Your characters' first words

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Or, well, sort of. Let's see your characters' first lines in the story. Don't give any context, it totally ruins the fun.

Mary: "I need to speak to Dr. Vikral."
Kamwell: "I swear to God."
Elliot: "Get off can’t breathe legs hurt."

So far those three are the only ones to speak, although fairly shortly an as-of-yet-unnamed character will get her first line.
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Inen: "Nice one."
Jeremy: "Then you shouldn't have come, if you're going to complain about it so much."
Aderyn: "Why do you spend your evenings up in a tree, watching kids play with fire anyway?"
Blythe: "I'm sorry. I've never seen one of ours die before."

Going by what I have written. I'm writing out of order, so what will chronologically be their first words for the most part haven't been written yet. XD

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Jaime: “He’s a gentleman, you’ll really like him. You have a lot in common…Girl you would be a fool not to at least meet him!”
Erika: "I am going to kill her."
Erika: “Jaime, you are in so much trouble! This is the last time I give in to one of your dating schemes! You didn’t tell me he was a freaking lecher!”

And so my fun begins! :)

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Jarmil: I see fire and stuff, lots of fire! Hah!
Yan: Shut up you crazy arsonist, don't get any ideas.
Cobber: I don't get it, why are they trying to burn into the castle?
Elizar: Yan's right about people with abilities dying out.
Coyle: Pres.
Lusia: I don't understand what's going on.
Shayna: Princess?

Hmm not that interesting it seems. Haha. although I quite like Yan's opening line.

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Barasa (demon): C'mon, give up m'boy, give up before I break you down into dust. As long as your body still stands, I have won. You can't destroy me, I'm immortal.
Clayton: "Yeah, I got it and if you don't get out of here quick you'll get it to. Your father probably wouldn't be happy if you brought it home either, now would he."
Raine: "Yes sir, I'm listening"
Atta (demon): Come here my child

In my deffence, there is a lot of description and character thought before any of them open their mouths so it makes a lot more sense, and is a lot less creepy, in my book... I hope.

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In last year's NaNo, it was: "Excuse me, but this gentleman is still bothering me."
This year's MC has a decidely less prissy/humorous sounding "yes sir?"

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Cain: “Hello?”

Belinda: "Hey, Cain. It’s me.”

Mrs. Lexis: "Sweetheart, do you have time for dessert before – Honey, what’s wrong?”

Luci: “Or maybe you just need to party.”

Cory: “All right, I’ll be there in twenty minutes."

Marissa: “Vampires who were neither sexy nor scary." (No, this is NOT referencing Twilight.)

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Nov 3, 2009 - 06 18

"Congratulations, Jim. You've created the guinea pig."

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Gwynne: “They’re blind.”
James: “My father says I have the Sight, beneath the blindness.”
Random merchant dude: “I’ll trade it to you.”
George: “You are insane.”
Reed: “What?”
Fern: “Love the meal, dad.”
Rebecca: “Fern, we have expectations of you in this household, and obeying the words of your father and I is one of them, if not the most important one.”

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In order of appearance:

Garrick: "Rodney! Rodney! Rod Flynn!"
Rod: "I know."
Chance: "Vince, I'm telling you, you won't need to be here."
Sullivan: "Molly... Molly! That was not Dillard, tell me it was not Dillard..."
Molly: "It was Dillard, Sull."
Franklin: "Popcorn! And an extra game controller."
Skyler: "Sweet! I'll make the popcorn."

How fun, my characters are all grown up and starting to speak ;)

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Hm, sounds fun.

Kimber: I had a son who died.
Nikkias: They all are.
Kinsley: Hello there.
Lotte: You're not supposed to be out here.
Nyx: She is no human.
Lysander: Nikkias, you are an idiot.

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Jennifer: "Alarm clocks should be illegal on Saturdays."

Ezra: "Oh my.Oh my, oh my."

Gabriel: "Give me a moment to get this quite straight... you spent the past ten years working on a contraption that has conjured a girl?"

Katherine: "Well hello Lord Adsley. I was going to say that it has been too long, however by your expression it seems it might not have been long enough. "

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Nano 2009 - Clockwork
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I'm just taking the main ones, and there's a lot of them.

Alex: So it’s my fault you’re late just because you couldn’t take the stupid books yourself?
Fredrik: Someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed, eh?
Simen:Hey, Susanne, can’t you just get lost?
Adrian: She is so hot for you!
Maria: That's depending on which school you go to.

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Maggie: “Why must you all always end? Now I have to go back to living my own stupid life.”

Janice: "“Maggie? What’s happened?"

Emily: "Very funny, Mr. Clock Radio."

Alicia Adams: “Jess, was that the mail delivery service? What is it?”

Jess Adams: "“It’s a box from the Adams reunion committee, Mom! It’s baseball caps for us to wear.”

Anita Rogers: “Maggie, honey, it’s your day off,”

Kathy Foster: “What you doing, Maggie, hanging out at the Mall, playing teenager?”

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Lightning: “Thank you for calling Shock Investigative Services, your source for investigations both mundane and extraordinary. No job is too big or too small for our team of experienced and talented investigators. My name is Lightning, may I have your reason for calling us today?”

Magic: “Hey honey.”

Electric: “I'm sorry, little one.”

Johannes: “Do you have to read that script every time you answer the phone, little girl?”

Sally: “She has magi and a viv that is moreso... she looks tasty.”

Sarah: "That poor thing, I keep trying to forget about it, but I just can't. All cold and alone on the sidewalk, like a discarded trashbag or something."

Vance: "Are you 'Lightning' Shock?"

Fang: "Lightning Shock!"

Andrienne: "Valdez?"

Static: "Puppy!"

Leone: "Goddamn it you stupid whore watch where you're walking!" (Heehee)

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Mrs. Cook: "Ben!"

Peter: "Ben?"

Ben: "No. Why?"

BJ: "Thank you for responding so readily to my call."

Olivia: "Oh, BJ! You came just in time! We've... oh, who is this?"

Mrs. Davis: "I hope you enjoy your stay here."

Mr. Davis: "So, Ben, what kinds of things do you like to do?"

Liam: "Where's the fire, Mom? The Wolfsons' house go up again?"

Mine are no fun except for Liam's. :P

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King Rafik: "How did it come this far?"

Captain Fares: "My lord, how goes the battle? My men are ready to fight, should you ask it of us."

Shakir: "These are ill times for such a grin, Captain Fares."

Those are the big 3 characters we've met, so far. I still have one viewpoint character to introduce.

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Nov 3, 2009 - 09 56

Unnamed male MC: "You fool! You should know better than to sneak up and pounce on a man like that."

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Atherton (female MC): "Some cultures bathe in dust, Jes,"

They're pretty much the only ones who've spoken. I hate writing dialogue, especially at the start when I'm not really 'into' the what I'm writing.

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2008: [untitled]

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 06

Hayam: "I can't believe you're getting married tonight!"
Ibarhim: “I thought I was the greedy one,”
Sawyer/Khaled: "It happens. The world is too small for our dreams, Thumbelina."

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 08

Random demon-creature: "my Lord, this girl has fallen."
Isiarath: "I see." "Wake."
Bianca: "I-I don't know..."
Nina: "Come on, Bianca, we need to stop. My butt hurts!"
(Lmao!! I think I'm going to fix Nina's first line there... wow...)

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Mr. Primrose: "What is it, what is it?!"

Squirrely Squirrel: "Master, master, there's something you must see."

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 10

Only one character has appeared so far, so..
"And we call ourselves professors of Goddamn astronomy. But in reality, we are just pitiful doomsday prophets." - Gregory Bell
...that's the first time I wrote something of his opinion/thought. But the first thing he actually said:
“Here we go... Nemesis has arrived at last.”

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NaNo 09 - Catalyst Spirits (in process)

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 13

Daphne - "Shit."

Astoria - "Damn it, Daph, let go! They're here!"

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 17

My MC doesn't speak; he's a stuffed sheep. :)

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Alyssa: “Eliza I can’t believe for a moment you didn’t know that I would be able to recognize that ship the moment it touched the horizon,"
Eliza: “Alyssa! It’s been, oh how long, 10 years now? I can hardly believe it!”
Sophie: “Sorry mama.”
Eric: “Alyssa, darling! It’s been quite a while hasn’t it?”

And so far those are the only characters that have been introduced.

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".... and then, I turned into a FISH!"

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Nov 3, 2009 - 10 43

Chase: 'I, Chase Turner, am not normal. I am abnormal. A blot on the canvas of life, if you will.'
Reuben: "Electric's on the blink."

I haven't got any further than introducing my two MC's, really.

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Aiden: "Can't you shut that thing?"
Ezra: "I'm not dead!"

XD; I'll come back with more when more MCs get intro'd. :D

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No, we don't stop! We rock the spot! No, we don't quit! Get ready, aw, this is it!

First Nano - 2009 - Won and Finished. Editing will commence soon.

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Nov 3, 2009 - 11 01

December: “Yes mother, I’m really listening to you what I don’t understand is how you seem to think I’m the one who blew up the science lab.”

Cameo: “Meep!”

Elodin: “Nothing good probably.”

Infinity: “Out of curiousty,”

Naomh: “This side?”

Mayze: “Go get Symphony.”

I actually have like a couple more main characters, but I'm using the youngest ones who are actually students in the school, because it focus more on them and the adults are just... there.

I have one more MC but he doesn't appear till much later in the story I think, if he pops up at all. I want him to. He'll be fun ^__^

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This is fun!

Gertrude: "Vladislav?"
Vladislav: "Who's there? Gertrude?"
Heilwig: "Vladislav?" [Wow. My FMC's and villain's first line are the same. Creepy.]
Ottokar: "A toast!"
Margareta: "Ottokar, did you forget that today is the day Duke Frederick and his daughters are to arrive?"
Wenceslas: “Remembering your duty, you would never have left. Yet you did, and come home with scarcely any time before she will arrive.”
Agnes: "Otto! Where have you been?"
Beatrix: "Whoring and drinking." [Um. This character is ten years old.]

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Burly: I am Burly the troll, feared throughout the Nine Kingdoms!
Blabberwort: I am Blabberwort the troll, dreaded throughout the Nine Kingdoms!
Bluebell: And I am Bluebell the troll, terrified throughout the Nine Kingdoms!

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Constantia La Belle: "Fuck!"
Daphne: “Oh, nice to see that it works."
Bridget: “No, he just said that he wanted to see Daphne McFaggot as soon as possible. I bet he will be already mad as hell because he seemed had his nerves quite tight when he asked me to tell you this… And it was half an hour ago and you know perfectly well when you should arrive to work. I’ve always said that being late like you would destroy a career and you know what – I bet I’m right!”
Mr Sandman: “Don’t mind to knock, dear.”
Brooke Brooklyn: “Daphne! You’re needed here!”
Severus: “Eve, miss. Do you have a fireplace?”

They're in the order they appear in the story. You can see how much Briggie likes my Daphne for the first words she says in the story... There is also few not so important characters that have said few words, like

Nameless healer: "We don't really know."
Fleur (her name isn't mentioned in the story, though, I just write about "a woman with french accent" who has brought her kid in St Mungo's.) : “I... I was brewing the potion for my ‘usband and then my sister in law came to visit me with ‘er kids and then Blanche just...”

And others... They haven't said a word.

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Um, Let's see...

Remieil: Was it worth it? Losing everything for your stupid Perfect world? I hope it was, dear friend.
Azrael: Had I know what true freed tasted like, I would've broken away sooner! My only regret is that my time was cut short.
Remiel: You traitor! You kill your brethern, those that would give their very lives for you! TRAITOR!
Azrael:Go on! Be angry! SHOW ME YOUR RAGE!

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