Stuttering HIPS??? http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701 Coffeedrinker I checked out the tip here about K.A. Mitchell and read a few excerpts on Amazon (question aside, does anyone know whether I can buy e-book versions not Kindle of her books anywhere?), and that's where I came across "his hips stuttered" to describe that he came. That was a new one for me, not just that while I have seen many men ejaculate many times and up to the most hefty O's wrested from them, I really never came across anything I would describe as "stuttering hips." Yeah, stuttering men I met a couple, but they did that while trying to talk. Spurting ejaculate, that I also met with quite a bit. Thrusting hips too. But heck, no stuttering hips. And what bowls me over is that it's not the first time I heard about "stuttering hips" in fiction, I've seen it one or two times in fanfiction, but well, that's not been run past an editor I told myself. But now I read what clearly must have been run past at least an editor and someone reading the copy for errors and typos too. And still that is in. In short, where does this come from and who created that atrocity? Fri, 02 Dec 2011 00:53:39 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921160 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921160 Amai Irregular thrusting that happens during ejaculation could be called stuttering since it throws off the "normal" rhythm. Fri, 02 Dec 2011 02:24:39 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921414 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921414 Coffeedrinker I have yet to see any hip stutter. I mean, people, language! stutter (ˈstʌtə) — vb 1. to speak (a word, phrase, etc) with recurring repetition of consonants, esp initial ones 2. to make (an abrupt sound) repeatedly: the gun stuttered — n 3. the act or habit of stuttering 4. a stuttering sound I've yet to see vocal chords on a hip, hear it try speak or make a sound. Seriously. This is one of the most inane attempts at paraphrasing an ejaculation that I read so far, sort of a modern version of purple prose. What's worse, it comes over as if the writer failed to remember there's the word "shudder" in the English language. Brrrr. Fri, 02 Dec 2011 03:04:00 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921521 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_921521 Amai Wait, then shouldn't you say that you: "have yet to hear any hip stutter"? And there are always the noises associated with sex. But then I guess it would be: "Their bodies stuttered" Fri, 02 Dec 2011 10:28:35 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_922732 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_922732 rparker Synesthesia. Fri, 02 Dec 2011 21:20:38 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_925817 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_925817 Coffeedrinker It's not about noises, I've read half of the book by now, she uses it repeatedly and it's simply the attempt at natty prose and an evasion of the actual description of what takes place. I'm the sort who looks and hunts and would have a stutterer say "aaaah"... ;-) So, no visible mouth on hips means no vocal cords. Sat, 03 Dec 2011 07:29:35 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_927264 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_927264 Amai [quote=rparker] Synesthesia. [/quote] *falls over laughing* Sat, 03 Dec 2011 13:23:47 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_928318 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_928318 CynChains Stuttering hips?! That is wayyyyy too purple for me. Give me a break! Wow. Sun, 04 Dec 2011 19:07:10 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_934081 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_934081 Saker Pup Best guess? Someone misheard and assumed it was a phrase: "shudder" ---> "stutter." Once it was put on the internet, it got around and then the editor either assumed it was part of the author's style or was under a similar impression as the author. (Seeing/reading this reminds me of people who write "an other thing," honestly.) Mon, 05 Dec 2011 03:40:51 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_935976 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_935976 fantasychallange7 A friend of mine says "mine as well," which is kind of like that. XD Tue, 06 Dec 2011 21:31:25 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_944628 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/46701?page=1#forum_thread_comment_944628