Help with slight Rape scene

Traidy
Help with slight Rape scene
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Feb 4, 2008 - 20 30

'kay, so i didn't know exactly where to post it so i chose here.
I need a second (or third or fourth even) opinion.
Here's the low down.
I am writing a sequel to my first novel.
Soleil and Kylin were the main characters but basically in the sequel, they need to put alot of distance between each other because they feel as if they have been having sex with their siblings (Aka each other), they aren't really, they are just so close that it seems as though they are brother and sister first before husband and wife. long story. anyway. in the sequel, i've introduced a new MC, Zeek, who is going to be playing the part of the all important male role. anyway, so Kylin isn't ready to make the break, and he is unbelievably possesive.
I'm having trouble with a scene.
Kylin has seen Zeek and Soleil talking and decides to make his dominece as clear as day to Soleil and in turn, Zeek. But Soleil refuses to have sex with him, and he starts to force her.
-pause-
This is where i'm stuck. I can go in three directions.
1) have Kylin rape her.
2) have Zeek save her at the last minute
3) have Soleil finally admit that she is pregnant. (Kylin would then stop because he knows it is his child, he may need a very very cold shower then, but you know, i'll work out the finer details.

Here is what i have so far of the scene. Zeek has, as of now, left for town.

Was it just me or were there a few well placed gropes there. Surely Kylin knew what he was doing. He wouldn’t, couldn’t forget. I’m sure he was just playing the part for Zephyr, but something told me he wasn’t. Kylin’s laughter rang out the loud and the deepest of our three. Mine was starting to become forced, brought on only by the reaction on the sensitive skin, not by my having fun. I pushed off and away from them. Whether or not he sensed my distress, Kylin stopped. Zephyr, being the child that he was continued on up until the point where Kylin hauled me up and over his shoulder. I gave a slight scream, not totally expecting it. I was dimly aware of Kylin gruffly telling Zephyr to go find his room and wait until one of us came to get him for dinner. I honestly didn’t think Kylin had any thing on his mind but one thing, and I was not about to let that happen. With my secret now out in the open, he would have to force me to have sex with him, and I would not be willing a single step of the way.
“Kylin, let me go.” Calm and collected would probably be the best route to take at the moment. The floor boards passed under his boots and my eyes and a swift turn told me we had reached our, well really his, destination. Calm and collected went out the window when the door slammed shut. He threw me on the bed and clambered on himself, standing in a kneeling position straddling my legs. It took a few seconds for me to gain my bearings, and when I did, he got s swift kick to the inner thigh. He grunted and rolled over. Me, being who I am, thought that gave me enough time to make it to the door and out. So my timing was a bit off. An arm around my waist and his heat at my back, carried my rear right back to the same spot. His eyes were smothered by a lust that at one point may have exhilarated, but now only led me to struggle harder.
“Kylin, please. Stop, stop!” I beat my hands against his shoulders and chest. He completely ignored me, my cries only seeming to egg him on.
“Kylin! Stop it! Let…me…no!” His hands crept and stroked up my skin, pulling and tugging at my clothes. His skin was hot, burning to the touch. It engulfed every inch of my skin that he touched. His right hand slipped to cup my lower back where the arch of the butt met the back, sliding just past the band of my pants.

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liis5bet
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Feb 10, 2008 - 22 58

Well, if you go with the rape, then your characters will have to face a new problem in their relationship: she may seem ok with the rape, but the truth is, if woman is raped, it stays in her soul, creating a knife between them that starts to eat her and even if he does say sorry, it will propably still be there and may break them up for good - one feeling guilty, the other shame/hatred towards the one (the doubt of the situation not repeating itself doesn't let you go that easily) . Also, though it seems good idea at first, in reality, a woman in such situation may start to alienate herself from both male relationships in her life, pulling herself away from another possible threat (even if he would never do that - it's just she would start to relate him with the threat in any way possible, figuring either that his jealowsy against Zeek was the reason he did it or start to compare them two, realising that both being male (and possibly emotional) they are both equally able to do it).

Have Zeek save her at the last minute sounds as a good option to me - at one side it created greater bond between him and Soleil, while breaking up Kylin's and Soleil's bond for that moment being. But if he didn't rape her, she may still forgive him and it might even become as a turn on for those two. With this I mean she might start to wonder in line that his jealowssy was so strong that she might see that as proof of his love. But as soon as the act is done and is done against her will, he will lose her. Zeek being compared to hero at that point is also good, she can always get off the clouds later, start to notice mistakes in him, which would eventually take her back in Kylin's arms.

The third option I would save for later twist of plot. But at the same time if brough in in such situation, it would deffinitely work as it would break up all the connections / relationship levels they have accomplished so far and therefore it would start a whole new reaction line that would eventually take those two together again, but give the men alot more to wonder over and put her in the situation, where she has to choose.

So, for conclution - try to avoid the total act and let someone save her from this fate.

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Feb 12, 2008 - 14 36

Rape is assault, and no love or even lust is involved. Some women have a so-called "rape fantasy," but the fantasy is more about having a man being so overcome with desire that he can't bear to keep himself away from her. Or the fantasy is because a woman feels guilty about having sex for some reason, and when she is "forced" she can imagine she had no choice. Being beat up is not erotic, but there are ways to write an aggressively sexy scene without making one of the participants powerless and hurt. It's a challenge, but it can be done.

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