Feel free to post as many as you want, as they arise.
I have two so far:
Hidden deep within the shadows of her hood, Sister Sonya’s single eye glimmered. The color of the frozen sky, her glare pierced Max like a sliver of ice, demanding a better answer.
And:
Relieved, Max reached up and took her father’s hand. His warm, rough grip felt like home on her skin.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 09 11
her glare pierced Max like a sliver of ice
OUCH!!!
That would not feel good in the least...
-----------There's no excuse not to dream-
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Nov 3, 2009 - 20 59
"Blank faced youth shuffled in caffeine shrouded choreography like bees doing a smoke dance." Ah, Fox, you and your anti-corporate ideals. You buy that indie coffee and stick it to The Man!
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2007: Hotaru (unfinished)
2008: WoWNoWriMo (won!)
2009: Ghedflaeg
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Nov 3, 2009 - 22 02
I like it! Nice work!
27,152 / 50,000
Nov 4, 2009 - 22 15
"Mostly he had seen the street murals that talented anonymous people would throw on walls in urban centers, riots of color and shape that lead the eye in spastic patterns, dividing into manic havens of expression and form on the sullen brick walls. These were more manuscripts, journals of action that spelled a story, spilling out in metered measures of monologue. "
....I write better when I'm tired?
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2007: Hotaru (unfinished)
2008: WoWNoWriMo (won!)
2009: Ghedflaeg
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Nov 5, 2009 - 15 36
A question from a small child to a man with a limp from a war wound:
"Will they shoot you? When my papa's horse went lame, they shot it."
------------ Aspen
The perfect is the enemy of the fast. The good is the enemy of the fast. The halfway decent is the enemy of the fast.
--- Gail Carson Levine
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Nov 5, 2009 - 18 38
“Because we haven’t killed you yet,” Holly said as Les stabbed at her with the sharpened end of a telephone pole.
Hands down my favorite sentence so far. Wrote it yesterday.
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Nov 5, 2009 - 18 38
“Because we haven’t killed you yet,” Holly said as Les stabbed at her with the sharpened end of a telephone pole.
Hands down my favorite sentence so far. Wrote it yesterday.
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Nov 5, 2009 - 21 26
Hands down my favorite sentence so far. Wrote it yesterday.
49,089 / 50,000
Nov 5, 2009 - 21 27
“Um,” Max said. And then, to add even more spice to her scintillating conversational skills: “What?”
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Nov 5, 2009 - 21 29
"At some point, think you'll explain why it involves the giant marmot?"
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Nov 5, 2009 - 21 30
That's great. I don't even know if I can write things that are funny. How clever. :)
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Nov 6, 2009 - 02 08
“Rose all you have to do is say 'follow that cab,' don't they teach you anything in Gumshoe School?”
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Nov 6, 2009 - 07 13
Ooh, melikes it.
And thanks, zoe! I found it amusing. We've all been in that situation, where getting more than a syllable or two past our lips is a challenge.
50,094 / 50,000
Nov 6, 2009 - 16 19
Someone once told me that when writing a short story the writer should identify his/her favorite sentence and remove it. If this also applies to novels then I suspect the following wot I just wrote is going to get chopped. I may, in fact, be getting a little punch drunk by all this...
"O'Shea burst out of his office like a horizontal jack-in-the-box except that he was not attached to a spring."
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Nov 6, 2009 - 16 41
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Nov 6, 2009 - 21 21
OK, one of my goals for this novel is to make the prose as plain and simple as possible. So re-reading my 10,000 words right now.... I seriously can't find any sentences that are very lively. Right now in my boring boring prose this stands out as the most interesting sentence.
Eiither a tie for first or a close second because it boasts the *only* occurrence of a swear word in my novel.
52,216 / 50,000
Nov 7, 2009 - 09 32
A writer's block moment:
"I can get you a pint of pig's blood. It's absolutely delicious. Tastes like bacon."
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Nov 7, 2009 - 14 11
From this morning's session:
She tried to get control of herself, drawing in a deep breath and letting it out slowly, but her heart was busier than a drummer’s foot on the double-kick in a speed-metal symphony.
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Nov 8, 2009 - 16 19
These are all so good!
“I like your brand of crazy," said Frances, following me out. “You’re all ‘What? Me, irrational?’ while you throw rocks at people in positions of power. Ballsy.”
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Nov 8, 2009 - 18 54
“Karrrl...” Angela Martin-Katsky's voice drifted out of the kitchen like a warm breeze that may or may not contain nuclear fall-out.
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Nov 8, 2009 - 20 39
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Nov 11, 2009 - 12 33
“I’m afraid I can’t let you do that, Ceres.”
Blatant plagiarism from 2001? Probably. It may not stay. But damn, it made me smile to type it.
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Nov 11, 2009 - 13 40
I finally have one I like enough to post! Glee!
"Never let all of your memories become discarded trinkets in a closed box.”
...it makes a lot more sense with the context its in. Still, I like it quite a bit by itself, too.
----------2004: Eversnow • 2005: Aeternum Vale • 2006: Scala Caeli
2007: Fortune Favors the Bold • 2008: To the Stars
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Nov 11, 2009 - 14 30
Very good! Glad you're finding some gems!
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Nov 11, 2009 - 20 27
Just for the alliteration...
"Ten bucks for a private showing right in the guy's face. Say a girl can do ten of these dances in a night. Do the math. Put that together with the singles she gets when she's on stage and, as you can see, this is a pretty profitable proposition for an attractive young woman who doesn't mind working it."
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Nov 12, 2009 - 10 09
‘Once you eliminate the impossible, whatever remains, no matter how improbable, must be the truth.’
That's right, I'm having one of my protagonists quote Sir Arthur Conan Doyle to a computer. Take that, stupid computer!
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Nov 12, 2009 - 20 43
I finally got on a roll tonight and ended up with TWO sentences that I really love. It only took me getting to 25,000 words to find a couple of decent sentences. Freaking finally!
OK, here's the first. Sorry, the character speaking is a bit foul-mouthed. I will bleep accordingly.
“Quit sulking. I got rewarded for good police work, you got rewarded for being a brave f***ing idiot.”
And another:
"And if you breathe a word of this to anyone, you will be sorry. I will persecute you to the fullest extent of the law, and then I will persecute you in ways that are against the law.”
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Nov 12, 2009 - 20 45
Sara:
Oooh, I especially like that second one.
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Nov 12, 2009 - 21 06
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Nov 12, 2009 - 21 13
Hmm, now that you point it out....I'll have to think about it. I could do it either way, but I think when I actually wrote it I meant prosecute.
I actually used the word progeny tonight, then had to go look it up to make sure I used it in the right context, lol. I bet my grade level has gone up in my readability statistics. Hah! My brain was on fire tonight.