Ok so. Here we have two charries, both male, bestfriends. One has a crush on the other (R), the other(T) has no idea. Then boof R decides to tell T (what happened will be explained later) by ..... suddenly kissing him. Haha lame. Well anyhow, things are supposed to get angsty over there, a little fight, a punch, stuff like that, ending in T leaving and saying "Don't love me.". Now no matter how hot that sounded to me when I thought about it, now it's pretty melodramatic and stupid and childish and I shoud've written it yesterday, so please, any ideas? To make it sound, ... human? Not movie-like impossible?
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Nov 5, 2009 - 15 38
firstly, this NaNo, so don't worry too much about what it comes off as right now.
secondly, that's a sign that your story might be twisting in ways you haven't planned. so let it sound childish and stupid. *encourage* it, *make a point* of it. that's what LitFic is for.
it doesn't have to sound hot.