Time to rate excerpts?

I think one of the best ways to improve one's writing skill is to critique and be critiqued. Although this is also my way of getting some feedback (which a ton of people find indirect ways to ask for), I figure everyone else can get involved as well.

Rules:

1. If you want to be critiqued, you MUST critique the person before you. It's only fair, after all.
2. Don't just disappear after yours has been read by one person. Come on back. Help someone else out, and someone else can help you.
3. Please don't post over and over again. I know that everyone wants feedback, but there's a such thing as too much.
4. Let them know how funny their excerpt is. If you don't find it funny, let them know
5. Suggestions are welcome, but not required.
6. If an excerpt is not posted within the comment, read the one on their page.

Who wants to go first?

Not sure if you're intending for us to critique you, so I will anyway.
I liked yours! I really like the character of the captor. His personality and assertion of dominance really appealed to my liking. I also really liked the almost getting away, only to be dragged right back in. My only question is, in the fourth paragraph from the bottom, you say "Datman." Did you mean Batman, or was that on purpose?

Anyone can feel free to read and critique mine. :)

P.S. I know I suck at critiquing :P

@TheSlenderman:

Your excerpt made me giggle... like a lot. I love how you lead to a lot of incorrect conclusions, which then happen to be true. <- If that makes any sense, of course. Paradoxes are kinda my specialty.

Anyway, I think that you need to include a few more details between some of the dialogue, otherwise it'll start looking more like a script than a novel. I want to see what Beth sees. I want her emotions to influence my thoughts on each character. I want your word count to increase, dammit! Feel free to send me another excerpt. I'll gladly read it. I'm always looking for new ways to procrastinate.

~Minstrel

Minstrel- Ah, that makes so much more sense now. I like that idea! I wasn't sure if it was a typo or not, but I get it now.

And thank you. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

But yeah, I could definitely use a little more work on the descriptions. I'm a screenwriter (which is why it sounds so much like a script, haha), so I naturally lean toward dialogue versus description. But I'll work on that for sure, thanks for the advice! If you'd like me to, I'll definitely send you another.

I hear you on the procrastination, haha. I consider myself one of the world's best procrastinators. :D