What is Your First Line?

Remington B. Madison stopped to catch his breath.

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Copper Cockeral
Need To Publish Your NaNoNovel?
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"Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity." - Albert Einstein"

With the Prologue it's;
"I am an historian, not a writer of fiction."

But I may not keep the prologue, so for now it's;
"The Fates had not yet found their purpose when this occured."

Subject to deep resentment, and eventual change. But not now, because I'm busy. October comes too quickly.

When face with terminal writers block it is because the scene is BORING! Delete and move on, or start again.
Remember; Make them laugh, Make them cry, Make them wait.

With the Prologue it's;
"I am an historian, not a writer of fiction."

But I may not keep the prologue, so for now it's;
"The Fates had not yet found their purpose when this occured."

Subject to deep resentment, and eventual change. But not now, because I'm busy. October comes too quickly.

When face with terminal writers block it is because the scene is BORING! Delete and move on, or start again.
Remember; Make them laugh, Make them cry, Make them wait.

"Crueler had been counting the swish of the fanblades."

Crueler downshifted a gear, pinned the clutch, and the BMW M3 surged forward, screaming along the blacktop like a bat out of hell.

i must've had more drinks than i thought.

Elijah stepped out of the frisky Capitol Saloon, to get himself a breath of fresh air.

Kai Starr

"The telling of your worth ain't in what you done nor in what you were, but in what you do, and in what you are." --Jim Hart, from my first Western, "Whirlwind."

grrr double posts

Kai Starr

"The telling of your worth ain't in what you done nor in what you were, but in what you do, and in what you are." --Jim Hart, from my first Western, "Whirlwind."

"Aidan woke up suddenly, as if he had been doused with cold water. "

Practically screams excitment, don't you think. And I'm sure something exciting will happen eventually - I'm getting to it.

'I would do unspeakable things for a strawberry milkshake,’ she says, lifting sweat damp hair off the back of her neck.

Fifteen minutes into his first period class, Mrs Demure's science class, seventeen-year-old A. C. Kalton felt it . . . an excruciating cramping in his lower abdomen.

I just went and read my first sentence, and I guarantee you that you will never, ever see it.

Ever.

"The cold of a late Autumn’s night swept over the countryside, shaking the last leaves from the trees, and causing the costumed guests, hurrying up the long gravel driveway to shiver, and pull coats, cloaks, and shawls tighter around their bodies."

Benjamin Cramer looked, spoke, and acted like the popular conception of an old-time railroad tycoon.

(notice the brilliant use of the serial comma -- lol)

Steve
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"Best of luck with the exams!"

Comapred to some of these, especially the line about the milkshake, mine pales. Hopefully it gets better after this. Here it is.

Her name is Eiko.

Compared to some of these, especially the line about the milkshake, mine pales. Hopefully it gets better after this. Here it is.

Her name is Eiko.

"Where did they put the horse?"

;-)

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Participant since 2001 ~ Winner since 2002

I had to go out to the porch to take the call.

This is the first line of a blog post entitled, " I am Really Freaked Out!":

OK. I am really having a problem right now. I'm literally shaking. I'm sweating like a pig and freezing at the same time. I feel like puking but nothing's coming up.

-Andrew Rosenberg
http://blog.dawnsrise.com

Mine: I hate the sound of that goddamned bell.

Mine is:
"“Okay kid, what career do you want to choose?” the man behind the desk said to the 12 year old child in front of him."

Sounds strange when it is read there.... Alone...

‘Cookies’ was the first thing Gregory thought when the elevators doors opened to the floor of his apartment and the unmistakable aroma hit him.

i wake to the sound of pounding feet.

Mine is:

“Yo, Lucy!” one of the lost jeered as the Prince of Darkness pranced by. He was on his way to inspect the décor in the newest circle of hell.

~L.A.
Auburn, Alabama ML

Jayzon of Imun sat alone at his table, nursing a watery beer and trying to remember why he was in Handar in the first place, let alone this northernmost backwater border town.

author * artist
philosopher * madman

A couple of lines to start.

Solgar rose up on his right arm, lifting his head and eyes just above the sea of bodies. His creased and dented helmet lay in front of the twisted body of his childhood friend Hans Olson, his fair blue eyes turned milky white. Lying on his left side, Hans still held one of Solgar’s famous silver daggers, no defense against the sword stroke that ripped his stomach open from his throat down, leaving his spilled guts steaming like sausages in the hot afternoon sun.

To Roger Lubeck,
Your first sentence grabs - and that is a very good thing. I wanted to continue reading, and did. Honesty is that you lost me with your last sentence. As a reader I found it too graphic. LOL, I don't need to bring up my lunch to enjoy a literary work. And it left me wondering about my own story, which also contains some, perhaps, too descriptive sentences.

I may be the one who is wrong, simply too weak of stomach. But for what it is worth to you, I thought I'd share my thoughts. My revision might be worded more like: Lying on his left side, Hans still held one of Solgar's famous, silver daggers, though it had been no defense, (or useless, or of little use, or worthless), against the enemy's sword that had rendered (or left, or reduced him to) him a mutilated corpse.

It was yet another night spent awake for the young Amun Ubaid.

“Sir?” Her voice had a nervous twinge to it, as if at any moment, she may be fired. This, of course, was true.

Shakespeare once said, "All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players." Keep in mind, the guy was a really big fan of body counts.

Beth48

Thanks, for the thought.

It is a tough call. I wanted the first paragraph to strongly suggest the image of violence before the character, but it may be too much.

All I can say is that after my first novel (which seems mild), I decided to increase the level of violence and sex in my NaNoWriMo novels, perhaps ala George Martin.

These were literally the first sentences I wrote, so like everything else, when I begin editing I will have to consider the over all tone.

Roger

Angel ran like hell, the cops were right behind him, yelling something about stopping in the name of the law, whatever.