| OilsDragon | First sentences! |
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Post your novel's first sentence here, if you dare! :D Mine is dreadful: "It was frigid cold the day that everything changed; the wind wound bitter through the high overpasses and tore across the plains toward Hinslow Keep at a fierce pace that afternoon." |
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17,837 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 17 01
i have three!
First attempt at the girl and dragon story:
"The kingdom of Roncherolles has lived in a relatively peaceful state for the last 500 years." UGH boring!
Second attempt at the girl and dragon story:
"This is a story about a girl."
Again, like what was I thinking
third attempt, modern Vampire story, with an MC that has been floating around my head for about 8 years now.
"I remember the day I died"
which is cliche probably, and I'm sure has been used at some point before. But I don't care, she has hijacked my story so I'm letting her run with it for now.
I'm struggling...need to start flowing soon...
----------72,088 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 17 29
Of the prologue:
"It came across her like a fever."
Of chapter one:
"The dice rolled across the board."
----------50,038 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 17 33
The first line from the first chapter:
"'You wanted to see me, Lieutenant?'"
----------"Here we are, born to be complete; We're the writers of NaNoWriMo..."
TorontoNaNo: Highlander_of_the_Bluffs
TorontoNaNo Chat: HighlanderBluffs
Twitter: @Diefman
YouTube: http://www.youtube.ca/user/Diefman
16,722 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 17 50
My first sentence by itself is boring, so I'll cheat and post my first three :o)
"The ferry pulled into the dock. As it did, Max walked up the spiral staircase to the top deck of the ship; he had purposefully waited until they had arrived at port to see Eclipse station, and he wanted to make sure that he saw it from the best vantage point that he could. He wanted the first time to be special."
------------Ryan
TW FB LJ
50,010 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 19 24
Alright, you ready for this one? It's a doozy!!!
*clears throat*
Prom.
----------~*Oh, let me warn you, sisters in Jerusalem,
by the gazelles, yes, by all the wild deer:
Don't excite love, don't stir it up,
until the time is ripe—and you're ready*~
37,517 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 20 12
I've had my first sentence planned for months!
"It was the doors that first made Porgoh suspicious."
50,832 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 20 46
Errol sighed, and looked off the edge of the building at the cars below.
... No, I'm not kidding. :D
----------TorontoNaNo.org/WordWar: Drew
Twitter: @bdoing
82,810 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 21 09
*snrk*
Mine is nice, simple, and hopefully provides a good hook.
"Something was wrong."
----------;) tag0
NaNo '08: Search & Rescue - 104K/50K - in revision
NaNo '09: TFJ1: The Fox's Fight 57K/50K - finished; TFJ2: The Trickster's Trade ?K/50K - WIP
62,946 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 23 51
"Thomas Harold Edwards was an average man."
Poor THE. lol
----------43,392 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 04 24
Mine is fail!
"The sun was hot, and she felt it through her green woolen dress and her chestnut hair clinging to her neck and back. "
----------49,364 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 04 42
Lemongrass beef salad.
(My MC has an odd habit of always planning parties but never actually throwing one - thanks to the 'adopt-a-quirk' thread.)
----------Twice as Natural (coming Nov/09): Tuesday wishes life were 'more like the movies'. You know what they say about being careful what you wish for...
68,436 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 05 49
"In the world of Cresune, one not unlike our own, a boy was born."
OMINOUS! Yeesh.
40,071 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 05 51
Poor THE. lol
Wow, that is made of win. THE. :D
... No, I'm not kidding. :D
Oh, wow. Drew, that's ridonckulous!
----------Victoria Anisman-Reiner
Co-ML for Toronto, Canada
50,000 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 05 58
"It was as though the long knife was reluctant to leave the warm, safe interior of the cellist, and Mason Lawless had to tug hard to get it out. "
I should probably mention, for context, that Mason Lawless is the protagonist.
----------LJ: gruberman.livejournal.com
AIM: NoGuitarMercy
twitter: ywgdana
8,583 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 06 05
I'll cheat too and post my first four sentences instead of one.
"Everyone remembers where they were when the war broke out. Ten years isn't such a long time. Trace back the long lines of memory and no shit, there I am, chain-smoking my way through a pack of Shanghai Lights while Alice, a sloe-eyed girl with hair like a thundercloud picks at the run in her nylons and watches the self-healing fabric shimmy up her leg like a rattlesnake's skin in reverse. It's the first time I've seen her not illuminated by neon, and our legs swing over the edge and brush against gengineered kudzu crawling up the walls."
62,946 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 06 58
Poor THE. lol
Wow, that is made of win. THE. :D
haha thanks. I couldn't resist giving him the most commonly used word in the English language as his name. hahaha. Poor soul, he's had such a boring lfie!
----------56,449 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 07 05
Also with the cheating and the first three sentences (you only have to read the first one - it's a beefy sentence).
2004: It Came and Ate Us
2005: The Once and Present Kings
2006: Must Love Ninjas
2007: In the Shadows of the Night
2009: Old Gods: or, Don't Stop Believing
80,757 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 07 33
Talon Silverash rested his hands on his knees, bowed his head, and groaned.
Not the most interesting, but it works for me :]
46,070 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 07 35
The Compound was hardly a fortress.
Makes my novel sound cooler than it is. :)
----------Week three: Oh God! It's not week three anymore?
46,070 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 07 36
Oh, wow. Drew, that's ridonckulous!
Arrggh. That word. That evil evil word. *whimpers*
----------Week three: Oh God! It's not week three anymore?
22,138 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 08 00
Tabster, I love your first sentence.
50,010 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 08 26
Haha thanks. I thought it was pretty epic.
----------~*Oh, let me warn you, sisters in Jerusalem,
by the gazelles, yes, by all the wild deer:
Don't excite love, don't stir it up,
until the time is ripe—and you're ready*~
20,155 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 10 01
"Lio looked back at his mistress."
No, not that kind of mistress. Lio is a witch/sorceress's familiar.
6,069 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 10 24
"You are cordially invited to the wedding of Duke Normington and the Lady Yolane of Winterchaise, to be held this Sunday, the Fourth day of the month of September, in the year of our Lord, Two Thousand Eighty Nine."
I figure the longer my sentences are, the less I have to write! That makes sense, doesn't it?
5,465 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 10 48
Once upon a time.
Yep. That's it.
----------Of course I've gone mad with power! Have you ever tried going mad without power? It's boring and no one listens to you!
- Russ Cargill (The Simpsons Movie)
20,135 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 12 24
Destined to be re-written...
Rachel lay awake in bed for nearly an hour hoping that if she procrastinated long enough she could just call and cancel the appointment; it's not like the therapy was helping.
35,016 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 12 36
Posting the first two because the first one is too boring by itself...
Katherine came back to consciousness slowly. Her sheets were torn to ribbons; her wrists ached; her throat felt raw; her vision blurred.
----------What comes after NaNo? National Novel Publishing Year! http://www.nanopubye.org
37,517 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 13 57
Errol just can't get a break with you people! :O
37,006 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 15 14
Yay, I finally have one I don't hate! LOL.
"Outside, the sun was beginning its inevitable descent into darkness, headless bodies were folding to the ground, and the sounds of angry villagers forging a fiery path to the castle were becoming impossible to ignore."
*Back to writing. Stop being so distracting, internet!*
----------Natalia Lopez-Woodside
Co-ML for Toronto, Ontario
30,108 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 17 49
'There are three things I know for certain:'
This is my third first line. I really need to silence my inner critic. The duct tape just isn't working.