And considering I don't even know if I spelled that right, I'm not even sure I should be writing... Oh well.
A. Her eyes were a pure blue; the color of a cloudless sky in the morning.
or
B. Her eyes were a pure blue, the color of a cloudless sky in the morning.
I get very confused when dealing with commas and semi-colons.
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Jul 11, 2008 - 04 06
The comma is correct. Normally you use a semicolon when the bits either side would work as whole sentences in their own right, which isn't true in this case: "The color of a cloudless sky in the morning." Isn't a proper sentence because it lacks a verb. (They're also used in some circumstances to separate things in lists where the things themselves are long, but that's not your situation here).
So also gramatically correct (but not very good) might be:
"Here eyes were a pure blue; they matched the cloudless sky."
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Jul 11, 2008 - 07 50
The grammar of a comma is correct, but the writing is meh. Adjective overload. In a story ithe prose would bring toomuch attention to itself.
You can also use a "--" in your story in the place of a comma. For example, "He was wrong--especially about the flowers." It really depends on the effect you're looking for.
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Jul 11, 2008 - 12 35
Ah, thanks. ^^ Now it won't be in my head the whole time about when I can use a semi colon. ^^