I'm writing a fantasy story about toys, I realize it's juvenile, but the MC and the 2MC form a bond, that's kind of a potential relationship. But, the thing is they are both boys, and one has a female fiance that is in a coma: so he feels that he is cheating on her if they go together. HOw do I even make this sound write b/c I am no good at romance and not even guy/guy romance so how would I do that?
Please help me!
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Feb 24, 2008 - 14 15
I'm not quite sure what you are aking, but there's a lot of potential for conflict, and building up conflict is a big part of romance stories.
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Feb 25, 2008 - 22 15
First off, you need a motive. What's driving this one guy to fall for this other guy when his WIFE is in a coma? It's a double-conflict: 1.) The guy's wife is in a coma, and he obviously feels qualms for falling into another relationship with her....ermm...checked out. He has to get over THEM or get over HIM. 2.) Umm...correct me if I'm wrong, but don't some people who have wives usually go off to check out other WOMEN...? Unless they're bisexual. In that case, it might explain a few things.
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Feb 28, 2008 - 01 43
Don't insinuate that bisexual people are inherently more likely to be sluts than people who prefer a single gender. :P It's incorrect, uneducated, and a little insulting ;) Besides, the current recognition of "sexual orientation" is a relatively new concept, as well. Not that men having sex with men etc is a new concept, but in prior centuries, it was not exactly unheard of for a man to be married to a woman and have children, and yet still be sleeping with another man.
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Feb 28, 2008 - 07 36
Don't insinuate that bisexual people are inherently more likely to be sluts than people who prefer a single gender. :P It's incorrect, uneducated, and a little insulting ;) Besides, the current recognition of "sexual orientation" is a relatively new concept, as well. Not that men having sex with men etc is a new concept, but in prior centuries, it was not exactly unheard of for a man to be married to a woman and have children, and yet still be sleeping with another man.
You infer much, my dear. XD I was merely pointing out a perspective. Of course, in some parts of the world, it's considered...legal. But then again, we were never told when and where this story was taking place now, did we? ^^
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Feb 28, 2008 - 14 29
okay let me explain my question more thoroughly: I changed the plot around so I won't get confused and so the audience what hate me and so the audience want be confused as well. Okay the MC is an ex-soldier who is back home meets this guy (2mc) and he is dying on his front porch so he is concerned. THen weeks go by after 2mc is dischareged form the hospital he moves in with Mc b/c they are freinds. Then the trials for the Mc comes, the ppl who raised him are attacked by the thing that is searching for the mc. Then his fiance comes and is ...dead. he mourns for her and the 2mc is trying to help him in his mourning anyway possible.
anways blah blah blah further in the story they are closer together and I was attempting to somehow bind them together in an emotional and slightly "physical way" but, I have never done that in a story or in real life that's what I meant.
So pretty please with a mango ont top help me
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