Hi all! I hope this is an okay place to post this, if not, it shall be gone as soon as I am informed of it.
Okay.....there is going to be a stand off on a boat drifting in the middle of a bay, within a good forty feet of the shore of the city. (it's at night) The bad guy has kidnapped the MC's best friend and lover, and stood them both by the edge of the boat, their hands tied behind their backs. The bad guy forces my MC to pick one to be shot, and then thrown over board. Of course, she can't choose, and so the bad guy says he'll just shoot them both.
However, the best friend (male) changes the situation. At the last minute, he kicks the MC's lover so he collapses to the ground, and the bullets fly above him, missing him completely. The best friend gets hit however, and goes over the edge and into the water.
The bad guy is apprehended.
Help! What happens next? The police had been called earlier. Do they arrive now? Does the lover of the MC (after the ropes are cut on his hands) dive in after the best friend? Or, dare I say it, does the best friend die?
And the MC (female) does she kill the bad guy out of anger, even when the police would stop her?
ANY ideas are welcome, on any aspect of this part of the story. This is the climax of the story too, so I want it as dramatic and exciting as possible. (preferablly, I would like the best friend to live, but I am wondering what you guys would think fits the plotline best.)
Go ahead. Give it a shot?
Night Silver
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I may fall, my heart may shatter, my will might be broken again and again, but I'll always have the strength to ignore all that pain......I just need someone to offer a hand, and even if I don't take it, I'll pull myself up from the sand.
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nov. 23, 2007 - 20 19
Make everyone think the best friend dies.
but really the tide was coming in and the best friend got amnesia and woke up int he hospital with no memory of whats going on.
but eventually he'll come back and right the wrongs.
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nov. 23, 2007 - 22 36
Hmm, tough one to keep the friend alive. After all falling into water at night means thyre going to be really hard to see - and gunshots bleed out nastily. Still, the water might be pretty cold. which could slow the bleeding a little... and give a higher chance of hypothermia. Where is this set? what time of year is it?
Also - if you've got blood in the water - are there sharks around? This'd lower the chance of survival but make for more drama... though not related to your plot - so maybe just confusing the issue.
You could have the lover dive in even with tied hands - and struggle a lot and choke down a lot of water... but catch the friend (so at least he doesn't get lost in the dark). Then both get rescued by the cops. That gives your cops a little more time to arrive...
just a few random ideas :)
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nov. 23, 2007 - 23 25
Hi, Night Silver,
This is what I would do (which is different than me suggesting what you should do, but anyway):
The lover (in my version, he's been shown earlier to be something of a coward, but she loves him regardless) dives in after BF, but fails to save him. This solves what could be a potential triangle among him, lover, and MC; and helps the lover finally become worthy of MC.
Because it's the climax of the story, I would say get BF out of the way to clarify the situation with the other two. Maybe a touching scene at the end where they visit the gravesite together and she sheds a silent tear, something like that. I speak as one who has just killed off a female BF in a vaguely similar situation, in a rather violent fashion, so I might be prejudiced. :-)
Do whatever feels right to you: if you want him to live, then he almost certainly should--but I can't think of an easy way to work that out. Best of luck!
----------Steve
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nov. 24, 2007 - 00 57
I don't know exactly how you should end the story, but I can offer something a little different to write into it: Assuming hands manage to be untied, my brother-in-law is a military man and once taught my sons how to help themselves keep from drowning by soaking their shirts and then catching air in their shirts to make the shirts float and help support their heads above water - to kind of balloon the shirts like a life preserver.
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janv. 21, 2008 - 18 46
This reminds me of a story of the writers of the dragonlance books. (Written jointly by Weis and Hickman.) The end of the first book a huge asteroid hits the temple and Tas, this takes place during a time traveling event where the kender is back in time and we know that this sends the temple to the bottom of the ocean. Simply Tas, the most beloved character of many DL fan, is now dead.
Weis phones Hickman in the middle of the night and says "I've got a problem. I think I just killed Tasselhoff." She was hysterical. This wasn't supposed to happen. Hickman tells her "Slow down, just tell us what happens after he dies."
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