How to write a sex scene. http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503 Jin-roh Hello! I am relatively new to writing for NaNo and have only been creative writing for about four years now. I recently read "Kushiel's Dart" which was one of the first books I've read to describe sex scenes in great detail. I also realize, that next year, I'll probably do a novel with sex scenes in it just because. Can anyone help me out when it comes to writing sex scenes? I know there are a lot of books out there, but if you know of any blogs, podcasts, or other material that would help that would mean a lot to me. Wed, 28 Dec 2011 14:11:00 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1006749 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1006749 Jin-roh I emphasize that the closest thing to sex scenes I have ever written is a description of two characters dancing in a club. Wed, 28 Dec 2011 14:11:47 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1006752 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1006752 TKofG I like playing the scenes out in my mind at least once, before I try writing it. (Usually at 4am in bed, for some reason.) I make sure I know who is going to do what, and then, most important, I make sure I know how they feel about everything. With the mechanics of the scene under control, hopefully, I then concentrate on describing the feelings and emotions that go with the physical motions. Thu, 29 Dec 2011 13:29:29 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1009125 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1009125 Nicole92 It really depends on how you write. Some people like to come up with a good fantasy, hash out where people are and what they're doing at any given time. I just sort of wing it, because that's how I write. My sex scenes (and my other scenes) usually turn out pretty well, if I do say so myself. The other thing you have to consider is your target audience, and making the sex scene appealing to them. If you have a specific or unusual fetish that turns up in your fantasies, consider leaving it out of the sex scenes you write, unless you're writing to appease that specific part of the population. If you want ideas of good sex scenes, look at some of the stories on Literotica. Just sort by the most popular stories of all time. That should give you a good idea of what to look for, and assist you in developing your own writing style. Sun, 15 Jan 2012 02:53:30 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1061486 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1061486 A.L. More Stacia Kane's blog series "Be a Sex Writing Strumpet" is really awesome for teaching you to write sex scenes. http://www.staciakane.net/2008/07/09/be-a-sex-writing-strumpet/ Fri, 20 Jan 2012 23:12:04 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1078378 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1078378 Jin-roh Thank you Nicole. Thanks for reminding me of the audience. I'll rewrite all those scenes that involved iguanas and smurfs. It seriousness, that website you mentioned was exactly what I was looking for. It seems that there is a wide spectrum of what works. Some of that stuff just seemed to be "person A has sex with person B. Here are the details." Others had nicely worked plots, with characters, their motiviations, their thoughts and such. Seems like it best to describe a sex scene from one persons perspective? That doesn't mean first person, but it seems like most of the authors are concentrating on one person's perspective rather than alternating between both people. AL, I'll check out that blog. Thank you again! Hopefully, I'll have something to share here soon. Mon, 23 Jan 2012 16:30:19 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1085583 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1085583 andresanthomas It also depends on what fits your story and your characters. There isn't a one size fits all answer. Wed, 25 Jan 2012 14:17:44 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1090801 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1090801 Jin-roh Okay, it may be a Faux pas to post this online, but I'd like to hear what people think. This is a simple scene that I have only editted over once. I feel like the pacing is a bit fast. Nonetheless, I'd appreciate the "experts" around here to tell me what I'm doing right because then I'll do more of that. -random scene- Paige felt Guyer’s hands around her stomach. He squeezed her gently from behind. They both swayed to the faint pulses of the bass drum coming from the first floor of the house, and through an ajar, bedroom, door. His hand went from the bottom of her baby-doll tee and slowly lifted it up. “There are people down there still.” She said. She touched his hand with uncertainty. Guyer placed his lips gently on exposed shoulder and released them. Next, she felt his mouth closer to neck. “It’s nothing,” he said. He reached out and closed door completely. The faint pulse of the bass drum became faint muffles. Somehow, the room felt more vivid. Her baby-doll tee still half lifted. Paige offered no resistance as Guyer lifted it up and pulled over her head. She turned around and clasped her hands around the back of his neck. Guyer saw her. She rocked back letting her hands cascade down his torso. She felt his eyes running down her exposed chest down to her tight short. Her shorts were feeling wet. Guyer threw off his shirt, and charged her. He held her against the wall and she felt supple and plaint. “Oh… God guyer,” she whimpered as he kissed her neck in a soft tease, “kiss me.” Guyer groaned as he thrust his tongue into her mouth. She swirled hers around his until he released. They locked eyes and were both panting. She could see lust and wildness in his eyes. He pulled her off the wall and fell into bed He moaned as she kissed and bit his neck. It became warmer and hotter with each touch. Paige drew her leg on top of him “Damn…” he said, “you’re insatiable.” “Yeah?” Paige said as she sat up to straddle his jeans. She unclasped her bra and through it over her head in triumph, “I’m insatiable?” “Yes,” She locked eyes with him and let her hips circle on top his waist. She could feel him through their clothes. “And your fucking hard.” She said. She fell down and they locked lips in passion again. His hands ran up her back and suddenly she felt a yank at the back of her head. She yelped out as she felt the joy tingle at the back of her neck. “Oh God I like that…” she said. They kissed. He pulled again. She cried out. She was soaked through her panties. He was breathing harder. Slowly she pushed out his arms until he was spread-eagled on the bed. “Paige…” Guyer exhaled, “you’re so hot.” “Yeah?” she kissed his then slid down and placed her lips on his chest. “Yes…” She made a trail downwards which each kiss. Guyer quivered with each step. Finally he hand undid his buckled and she pulled down his pants. He was nude before her now. She looked down at his cock, rigidly pointing up, for the first time. Paige dove down. She slowly licked up from the base of his shaft to the tip. His whimpers and groans only encouraged her. She kissed the cap of it. Already, she could feel it beginning to drip. “Dammit Paige, deeper…” he said, as her grabbed the back of her hair. Paige obliged. Her mouth slide down his cock. She let rest there and hummed as he tugged at her hair. Up she glided up again, letting her tongue polish every inch of his tip. Then head bobbed up and down as her hand cupped his balls. “Oh that’s good, Paige,” Guyer said. She let her tongue and lips feel every inch of his cock. She let her mouth polish the tip. And she felt the tug and her hair as he grew tenser. Guyer breathed harder and tighter now. Paige felt his hips convulse. Finally his cock felt thicker. Guyer groaned tightly. Paige closed her eyes and accepted the spurts of cum into her mouth. Paige stood up to swallow and looked down at Guyer. He was sprawled like a dummy. She gave him a moment to lie and recover. “Guyer…” she said. “Yeah?” Paige grabbed his hand and hung it at the top of the shorts she still wore. “My turn.” Sat, 28 Jan 2012 16:14:25 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1097949 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1097949 andresanthomas It is hard to get lost in this section because you've got a lot of punctuation and spelling problems. It pulls you out of the story and you can't get into the mood when you keep falling out. Sat, 28 Jan 2012 18:50:58 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1098399 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1098399 Jin-roh I see... In college, I always exchanged papers with other people when it came to proof-reading. I have never been able to proofread quickly or effectively. Sun, 29 Jan 2012 10:58:10 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1099738 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1099738 Nicole92 I always write it from the perspective of a single person, even in a third-person-omnipotent book. It's more immersive and less confusing. If you have, say, a dominant character and a submissive one, and you want to include the perspectives of both of them, split it between two different sex scenes that are faintly similar but not a copypaste job. Fri, 03 Feb 2012 14:32:13 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1112669 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1112669 ashleynichols Have the kind of sex that you'd like to write. Or, failing that (if you're writing cross-gender and or your characters are of different sexual orientation than you), perv some of the stuff on Fetlife. ^_^ Tue, 14 Feb 2012 09:34:25 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1139050 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1139050 Jin-roh [quote=ashleynichols] Have the kind of sex that you'd like to write. Or, failing that (if you're writing cross-gender and or your characters are of different sexual orientation than you), perv some of the stuff on Fetlife. ^_^ [/quote] Now's there advice I think we can agree on. Of course, I think I've just written two bi-sexual female characters on accident. Looks like its Erotica Lit for me! Sat, 18 Feb 2012 12:37:43 -0600 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1149958 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1149958 Jin-roh I've edited and re-edited the previous scene. Let me know if anything works. Now, obviously, this could use a lot more build up to this point. I guess I'm just trying to get a feel for what I'm doing right, even out of context. Paige felt Guyer’s hands around her stomach. He was standing behind her gently squeezed. She held one hand behind her head, only so that she could gently pet the back of his. The pulses of the bass drum thumped up from the first floor of the house. Their hips were locked togethered and they swayed to its hypnotic rhythm. He guided up her baby doll tee. “There are people down there still,” she said. She touched his hand and looked at the slightly ajar door. Guyer placed his lips gently on her exposed shoulder and released them. Next, she felt his mouth closer to her neck. “It’s nothing,” he said. He reached out and closed the door completely. The pulse of the bass drum became faint muffles. Somehow, the room felt more vivid. Her tee was still half lifted. Paige offered no resistance as Guyer lifted it up and pulled it over her head. She turned around and clasped her hands around the back of his neck. He body swayed to the hypnotic thumping from below Guyer saw her. She stepped back and let her hands cascade down his torso. She felt his eyes running down her exposed chest down to her wet shorts. Guyer threw off his shirt. Then she was slammed against the wall. She fell supple. “Oh… God Guyer,” she whimpered as he kissed her neck in a soft tease, “fuckin kiss me.” Guyer groaned as he thrust his tongue into her mouth. She swirled hers around his until he released. They locked eyes and both panted. He stared at her, as if thinking of what to do next. She closed her eyes she was pulled on top of him in the bed. He moaned as she kissed and bit his chest. Both of them became warmer and hotter. Paige sat up and straddled him. “Damn…” he said, “you’re insatiable.” “Yeah?” Paige said. She unclasped her bra and through it over her head in triumph, “I’m insatiable?” “Yes,” Her hips bucked on top his waist. She could feel him through their clothes. “And you’re fucking hard.” She said. She fell down and they locked lips again. Her back tingled as his hands ran up it. Then suddenly she felt a yank at the back of her head. She yelped out as she felt the joy shoot down her spine. “You like that…” he said. They kissed. He pulled again. She cried out. She was soaked through her panties. He breathed harder. Slowly she pushed out his arms until he was spread-eagled on the bed. “Yeah…” she kissed his then slid down and placed her lips on his chest. She made a trail downwards which each kiss. Her black hair cascaded around her face. Guyer quivered with each step. Finally, she undid his buckle and his pants were off. He was nude before her now. She looked down at his cock, rigidly pointing up, for the first time. Paige dove down. She licked up from the base of his shaft to the tip, and savored the feel of his cock on her tongue. His groan only encouraged her. She kissed the cap. Already, she could feel it beginning to drip. “Dammit Paige, deeper…” he said, as her grabbed the back of her hair. Paige obliged. Her mouth slid down his cock. It rest there a moment while she hummed. Up she glided again. Her tongue polished the tip, and lapped up the clear drip that had seeped out. Her head bobbed up and down while she juggled his balls. Guyer could not speak. She let her tongue and lips feel every inch of his cock. She stopped only to spit on it. She felt the tug and her hair as his thigh’s tightened and tensed up. Guyer breathed harder and tighter now. The convulses of his hips excited Paige. Finally his cock felt thicker. Paige’s mouth slid to the top again with his shaft now firmly in her hand. A tight groan came from Guyer. Paige closed her eyes and accepted the spurts of cum into her mouth. They went down with single swallow. Paige threw back her hair and stood up. Guyer was sprawled like a dummy. She smiled at him as she caressed his abdomen as she felt her own breaths. She was aware of bass drum the bass drum below again. “Guyer…” she said. “Yeah?” Paige grabbed his hand and hung it at the top of the shorts she still wore. “My turn.” Mon, 12 Mar 2012 22:25:29 -0500 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1208558 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1208558 Hope Lanchett I honestly think that was really good. I only started writing erotica last year, so I am by no means an expert, but I really enjoyed this piece. Obviously, there is room for improvement with everything anyone writes but I felt you really got the mood right. True, it all happens a little quickly but sometimes with scenes like this that is highly appropriate. Well done. :) Mon, 26 Mar 2012 17:24:02 -0500 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1240583 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1240583 Hope Lanchett To my mind, the key to a good (and believable) sex scene is good, solid, 3-dimensional characters. If you know your characters inside-out and back to front [literally ;) ] then creating 'moments' between them should be second nature. I always make a point of knowing exactly how my characters would react to certain things, what they would say, acts they would enjoy and what their kinks or fetishes are. This way, I find writing sex for them much easier. Mon, 26 Mar 2012 17:29:36 -0500 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1240601 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1240601 Jin-roh Thank you for you comments hope. If you have time to offer any more specific criticism or point out a few gems, than by all means... I've noticed that a lot of the Literotica are kind of two-dimensional. I've only read one professionally published story, and the characters seemed two dimensional as well. Those are often the 4.5 starred ones, but they can seem boring to me. I guess I'm not sure what works and what does not. I'm working on an erotic story right now and I'm trying to keep it short and simple. Tue, 27 Mar 2012 18:26:48 -0500 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1243238 http://www.nanowrimo.org/en/forums/erotic-fiction/threads/48503?page=1#forum_thread_comment_1243238