Whats your favourite line so far?

uncledoo
Whats your favourite line so far?

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nov. 1, 2007 - 02 15

Day one and the best one so far is....

Although there was nothing overtly sexual about her clothes, she radiated a low level sexual hum.

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Killing Spiders

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nov. 1, 2007 - 02 24

Quote:
low level sexual hum

She sounds like a vibrator.

Mine is "Butt fuck me,"

Or quite possibly. "Pan, explain to me why it is you are prancing around in my class room, dressed in a tutu and pretending to be a fairy."

"But Ma'am, I am a fairy." (remember, gay catholic school boys.)

uncledoo

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nov. 1, 2007 - 02 32

Killing Spiders wrote:
Quote:
low level sexual hum

"Butt fuck me,"

Nice and purple, definitely no inner editor there. -) and yes she does sound like a vibrator......

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Shadwell

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nov. 1, 2007 - 03 06

"[...] the only features that stood out were [...] the massive bags that she carried under her eyes like a Louis Vuitton handbag."

Horfhorfhorf. I am so funny.

I'm 5000 words in and it's already beginning to drag. I want to get them out of the airport already, and the two characters who AREN'T on a plane aren't very interesting thus far. I can make Tedward enter a poetry contest or something, but the FMC is annoying me.

I might just have her killed and let Tedward run off with the Sexy Vampire Worshippers from Down the State. It would make things a lot more interesting.

uncledoo

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nov. 1, 2007 - 03 18

Shadwell wrote:

I might just have her killed and let Tedward run off with the Sexy Vampire Worshippers from Down the State. It would make things a lot more interesting.

Yep, kill her and let Ted have some fun. No point in getting bored on day one.

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Shadwell

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nov. 1, 2007 - 03 28

uncledoo wrote:
Shadwell wrote:

I might just have her killed and let Tedward run off with the Sexy Vampire Worshippers from Down the State. It would make things a lot more interesting.

Yep, kill her and let Ted have some fun. No point in getting bored on day one.

True. Now to wait until midnight, when I'm most likely to think of an incredibly cruel way to kill her off.

Maybe I should make it Death by Neighbours. It'd turn out realistic, at the very least.

Moreth

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nov. 1, 2007 - 03 42

Quote:
He hefted himself back in through the window, and grabbed the tiny package from inside before leaping from seventeen stories up, landing on a giant inflated mardi-gras float.
[i]Convenient? I think so...[/i]

Oh yes, you heard right. HOMOS

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uncledoo

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nov. 1, 2007 - 03 59

Moreth wrote:

Oh yes, you heard right. HOMOS

There seems to be a theme developing here. The forums are a lot more interesting this year. You should compare notes with Killing Spiders (that is one crazy name).

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Moreth

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nov. 1, 2007 - 04 05

Oh no, it's more of a one-offer...

Here, this will set you more on track:

Quote:
It was only now the attendant realized the flying pie, wearing the black pair of sunglasses.

Oh wait... >.>

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LustForLike

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nov. 1, 2007 - 04 37

My favourite line so far:

"And in Hayward tonight," the weatherman said, pointing at Martin's neighbourhood, "you can expect heavy rains of fish, clearing towards morning."

It manages to incorporate two dares at once, too!

The ZaniakGlowing Halo

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nov. 1, 2007 - 05 11

My favourite line so far is a bit of a long one:

Quote:
He wasn't aware that already, his name was being written into mathematical scrolls across the country, or that people meeting in secret at this very moment were raising their glasses, and saying in hushed voices “To Cuthbert Galon – The Boy Who Should've Died, But Didn't, And Though We Don't Actually Know Why, We're Too Busy Celebrating to Care. Maybe We'll Look Into It In The Morning. Well, Not In The Morning – We'll Be Hung Over From All This Celebrating. But By The End Of The Week At The Latest. I Mean, It's Got To Be Important, Doesn't It? This Kind Of Thing Doesn't Happen Every Day. Surely We Won't Forget To Look It Up, And It'll Remain A Mystery For The Next, Oh, I Don't Know, Ten Years Or So? Anyway, To Cuthbert!”

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Moreth

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nov. 1, 2007 - 05 19

Oh my, still loling on that one xD

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Peter Smith

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nov. 1, 2007 - 05 59

Wow. I'm not sure I should be allowed to post, I don't have any hardcore guy-on-guy action anywhere in my story :). Seems to have been a prerequisite this year.

From what little I have (which is a scene and a half. Yeah, I'm really gonna do well this year :)), my favourite line so far is when our heroes discover the villains -- a group of crazy college anarchists -- have named themselves after a mythological diety who personifies primordial chaos. "How cutely pretentious. College students should never be supervillains."

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nov. 1, 2007 - 06 13

Well, if we're going for naughty lines, I'll have to nominate this:

The swell of her breasts strained the fabric in ways that he did not want to think about.

Other than that, my favourite so far is probably this paragraph, which I've been so looking forward to writing for at least a week now -- although there's nothing particularly special about it:

"Three months ago," he said to her at last, "I was nothing more than a moisture farmer, high on dreams but low on prospects. Three months ago, despite my dreams, I thought I would never leave this planet." He blew gently on his hand, and the last few grains of sand puffed away. "One month ago, I thought I would never see the place again. Yet here we are. Ratatouille."

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Fri

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nov. 1, 2007 - 16 12

I'm gonna cheat and post my two favourites XD

Keep in mind that I have no idea where this plot is going and that I've not planned a word of it. I'm really not a horrible person *weeps*

"The velocity of his ejaculation was enough to blast most of the worms off the rotting woman’s face, leaving the rest to squirm in agony as the acidic man-juice burned their flesh."

AND

"Once she could bring on an erection, her now useless porker would inflate to proportions so gigantic she’d be able to tear through the walls that imprisoned her, to smash the wood with her wood, to ejaculate her way to freedom.

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nov. 1, 2007 - 18 08

From the Prologue written yesterday:

It appeared that Dr Ahmed Al Ghazi was a man who could appreciate a joke when he heard it, even if in his last few moments of life, the Iraqi-born, Oxford-educated, recipient of a first-class Masters in Particle Physics and PhD in Nuclear Physics, and ardent supporter of Islamic fundamentalism smiled in response before dying.

And here we go with Chapter 1.

uncledoo

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nov. 1, 2007 - 19 08

Fri wrote:

"The velocity of his ejaculation was enough to blast most of the worms off the rotting woman’s face, leaving the rest to squirm in agony as the acidic man-juice burned their flesh."

AND

"Once she could bring on an erection, her now useless porker would inflate to proportions so gigantic she’d be able to tear through the walls that imprisoned her, to smash the wood with her wood, to ejaculate her way to freedom.

Jesus Fri I thought the others were going hard (pun intended).....

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Peter Smith

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nov. 2, 2007 - 01 18

Fri wrote:
I'm gonna cheat and post my two favourites XD

Keep in mind that I have no idea where this plot is going and that I've not planned a word of it. I'm really not a horrible person *weeps*

"The velocity of his ejaculation was enough to blast most of the worms off the rotting woman’s face, leaving the rest to squirm in agony as the acidic man-juice burned their flesh."

AND

"Once she could bring on an erection, her now useless porker would inflate to proportions so gigantic she’d be able to tear through the walls that imprisoned her, to smash the wood with her wood, to ejaculate her way to freedom.

o_O

Good lord in heaven...

That's, um, wow. Wow.

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nov. 2, 2007 - 01 39

My favourite line so far is short, but sweet.

Also, there is a spaceship.

I want that on my tombstone.
(and I want my tombstone to be a 3-micron thick silicon chip, encoded with my genetic information, and set loose in the Caspian. Sentimental much?)

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nov. 2, 2007 - 02 40

"Whatever lady," one of the rebellious teens said while flapping one of his rebellious hands at her.

Favourite line so far. But soon I'm applauding and flooding a classroom so that may change. My characters may scream in horror in purple prose world too...

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nov. 2, 2007 - 04 41

"“Well, nice to see you again,” Pan mutters, his tone dejected.

I’m just glad he’s not babbling anymore, he was like a fucking chipmunk."

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nov. 2, 2007 - 05 01

Hrm. I don't really have any really good lines thus far. So far, I'd have to vote for this one:

"All in all, she looked exactly like a dead teenaged mage should."

If we can do short paragraphs, however...

"No matter what she did, her lightning didn't seem to damage the ship (unless she wanted it to, anyway- there was a burn on the deck that said she could damage the ship if she really wanted to. Of course, she'd been almost knocked unconscious by the sheer effort it took to concentrate all that lightning in one spot, and the Captain had yelled at her for hours afterwards, but at least she had proof)."

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nov. 3, 2007 - 03 02

"Summonsed by an hysterical phone call from his daughter's best friend, Robert had no idea what kind of situation he was about to drive into but, whatever it was, he was getting there fast."

I just wrote that, and I'm rather proud of it! Anyway ... back to grindstone ...

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Ah hell ... I have no idea what I'm doing except holding on for the ride.

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nov. 6, 2007 - 05 36

"He paced around his small Queenslander home, almost envying smokers for their ability to busy themselves in what seemed to be a relaxing bloodsport."

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nov. 6, 2007 - 18 01

My fav line so far would probably be this one:

Now scientists have debated how a tiny sea snails broken wind could kill a fish, and the only thing they could agree on was to have coffee with their slice.

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Mujubius

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nov. 6, 2007 - 22 28

I could find a favourite paragraph easier than a line, but if pressed I'd probably offer up this one:

"It was a comfortable couch on any given day, but at this moment it was as though it were stuffed with marshmallows, woven with angel hair, and built with a frame of moonbeams. "

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nov. 21, 2007 - 01 34

He had some calls to make. These were not the sort of calls you just make over the phone. He collected his gun at the main desk. These were not the sort of calls you make unarmed.

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