[HISTORICAL FICTION] Short(ish) story critique

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[HISTORICAL FICTION] Short(ish) story critique
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May 7, 2008 - 09 50

Title: Undecided at this point

Length: 9,000 words

Draft: 2nd

Language: English

Brief summary: In the aftermath of the Soviet offensives in Romania and Bulgaria in autumn 1944, a Ukrainian conscript deserts the Red Army and escapes to Greece

Subgenre and keywords: WWII, Eastern Front, Red Army, desertion

Known issues: Some liberties taken with historical details, some sloppy grammar (especially run-on sentences; they're a tendency of mine)

Critique requested: Mostly plot and flow, but really I'd be grateful for anything. What was your overall impression?

Critique tolerance: Feel free to be harsh; I'll try to suck it up. ;) I'd like to whip this into shape and make it something I can be proud of.

Experience and goals: This is my first real completed work of fiction. It started out as a school project and I'd like to work on it some more over the summer, maybe brush up a bit on some of the hazy historical details that I rushed over while doing research; eventually I may look to submit it to a magazine.

Method of communication: email

I have the manuscript in a basic Notepad file and can email it to anybody who's interested. No real disclaimers/warnings content-wise. Thanks in advance!
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