[Other Genres] Requests for Readers

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Title: The Test of True Love

Length, Draft and Language: 97,951 words. First draft. English.

Brief Summary: Jasmine was a spoiled princess who was always right until she met Trevor, a clergyman unafraid to tell the truth. Trevor makes a habit of condemning the Queen, a crime punishable by death. Intrigued by his beliefs and the honesty that could get him killed, Jasmine keeps meeting the young man. But when the two fall in love, Jasmine is forced to reveal her secret relationship and her new faith to her mother, the Queen.

Angry at Jasmine's deceit, the Queen throws her daughter in prison to change the stubborn girl's mind. It is in the cells of the dungeons that Jasmine learns the depths of her faith and the strength of her love for her intended...and her mother.

Jasmine soon faces a choice. She can honor her mother and marry a groom she's never met, or honor her love for Trevor and refuse the match, insulting the temperamental Queen in the process.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Christian romance, forgiveness, medieval times

Known Issues: This time period is before the Reformation. To reflect my own beliefs (and make for easier writing), I portrayed a faith that didn't really become popular until after the Reformation. I am aware this is factually inaccurate.

Critique Requested: Did the plot work? Was it believable (minus the disclaimer above)? Too long? What did I miss in way of descriptions?

Critique Tolerance: I can handle pretty much anything.

Experience & Goals: This makes my tenth completed book. I have yet to be published. This was my latest attempt at flexing my writing muscles, and I want to see how much I still have to work on.

Method of Communication: Email

Disclaimers: Rape happens in the story. It's not described, but it is mentioned more than once.

The Christian faith is also displayed prominently in the story (as you probably guessed once I mentioned the boyfriend). I try my best not to be pushy or to lose the interest of one who doesn't share this faith. I'd like feedback from others who do not share my faith background so I can know whether or not I accomplished this feat.

Title: Shadow Games
Length, Draft and Language: 67, 366 words. First draft. English.

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): It's long after the Battle of Naboo, and from the shadows, Darth Sidious plots revenge -- sending his new apprentice, Darth Vader, into battle in order to test his skills against the Jedi. Meanwhile, Viceroy Nute Gunray, still angered by his defeat at Naboo by Queen Sabe and the Jedi, is forced to ally himself with the Confederation (and once again Sidious) in order to survive. In the meanwhile, fledgling Jedi Padme Naberrie is sent to the planet of Kamino to investigate the attempted murder of Queen Sabe, whilst Jedi Knight and new Master to Padme Obi-Wan Kenobi is sent to guard the Queen at Naboo. But as a romance buds between Obi-Wan and Sabe...can they resist their feelings? Or will they go down a path that will most certainly destroy them? For Lord Sidious has plans within plans...and things are not always as they appear.


Sub Genre & Keywords: Fanfiction, Star Wars Prequel Trilogy AU, AOTC AU, Jedi Padme, Role Reversal, Dark Jedi Anakin, Sobiwan, Obi-Wan/Sabe, Sabewan.

Known Issues: Mostly worried about keeping the characters in character (granted, this is an AU, but even so, it's pretty important to me). It's been a while since I've written in the Prequel Era again, let alone an AU, so I'm worried it might show in things such as research errors and so on and so forth. So I would appreciate some feedback regarding that. :)

Critique Requested: Just keep an eye out for plot holes, research errors, character/continuity errors, plot contrivances, whether or not the romance is interesting enough...just keep an eye out.

Critique Tolerance: I can handle pretty much anything.

Experience & Goals: I've been writing STAR WARS fanfic for a while now, but let's just say that this has been my first foray back into the PT era. Mostly wrote it to flex my writing muscles a bit.

Method of Communication: Chat or email.

Anything else? Disclaimers?: Other than torture in one scene and the death of a parent in Vader's flashback (his mother, Shmi, more precisely), I can't say that there's anything truly...objectionable in terms of content.

Trying here as well as I seem unable to find a beta for this fic and it's getting a bit urgent. D:

Title: New Life
Length, Draft and Language: 24k long, second draft, English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): This fic was written for polybigbang round three; it's a lifestyle D/s situation with no graphic sex. The main poly system is an OT7, and it's fanfic for RPF (real person) fandoms. My MC has just joined the system and is getting used to how everything works, so we get to know the system through his eyes.
Sub Genre & Keywords: lifestyle D/s, contains character with schizophrenia, kink, polyamorous relationships
Known Issues: Mostly making sure the plot is working properly and there are no glaring errors.

Critique Requested: Yes; keep an eye out for any continuity/plot/research/other sort of mistakes.
Critique Tolerance: If there's a problem, mention it.

Experience & Goals: Have been writing these guys for a long time, as well as poly D/s, but they're obscure fandoms only I write so I'm not expecting a canon beta. I've been writing fic for many years now, so I'm not a beginner.
Method of Communication: NaNoMail or email ibdjehutyATgmail.com
Anything else? Disclaimers? This is for polybigbang and I need a beta for this, and have been unable to find one so far. My usual betas aren't available. I'm just looking for mechanics, not canon. Final drafts are due at the beginning of January so I'm asking anywhere I can think of to see if anyone at all will do this for me. I'm getting worried it won't get beta'd in time and I'll have to drop out. :(

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Title: :An Autumn Dream
Length :58000 Words
Draft : Final
Language : Moderate English
Brief Summary :
Two Indian States(Tamil Nadu and Kerala) are presently in a row over Mullaiperiyar Dam.
This Realistic Fiction is an insight into the soul and feel of a five year old child who was in this extraordinary place more than half a century ago.
It is about the life of people who lived in the Dam Site, where humanism was beyond the barriers of territory, language and culture.
It is 'almost' a True Story beyond controversies, and the timing of the Story may help in a small way, to sit back and analyse a complex issue, concerning the Dam.
Genre : Main Stream
Sub Genre : Realistic Fiction (For All age groups) Mainly relates to the people of Tamil Nadu and Kerala, with an ethnic flavor.
Keywords : Out of the ordinary way of living, First person narrative of a kid.Dam ,Appa(Dad)
Known Issues : Controversies concerning Mullaiperiyar Dam ( Idukki District Kerala India)
Critique Requested:
Will this really help in the present situation, if not defuse the mounting tension between the two States?
is the language too naive?
Is it patchy?
Is the reader convinced about the honesty of the writing?
Will it appeal to the people not concerned with the issue?
Will the story reach people other than Indians?
Critique Tolerance : Any level of criticism as long as it is honest and not lopsided.
Experience & Goals : This is my first Novel. But the driving force behind it, is a lifelong passion.
It is a genuine attempt to communicate with the heart of the reader and appeal to the basic live and let live aspect of coexistence.
Method of Communication: Nano Mail, Email
Disclaimers?
I am echoing what I saw through the eyes of a little girl more than five decades ago. So in my story some characters might be real, certain incidents might have really happened. if anything was real or any character of the story is you, and if the facts are twisted or protracted or real, forgive me for bringing you in without your consent.... Just relive your past and enjoy it for old time's sake.

Title, Double-Edged Sword

Length, Draft and Language, 110 pages, 1st draft and very rough, English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words), Jenny Ann was a seemingly normal human girl, living a seemingly normal life. But one day all of that changes and she finds herself in a place and time that is not her own. What was once her most favourite dream has just become her most hellish nightmare.

Sub Genre & Keywords - Star Trek, Fan Fiction, Drama, Self-Insert

Known Issues - Punctuation is an issue for me, I have a learning disability and have a difficult time placing certain bits of punct. in the correct places.

Critique Requested - Everything. I want to know, in each chapter, what I should leave in, expand on or take out, also what would be a good idea to add in.

Critique Tolerance - I cannot handle overly-harsh critiques. Too many of those when I was younger almost destroyed me. I can take critique if it is tactfully approached and there is good along with the bad. Also tell me how I can improve something, telling someone "This sucks!!" doesn't help.

Experience & Goals - I have written many novels before, but have never sought out publishers. I write purely as an outlet as well as to share with other people, but I'd still like a nice polished story!

Method of Communication - E-mail is best, but I can do messanger chats.

Anything else? Disclaimers: Abrasive language, hints of rape, mild torture, disciplinary spanking.

Title: Ready to Go
Length, Draft and Language: 50,836, first draft, English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words)
Nicole is trying to change her life by heading out to California. She meets Daniel, who decides on a whim to help her out and drive her completely across the country. They both know the situation is a little strange, but she needs the ride, so she goes with him. On the way, they meet wild animals, haunted houses, a crazy mechanic, and for the first time, they truly meet themselves.
Sub Genre & Keywords: travel, road trip, coming of age
Known Issues: I didn't know where I was going to take the story while I was writing it, and I'm afraid it shows.

Critique Requested: I need a streamlined plot. I need to know what to cut and what I should expand.
Critique Tolerance: Lay it on me. Be harsh. I would much rather prefer a detailed explanation of why you hate it than a short note of how much you love it.

Experience & Goals: I've got a book in a publisher's hands now, but it's a widely different genre (a cookbook). I want to be a fiction writer, so I want this manuscript to be publish-worthy.
Method of Communication: Email, Nanomail if you need to.
Anything else? Disclaimers? Some f-bombs, but they're not every other word.

Title: Painless

Length, Language, Draft: Approx. 50,000 words; English; first draft.

Summary: Koninide, the latest craze in chemical warfare, has had an unprecedented effect in the Imperial Soviet Empire, turning its peoples into "Eschers". Some crave war, others are found cutting open their own bodies for pleasure, or out of pure curiosity. Despite the government’s attempts at controlling them, they revolt, and they succeed. Three Eschers tell the story of their lives and their relationships with each other. They depend on each other for some tenuous stability in their lives, but the atrocities of one and the horrors witnessed by all haunt them, forcing them to confront the worst in themselves and each other. It is a story full of suffering and senseless violence and of the corrupting power of blind love.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Dystopian, mental illness, grief

Known Issues: The novel at the moment is not in chronological order. It's not exactly in completely random order, but it's close. There are a few mistakes in the timeline (e.g. two people become serious in their relationship before they have met each other). There are quite a few scenes that have absoluely no bearing on the plot and need to be deleted all together. A few scenes that could be very moving are very poorly written. It's also written from in first person from three different points of view. I am planning to put in a more logical order and have fewer changes in narrator.

Critique Requested: Nothing about the plot, nothing at all. There is no plot. The only technical area I'd like help with is tense, as my tense is a bit patchy. Also, how it affected you emotionally. There's a lot of gore and horror and rape and loss, and the MCs are quite loatheable, so I'd like to know how you felt about all that. Essentially, I want feedback on the individual scenes. Any thoughts about how I've handled the changes in timeline and POV would be great, too.

Critique Tolerance: Whatever you prefer. The only thing I really don't want to hear is any complaint about the content and the questionable morality of it all.

Experience & Goals: I am published, but only as a poet. I've only finished two or three novels, but I've been writing for a long time. I've already started my second draft for this story and I know most of what I need to change. What I would really like from this critique is to know how emotionally affecting it is and how I can make it more so.

Method of Communication: email is preffered, but I can use nanomail, and am open to discussing alternate means.

Other: Every trigger warning you can concieve of. The main ones I can think of are: rape, torture, bdsm, sexual content, child loss, child abuse, necrophilia and incest. If you would like to swap novels, I am open to that. I seriously doubt that my novel is done any justice by the summary included here, so if you'd like to get an except or a more in depth summary, I would love to give you one.

Title: The Clockwork Boy.

Length, Draft and Language: Unfinished (currently 12K and growing), first, English.

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): Jamie Sullivan's all set to go off to college next year. Senior year will be a breeze. He's content with his lot in life -- he runs long-distance, he has a solid group of friends, his little sister isn't a total pain and his mums are great, if embarassing. And then the new kid and his tagalong best friend throws a wrench in his plans and twists his world view. Strangely enough, he finds himself not minding and more than a little curious about these new students.

Vic Rossi has a secret, and he's content to keep it close to his chest, no matter how nosy Jamie Sullivan is. He ran from his swanky private school to hide in plain sight, dragging his best friend Sam with him just to keep it from getting out. But with Jamie prying and the pressure he's feeling at home, will he really be able to last the year without cracking?

Sub Genre & Keywords: Romance, Slice of life, Trans issues, LGBTQ, Young Adult. (Poly-relationships, maybe)

Known Issues: I don't quite know where I'm going with this, with only a vague outline to go by -- and I'm pretty sure it shows. Also, there might be a bit of tense-switching, as I'm used to writing in present-tense.


Critique Requested: Anything and everything you can think of -- characterization, plot holes, grammar and clunky prose. I might need a good deal of trimming, too, and to tighten up the pacing. If something rubs you the wrong way, let me know.

Critique Tolerance: I have a thick skin, and I like getting harsh, detailed critiques, just as long as you can balance it out with at least one positive comment.


Experience & Goals: I've tried Nano for the last couple of years, though I have a hard time following through and finishing projects. I'm currently trying to get published in magazines with short stories and features.

Method of Communication: Email, Nanomail, AIM -- I'm up for anything.

Anything else? Disclaimers? This might end up switching target audiences from a teen demographic to something more mature, if the main relationship develops in a way that I think it will.

Title: The Sinister Urge

Length, Draft and Language: 48,000 words, Final Draft, UK English

Brief Summary: After she dramatically quits The Wires on live television at the height of their fame Lilli Morgan disappears from the music scene. Behind her she leaves the truths and rumours of her departure. Despite all this The Wires guitarist Adam still harbours his long held feelings for Lilli.
Returning to the music world with her brother Elm and a hand full of old friends Lilli forms Lilli And The Munsters. No one, least of all Lilli herself, expects her to be shockingly reunited with The Wires when they're suddenly brought in as guest judges on a reality TV show.
Will Lilli start a love affair that will send shock waves through the music world?!
Will Sarah make her way through all the male members of the TV crew?!
Will Ken and Liz ever get blue cheese?!

Sub Genre & Keywords: Humor/Drama/Romance

Known Issues: Hopefully none apart from the odd spelling/grammer/typo error. And also just me thinking it's crap :(

Critique Requested: That the story is believable, that the plot flows, the laughs/surprises are in the right place and work? The characterisation is good. Most important for me personally is that the continuity is right.
Basically a general overview on what was good/bad about reading it and also thoughts on the layout and illustrations.

Critique Tolerance: Fair

Experience & Goals: No experience of writing a proper story/novel before. Goal is to tell a good story and keep people reading.

Method of Communication: Send me email on here.

Anything else: Maybe would suit a reader with a dark/black sense of humor but anyone in general but I'd say for 16+ readers.

Disclaimers: This is a work of pure fiction.

You can download a full copy here: http://www.mediafire.com/?nay68nxbyr773y2

Thank You :)

Title: Stormseeker: Balance of the Force
Length, Draft and Language: 152k words, slightly edited, English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) Lexen Skywalker isn't who he seems to be, and his dreams may be more than just dreams. As his memories return, he learns that he has visited many universes throughout his lifetime, and more.
Sub Genre & Keywords: Fanfiction, Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic, crossover
Known Issues: I haven't done much editing on it yet and my beta is being kinda lazy.

Critique Requested: Comment if you want, or just read it if you want, I don't really care.
Critique Tolerance: Don't complain about the premise or the fact that it's a crossover. (I wouldn't feel the need to mention this, but I've already had one person complain about a crossover being a crossover... it's supposed to be a crossover, darn it!)

Experience & Goals: I've been writing as long as I could write, and have written several novels. Not interested in publication and don't understand the obsession with it in the internet age.
Method of Communication: Nanomail is prefered -- I rarely remember to check my email.
Anything else? Disclaimers?: Swearing, mature themes, mention of homosexuality (but it's not slash).

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) The epilogue for a historical fantasy. I'm kind of writing this novel backwards.

Sub Genre & Keywords - fantasy, historical

Known Issues - This is a cleaned up from a bloody typewriter draft. Problems with repetition, therefore, probably still abound. My Alpha is not present because she's doing stupid things like raising a baby. ^.~

Critique Requested - I want to know if it evokes the correct emotion. I need more of an alpha approach of if this strikes the right chord. So this is more of a test run to see if I've nailed what I'm supposed to nail. Please tell me what kind of emotion you think the piece evokes and if you could list the best guess at the modern-day country/(ies) involved. Extra points if you can guess the time period--though I doubt anyone will get the time period. (Not enough clues, I think--unless you are an ace at history.) No cheating with Wikipedia please.

Pointless, but if you can guess the song this section was based on you'll get an extra gold star from me.

Little to no critiques on grammar, style and spelling please.

Critique Tolerance - 10, fully honest and willing to bring a whip if need be, but please follow directions. If I argue or whine with you, are are free to kick me. I should be able to ask questions though.

Experience & Goals - Long, long time writer. Aiming to publish.

You can Nanomail me.

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Myeong Hee, my mudang of Garak, do you remember when we first met? I saw you near a river and you were so pretty that I thought you were a heavenly maiden as in those Zhongguo tales. I thought if you were to undress, I would steal your clothes so you would marry me. But you picked up sticks instead. I watched you for at least an hour picking up dried driftwood. When you didn't take off your clothes and turned to leave, I jumped out. I asked you when you were going to take off your clothes, so I could steal them. I didn't get to finish before you punched me in the nose and screamed. You had such fire in your eyes that my knees quaked. I couldn't explain myself with such a glare, so I ran away.

You were always mad when I disappeared without a word. Why can't I feel the same towards you?

I walk occasionally in the places that we walked together. Wind still blows through the markets where they once were filled with leaves, but now are filled with people. They still are windy, but instead of the rustle of leaves are the rustle of people and voices instead. Your voice is distant now. Some thing I can only remember and seek so much.

Remember the willow lane we walked with Mihaenja? I went there too and for an instant I felt your hand holding my right hand and Mihaengja holding my left. She must have gotten her bravery and intelligence from you. I wanted to tell that to you before you reversed time, but perhaps there was a little cowardice left inside me. I couldn't explain to you how much she loved you then.

Every time the moon and sunrise, I remember you by my side and even if the time we spent together is now a lie, I can't help want to seek your smile and laughter. I want to find you even if the finding is futile.

When I go out into the streets of my country, I can't help but look for your face in the crowd. You loved the street performers as your mother did. You told me that once. I know that I used to object at how you dropped so many riches into their bowls, but now I find myself dropping in riches too. People may have laughed at us for doing such a thing, but they wouldn't understand as I now do.

You taught me the meaning of bravery when I had none. You taught me the meaning of conviction. Can we do this life over where you are by my side so I can be braver and be able to do what I could not before?

Perhaps the spirits are punishing my people. Perhaps I am made to remember so that my people will remember your curse and your warnings. But why must I remember your touch when no one else can seem to find you?

When I knew speech I started to remember you. It was slow, but dreams followed me. When I was old enough I tried to leave Kyo to Garak so I could meet you, but Honorable Mother would not let me leave. Only when she died before my twentieth birthday and after my coming of age ceremony was I able to journey to the places your parents called home. The mounds I had visited so many times to apologize to them were not there. The ground was flat. I was relieved because I knew how much you loved them, but I am saddened to see a trace of you I knew disappear.

So I traced my steps back to the places that you said your parents lived, in the hope of finding you. The house was empty and bare. I searched the hiding places you showed me once, but nothing was there. I am sorry I took too long, but I tried to come as fast as I could.

I looked in the markets, too, because that's where the gossip is. The people there remembered you and your parents, but no longer knew where you were. It was hard to disguise myself and remember to speak your language properly. I am sure you would laugh at my attempt to act as your people. How can a country be so small and I cannot find the single person I have waited so long for?

I held out so long after my name turned from Homutawake to Ojin. I really did try. I visited your King and even dared against all odds to ask about you and your parents there. He wasn't angry as you said he would be if I should ask such a question. So I asked your distant cousin, the Head Mudang too. She frowns a lot--you were right. The whole Garak court pled ignorance, and my own court pled extreme impatience. I've been forced back to my country to stay.

I wish to know if your soul has been displaced--in part I wish for it because then you could be in my own country. Perhaps you were not born to your parents. Is it selfish that I want it this way?

I search for you in my wives' faces, though I cannot mention your name. I promised you that. I don't look at their physical features, but the light in their eyes, how they laugh, but none seem to have the same fire as you do. And I know you would be furious if I married them, yet did not please them. I try hard to make them happy.

I saw a woman much like you--Princess Yakaha. I wonder if your spirit lives through her. She smiles the same, laughs the same and loves me all the more. We do not have to hide as you and I did. Our children are legitimate under the law, but I cannot know if she is you.

Myeong Hee, if you are born into the body of Princess Yakaha, because your soul has been displaced, please tell me. Show me a sign. Perhaps Mihaengja could return to us and the price we paid would not be so high. I would name her "Megumi" which means "Love's Light" in my language after the one hundred days replacing her baby name, "Shadow." You could love her as a parent should without your heart torn to pieces as you push her away.

My other wives--they give birth to children that look like Mihaengja. But she doesn't return. Her touch, voice, smile like medicine that you could not bring yourself to enjoy without a sad heart.

I know you would call me cruel for trying to make other women you and my other children Miheangja. But how can I forget so easily?

There is one last thing I have to confess. The life before--I had my historians record that version and tell about how my Honorable Mother was regent for 69 years. You would definitely scold me for such an act--but she was so pitiful after she gave birth to me in this life. She had half the strength to do anything. She, of course, didn't remember--perhaps it is that way with you too--but you should have seen her so frail. I had to take pity on her and wrote the other history, even if it ends up shortening mine.

But I would prefer you scold me in person. Because if you did, I would touch to memorize your face properly, trace every dot on your skin, and hold you so close that you and I would forget to breathe. Please don't say you remember and want to forget.

I leave this letter in the hiding places you told me about. Even if you don't return to me in this lifetime, please, please leave a little sign you were here. I will check upon my visits to Garak when I can, though it cannot be often.

Myeong Hee, I'll smile truly when we are together again and I meet your smiling face. If not in this life, please, please return to me in the next.

Hi all! I'm going to try posting here. My novel sort of dances the line between a few genres. I thought fantasy would be a good fit but when I checked out the thread, it just didn't seem right.

Title: Lineage

Length, Draft and Language: 90,000 words, first draft (has had a bit of editing from the rough draft), English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): This is a pitch that I wrote for the story:

Family arguments had become a normal part of the day for eighteen-year-old Calista. She was anxious to start college and leave the turmoil behind her. But then her father suddenly leaves with no word. Calista struggles to understand how her warm, loving father could abandon the family in such a heartless way. She also has to deal with her mother, who has become cold, distant, and closed-off. She has no one to turn to for comfort or answers.

More startling, Calista realizes that she can hear, feel, and see things that other people cannot. When she receives a visit from Eliza, an ancestor from 1840s Ireland, she finds out that nothing in her life is as it seemed. She has a connection to Eliza that she doesn’t fully understand, but Eliza proves to be very helpful in revealing something very important that her parents had concealed: her family lineage holds the key to everything.

Calista is too defiant to just accept the fate that she has been given. Instead, she sets out to seek answers. Who – or what – is she? Where is her father? And why is everything falling apart around her?

To complicate things further, she falls in love with a man so forbidden that a relationship with him could threaten the very people she loves.

Ultimately she has to make a choice – should she take the complacent route, giving up an essential part of herself for the sake of safety? Or should she take the riskiest path to independence?

LINEAGE is a novel that explores self-discovery, the desire to seek personal freedom, and the family relationships that tie it all together.

Sub Genre & Keywords: contemporary fantasy, historical fantasy, romance, mystery, adventure, family relationships, psychic abilities, spiritual healing

Known Issues: I think I probably need more description in some areas. I tend to repeat words and sometimes need someone to point out when something is getting redundant. I probably use too many adverbs as well.

Critique Requested: It would be helpful if someone could check plot and make sure I'm not leaving key parts out. Also, just an overall pointing out of what is good and what needs work.

Critique Tolerance: I want to work on the things that need work but this is my first completed novel so it would be nice if the reviewer could be on the nicer side with a critique. For instance, I'd rather hear, "This works here but this part is a little confusing for me," instead of "Your writing is so confusing that I can't figure anything out." ;) (Just an example...I don't think my writing is too confusing as I've been told in the past I tend to be fairly clear and straightforward, but if it is I would appreciate being told in a gentle manner)

Experience & Goals: As mentioned, this is my first completed novel. I have written a 90 page thesis for graduate school which included a chapter written in the form of a play but have never finished a novel. I may be interested in publishing some day. Right now I just want to finish all the edits.

Method of Communication: Nanomail or email

Anything else? Disclaimers? This novel is really not intended for YA. There are a few sex scenes in it, so be forewarned. Nothing too erotic, though. There is a character from 1840s Ireland and there are scenes set in the 1840s. I could really use help from someone who might know what dialogue from this time period would look like.

Title - Hard Feelings

Length, Draft and Language - 54,768, First Draft, English.

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words) -
Myles is a broken man. After a disastrous break-up with his boyfriend, he found himself unable to feel any emotional responses to anything. Friends, family, work, nothing provoked a response.
In an effort to make positive changes in his life, Myles moves north and quickly finds work in a bar where he meets Warren, Adrian, and Kirstie.
Friendships are tested, love blossoms, and tempers run high as everyone around him experience the emotions Myles should be feeling, but can’t.


Sub Genre & Keywords - Gay Fiction / elements of Sci-Fi

Known Issues - Occasional spelling errors and incorrect words from writing on my mobile phone. Feel free to highlight any you spot.

Critique Requested - Please critique everything: Plot, structure, tone, POV, grammar, character development, continuity, the lot!

Critique Tolerance - Be as brutal as you feel you need to be about the bad bits but please do balance with the things you felt were good too.

Experience & Goals - This was my first novel, written in November 2010. I would love to publish it but I don't know if there is a market for this kind of gay/sci-fi. I haven't sent it out to any publishers as I know it still needs some significant editing but I am not sure what to add and what to cut.
My November 2011 novel was a sequel to this book so ideally I want to be able to make sure the first book is interesting enough for the public and, where I add or cut elements, I can incorporate such changes into the sequel.

Method of Communication - I am happy with email communication. I will send out a copy of the word document protected but you will be able to mark up any tracked changes in the document if you feel it is appropriate. Otherwise, an email explaining the highs and lows of the book would be acceptable too.

Anything else? - This is a gay fiction novel and there are one or two sex scenes but it is in no way intended to be erotic fiction. It is graphic to an extent but not smut (the word C*ck is used four times in dialogue, the words d*ck, kn*b, or pen*s do not appear at all).
I don't have any deadlines for this but ideally I would just like to hear from any readers/reviewers as soon as possible.

Many thanks

Gaz.

Title: Muslim Relations

Length, Draft and Language: Around 20K words in all, First Draft, English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words): A woman is aware of her husband shady assocations, but doesn't really make an attempt to investigate them until a murder of a police officer in her town occurs. She immediately suspects her husband.

But the investigation launches her into a series of dramatic events. She eventually discovers another murder plot, and tries to put a stop to it.

Sub Genre & Keywords: Suspense? Muslim, murder, bans, president,

Known Issues: I have trouble with transitioning behind chapters, like I have troubles with knowing where to end the chapters sometimes.

I don't use semi-colons well.



Critique Requested: If there are any blatant grammar errors, I would like that to be pointed out. But just about anything in the novel can be critiqued.

Critique Tolerance: Dish it out, the harsher the better. I need the novel critiqued so I can make my novel the best it can be. :)

Experience & Goals: I don't think I have ever finished a novel, but I've been writing for a few years ( maybe since around seven or eight yrs old? ). I want to become a better writer, and still experiment in different genres. ( Except romance/erotc fiction, I can't stand fiction that is mainly romance sometimes. )

I want to get a novel published someday.

Method of Communication: NaNoMail, or my email. If you'd rather communicate via email, tell me and I'll NaNoMail you my email address.

Anything else? Disclaimers?: The characters are mainly Muslims, but some aren't. Abuse is mentioned, dead bodies are found ( but not found in a gruesome condition ), and there's a murder scene, but it's not horrendous or gross.

Title: Ex and Why

Length: 100k, second draft

Synposis: As and adult, Mystery Clarke has to deal with adult problems, infedelity, sexual identity, and familial deception. As a child Mystery has to deal with being a girl that had testicles and the confusion that brings. Mystery is told by Heather, her on again, off again lover, that she wants to leave her husband so that the two of them can be together. In the past this is what Mystery wanted, in the present, the infedelity of Heather makes her not so sure. Coupled with the recent death of her father, and her past with him, Mystery reflects on her life and tries to not make the mistakes of a child while an adult.

Critique Requested: Everything and anything. I want plotting critiques, character critiques, language critiques. If it is there to be read, then it is there to be critiqued.

Critique tolerance: Constructive criticism.

Experience and Goals: This is my second novel. I want to get it published. I think there is a good story here.

Method of communication: Shoot me a nano-email.

Disclaimers: Language and sexuality, nothing graphic though.

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