to finish it out.

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

yipeng024 — Tue, 06 Dec 2011 22:27:04 -0800

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

Mrs.SpockKitty — Wed, 07 Dec 2011 13:55:11 -0800

If possible i'd like feedback within a week or two. I apologize in advance for the summary, i'm never good at summaries. Hope you enjoy it! :) Title: Treasured Heart Length: 50,000 words Draft: 1. Language: English. Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): I slowly walked back on the trail, straining my eyes to see if my phone had fallen out somewhere along where I had been walking. Something shimmery on the ground caught my eye, so I stopped and bent over to see if it was my phone, when all the sudden strong hands covered my mouth and pulled me up. Though I wanted to scream I decided it’d be best to just stay quite and see what happened. I than felt something like cold metal against my head, it took me a minute to realize it was a gun. “Darling, if you don’t want me to pull this trigger than you will keep quite and do what I say.” The deep raspy voice said, I slowly nodded my head to show this man that I would keep quite and do what he tells me to do. “Good girl…. I’ve been watching you lately, you’re a very beautiful girl, but there is something that’s wrong about you. And so, I want you to fix it. I spend a lot of time with you, well more like around you or in the background. I’ve seen that you keep things from people, things that could easily be resolved if you went and got help from a friend, or if you just got it out of your little brain. But nooo, you like to keep everything up in that little mind of yours don’t you?” He nudged the gun closer to my head Sub Genre & Keywords: Romance, teenagers, adventure, Known Issues: My grammar isn’t the best, writing can sometimes be confusing (or so I’ve heard) Critique Requested: Plot, character structure, tone, grammar, character development Critique Tolerance: Anything Experience & Goals: First novel I’ve actually finished. Not sure if I want to publish it yet. Method of Communication: Message me on here (Nanowrimo) Anything else? Disclaimers? None.

Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

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Darkest Embrace

RobynPierce — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 14:48:19 -0800

Title: Darkest Embrace Length, Draft and Language: 101,975 words/third draft/English Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) While running away to escape the actions of her deceased father, Elyssa Smith is caught in the worst storm that Lanistter Isle has ever seen, forcing her to seek shelter in the only place nearby -- Lanistter Castle. Soon, however, it's made clear that the inhabitants of the castle are the ones she's running away from in the first place. Zeke Lanistter is the head of the European Lanistter branch -- and a sadist through and through. He has bloody plans for Elyssa, and will stop at nothing to get rid of her. Reid Lanistter is known by many for his womanizing. But when Elyssa enters the castle, he does all he can to protect her from Zeke, unexpectedly morphing into a one-woman man. In a sinister turn of events, Reid becomes the danger to Elyssa's life, and it's Zeke who finds himself doing whatever he can to protect Elyssa... Sub Genre & Keywords: Paranormal romance Known Issues: Story seems muddled. Critique Requested: Plot, grammar, structure [or anything you think will help! I'm open to feedback] Critique Tolerance: I can take harsh critiques; don't hold back. Experience & Goals: This was the first novel I completed, and I've been working on it since nano'10. Method of Communication: email: robyn[dot]marie[dot]pierce [at] gmail [dot] com Anything else? Disclaimers? There are some dungeon scenes in here where someone is beaten to a bloody pulp.

Re: Darkest Embrace

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Re: [Romance] Requests for Readers

PotatoPasta — Tue, 14 Feb 2012 20:24:58 -0800

Title: The Pure Snow Length, Draft, and Language: 795 words/second/English "It's beautiful outside, isn't it?" Robert sighed, looking at the snow gradually pile up about the window as he held his wife's hand. Stone shook her head, surveying the environment. The trees were covered in the glistening white snow, as was everything else. "Yeah, it's gorgeous. It's too bad I can't stay out here to enjoy it as much anymore..." "Well, it's not like they can keep you in that hospital for long, right?" Robert kept on a smile, trying to be optimistic again. "P-Plus, it's not like you can't come out here and see it again, right? Y-You're gonna be fine!" The trembling in his voice showed that he was worried. Stone had been in and out of the hospital due to a disease that had been spreading slowly throughout her body. Finally, the hospital decided it'd be best to keep her in Intensive Care until she gets better, or if she gets better. "Yeah, everything's gonna be fine." Stone smiled back. "Oh, let's go over here!" She ran over to the large field by the park. "I want to make a snowman, have a snowball fight, and make snow angels!" "Ah, so you've got big plans for this field, dontcha?" "Of course I do!" Stone fell unto the snow and began making a snow angel, or attempting to make one. "In fact, just for today, you can call me Snow Queen, okay?" "Alright then!" Robert fell unto the snow next to her, making a snow angel as well. "So Snow Queen, what happened to your fear of cold weather?" "Haha, the Snow Queen isn't afraid of anything!" Stone giggled, now turning on her side. "Besides, I don't want to live the rest of my life in fear of snow, or anything. Living life with fear just limits what you're capable of doing, you know?" "Yeah, I see what you mean." Robert turned on his stomach and rested his chin on his palm. "I'm gonna go make a snowman, okay?" Stone lept up and ran to the farther end of the field, knee deep in snow. She began balling up snow into her mittened hands, noticing the snow falling apart immediately. Robert sighed and walked towards her, eyeing Stone's actions. "You know that's not how you make a snowman, right?" A dark blush crept over her face, frowing at the boy who was chuckling at her. "Like you'd know how to make one." "Why yes, I do. For one, the snow isn't going to pack together with your mittens on." Robert slipped his gloves off, then stared at Stone, whom he expected to do the same. "Come on, take off your gloves." "B-But it's cold!" "Ah, I thought the Snow Queen wasn't afraid of anything. Don't tell me the Snow Queen is afraid of getting cold hands?" Stone pouted, soon hesitantly slipping off her mittens. "Okay, n-now what?" You could tell she was already in pain, the cold wind stinging her once warm hands. "You just take some snow and roll it around until it becomes a huge sphere-thing." "Way to be descriptive." Stone rolled her eyes and began to pick up the snow, making it into a sphere. "Good, you've gotten through the first step! Now, you've got to--" Robert's speech was interrupted by a snowball to the face. "Oh, oh my gosh! Y-You should have seen the look on your-- your face! It was p-priceless!" Stone said, gasping from laughter, hardly able to speak. "I see, so we've taken that route, huh Snow Queen?" "You betcha--" A snowball came into contact with Stone's face. She wiped the snow from her face, seeing Robert smirk galantly. "That's it, you're gonna get it!" The whole field was completely empty, but was filled with the snow and the happiness of the two children. ------- "Man, that was fun." Stone sat on the snow covered bench, still laughing and covered with snow. "Sure was, wasn't it?" Robert smiled and held her hand. "I guess living life with no fear really isn't bad at all, isn't it?" "No way, it's the best! In fact, I want to do this in the snow everyday!" Stone looked off into the field, the deep snow covered with foot tracks. "When I get out of the hospital, we should do this again. It made me really happy to have this much fun with you." "Yeah, let's do this all the time! We'll have fun in the snow however much you want!" Robert pulled Stone into a hug, smiling and giggling. "You're really the best person I've met in the universe, you know that?" Stone blushed deeply, hugging him back. "Y-Yeah..." "I want this winter to last forever, so we can just come outside and do this everyday!" "M-Me too!"