What's your first sentence?
mine is: Ane Fortuna sat at her toilette staring at the opened letter.
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"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at stars" -Osacar Wilde.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 00 44
A dark shadow fell across Spring Hill Road.
----------James Forestier
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Nov 2, 2009 - 05 30
It was a nice day out.
God...what a horrible first sentence.
----------2009- Let the Fur Fly
If my doctor told me I had only six minutes to live, I wouldn't brood. I'd type a little faster. ~Isaac Asimov
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Nov 2, 2009 - 05 58
In a storm of feathers I quickly captured the bird, forcing my chapped and scratched hands around the beast.
----------Time being negative toward NaNo: 2
Caffine drinks consumed: 2
Times procastitated: Countless
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Nov 2, 2009 - 06 13
"Every story starts somewhere."
For me, the beginning and the ending have always been sticking points, even when writing a letter. Since I have no clue what my novel is about, I didn't want to spend too much time introducing it.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 09 02
It has to better than starring at a blank page for two hours.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 11 52
Monday's suck.
----------Jim Wisneski
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Nov 2, 2009 - 13 47
Mine: She had a knack for finding the perfect hiding spot, usually close to the front door.
----------The Quiet One
A most atypical vampire novel. She's a book snob. He's a hundred year old horror movie buff. Currently they're discussing his mother's pickles.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 14 36
Deal did not quite catch the noise that had wakened him from his light sleep.
@Kharum - don't stare. Just start typing whatever pops in your mind...or not, just type a word and follow to the logical conclusion of the sentence. Go from there.
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...and why not...I'm me after all :P
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Nov 2, 2009 - 14 51
Mine: The crimson tails of my robe flickered in the night.
----------"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." -Philippians 4:13
(This is an excellent verse for this month I believe, lol.)
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Nov 2, 2009 - 17 29
Finally, here it is:
Vomit rose to the back of his throat at the thought of it.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 18 32
I stared at the blank page too. The first day was a wash. Anyway, my sentence:
She’s lied to her sister for years.
----------Christine
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Nov 2, 2009 - 18 39
Great first sentences, everyone!
Mine:
I love run-on sentences!! *hides from Erin the ML and her grammar stick*
----------co-ML for Pennsylvania :: Lehigh Valley
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Nov 2, 2009 - 19 16
Coming a little late to the show, but:
"Autumn had come down the country track, her crisp joviality rustling through the boughs, bringing a ruddy glow to the foliage’s cheeks as she flirted coolly through the eaves. "
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Nov 2, 2009 - 21 08
Mine:
"What are you doing?"
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Nov 2, 2009 - 22 03
Here's mine.
"The brakes of the Peter Pan bus hissed as it came to a stop in the Port Authority bus depot."
----------'06-Death at Glenville Falls (win)
'07--untilted
'08--Death in the Ivory Tower (win)
'09--Death of a Bookworm
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Nov 2, 2009 - 22 52
He saw her lying on the floor, the one person who understood and loved him.
----------09 -- (Unknown Title)
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Nov 3, 2009 - 12 11
Good verse btw.
"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at stars" -Osacar Wilde.
----------www.mandymaria.blogspot.com
"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at stars" -Osacar Wilde.
www.mandymaria.blogspot.com
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Nov 4, 2009 - 09 02
The problem isn't that it's a run-on sentence. It's that the dependent clause is incomplete. ;-) If you take out the subordinate phrases (wearing a Vera Wang wedding gown, that was less than thirty seconds away from being boarded by twenty-some cheerleaders and associated staff members), you're left basically with:
"When Erin decided that hiding in a bathroom on a bus, she was way beyond tears."
If it were "on hiding" or "to hide," it would make perfect sense.
*ends grammar nits*
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Nov 4, 2009 - 10 07
*jaw drops*
*runs, scared*
:)
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Nov 6, 2009 - 13 19
The unmistakable smell of scorched coffee in an overheated pot smacked Jim-Bob Drake in the face when he got up on Wednesday morning.
----------co-Municipal Liaison for Lehigh Valley, PA
Tomorrow is the first day of the rest of your novel. ~ David Niall Wilson
Success is liking yourself, liking what you do, and liking how you do it. ~ Maya Angelou
My published fiction:
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Nov 6, 2009 - 18 59
A little cliched but:
Stephen entered his fourth block class like usual.
I actually think I abused that last word for that entire first paragraph.
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Nov 7, 2009 - 03 47
I went for something classic for mine:
"It was dark. It was stormy. It was night."
:)
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Nov 7, 2009 - 04 51
Grammatically, a tiny part of me shriveled, screamed in agony, and died after I read that.
Story-wise, it sounds really exciting!!
;D
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Nov 7, 2009 - 14 03
HA!
Thank goodness being a ML doesn't have a "Grammar Knowledge Test". I think I definitely would have failed.
:)
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Nov 8, 2009 - 15 13
Carson was home late again from filming.
My writing is failing this year.
----------"I disapprove of what you say, but I will defend to the death your right to say it."
- Voltaire
HI!
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Nov 8, 2009 - 15 18
“What happened?” asked the woman with the red hair, looking up at me in confusion.
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Nov 8, 2009 - 16 46
"Ah, just boot 'im out the airlock. He's a /robot/."
----------2005: The Rise of Umbra (~26000 words)
2007: unnamed work (50325 words)
2008: Zokotou Clause! Finishing "The Rise of Umbra" (50238 new words!)
2009: The Clockwork Robot
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Nov 8, 2009 - 19 40
Mr. Nicholas once told me, ‘Care, the only way to find a pot of gold at the end of the rainbow is by accepting both the rain and the sun, all in the same moment.’
Good first sentences, guys! Happy writing!
----------♥ ShannonApril