Title: Bye Bye Bluebird
Length, Draft and Language: 115 000 words (Sorry, I know it's long), too many drafts to count, English
Brief Summary (not more than 300 words):
How would your life change if you could fly?
Aged thirteen, Ceah Tearsen has recently acquired this ability, and her answer is “drastically”. She’s also found a stone called the Lis, which brings her into Alisia. In this parallel world, she discovers that her parents are notorious here for *reasons not told right here* The Lis Stone contains the soul of a bluebird which was sacrificed, thus bestowing the gift of flight upon Alisia. Assuming that the Lisians wouldn’t be exhilarated if they knew the truth about her, Ceah guards her secret while looking for a way back to Earth.
But one person knows her secret. The Vulture. He wants the Lis, but Ceah won’t give it up. The Lisians don’t want him to have it either, and in order to defeat him, they need Ceah. Yachts then sweep in from Earth with members of an illicit association who want the Lis to sell. They bring hostages—Ceah’s parents, who take one look at the situation and decide to tell Ceah everything. “Everything” includes: *NOT TOLD FOR SPOILER PURPOSES*
As war is declared and all begin to fall into place, Ceah realizes that everything depends on the bluebird’s soul. All she needs to do now is set it free, preferably while staying alive.
Sub Genre & Keywords - just in case someone's looking for a novel that deals with "genetic engineering", "parable" or "elections": Music, flight, crazy friends, magic
Known Issues - Okay. Some of the deaths are REALLY bad. Some dialogue doesn't flow, some scenes are a bit cheesy.
Critique Requested - Anything and everything you dislike, really.
Critique Tolerance - Please don't spare me. I want to publish this.
Experience & Goals - This is my first novel and I'm looking to publish. I've done revisions already but I'm hoping for a fresh look on it. I've been working on it for almost 2 years.
Method of Communication - If you're interested, please leave a comment and I'll nanomail you my email and we can go on from there.
Disclaimers...Well it's in manuscript format right now, which means double spaced Times New Roman 12- point and underlines for italics, which bugs me sometimes, I don't know if it'll bug you. There's nothing that would be rated 18+ or R or whatever. It's fairly clean.
Deadlines: I've been working on this for a LONG time, so it'd be great if revisions could be in like, mid May or something? I know it's long, but I'm not asking for in depth critique, more like general comments, things that really bugged you, overall impression, etc.
Anything else...uhh...not anything that I can remember....
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Abr 29, 2008 - 12 38
I'd be glad to help! If you could email a group of chapters every now and then I may be able to give you some pointers ! :) I may not be able to help with all 115,000 words(Hey, I need to write too! ;), but still. :) If you'd like my help just send me a Nanomail!
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Mayo 13, 2008 - 22 53
Sounds cool. I'd love to read it. Seeing as it's now summer break for me I have a ton of free time on my hands I have been looking for something like this to keep me busy. I should be able to read through it fairly quickly too. Anyway, just nanomail me if you're still interrested.
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Title: Erm, I'll get back to that...
Progress: 32,125 / 70,000
Cups of coffee consumed: a lot
Sanity left: 70%