The Last Sentence You Wrote...

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The Last Sentence You Wrote...

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nov. 2, 2009 - 14 12

First lines are all well and good, but if we want encouragement to keep writing then how about posting the *last* sentence you wrote? Because your first line will always be the same, but the last line keeps changing as long as you keep writing.

My current last line is:

She wanted to refuse, but the pain was such that she couldn't envisage walking all the way home.
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mikuro

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nov. 2, 2009 - 14 23

“Yes. And no.” she answered curtly. She hardly wanted to discuss this with a perfect stranger. At least not in the first half an hour of meeting.

Didn't make sense with just one sentence. ;)

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Nano 2006 - Crimson Crusade - WON
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Nano 2009 - zombies/alternate reality insanity...?

LadieOfTheBeesGlowing Halo

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nov. 2, 2009 - 14 42

' At the back of the crowd, the less-than-lanky Varra peered through shouldery valleys and elbowy nooks at the pointless bantering, and did not glance at all askance as a cloaked figure sidled up beside her. '

I'm sure there's some grammer missing from that sentence, but I'm not going to worry about that for another twenty-eight days (at which point hopefully zombies will rise up and consume my manuscript, thus ensuring no living soul may ever look upon it).

Consensus

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nov. 2, 2009 - 15 13

“I can show you.”

Does this sound better or more sinister if I reveal that it's spoken by a five year old girl who shouldn't be there?

I wish it was this one:
"'Ah', he thought, 'this doesn't bode well'."
But it isn't.

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And that's all I have to say about that

free_chiruGlowing Halo

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nov. 2, 2009 - 15 19

The glinting silver of a burnished fork throwing odd reflections off the walls.

That's not technically a sentence, is it... Ah well.

imelda

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nov. 2, 2009 - 15 19

She hadn't seen the path split for a while, not so much as a ripple in the rock, let alone somewhere deep enough for her to hide with Marad.

Looking forward to the oncoming torture scene. B-]

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Nano 2005: Nikara (Won)
Nano 2006: The Third Essence (Lost)
Nano 2007: Nikara O_o (Faaaaaailed)
Nano 2008: The Third Essence (Failed Again)
Nano 2009: The Third Essence (?)

sulkycat

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nov. 2, 2009 - 15 21

'oh yes, the quilts knew ...'

i kid you not
(look, i am very tired, work is a living hell and i have ear ache, all knowing quilts are the least of my worries)

littlesparkGlowing Halo

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nov. 2, 2009 - 16 07

"The ship shunted all power towards the stasis chambers but even that in the end was not enough and it went silent. Just like Earth."

Not technically the last sentence I wrote, but it is the last one for one of the novels I'm doing. That works right?

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BerylButterfly

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nov. 2, 2009 - 17 10

okay... so this has got to be one of the cheesiest sentences ever written...

"Each are lost in their own thoughts, but they both know they have witnessed a miracle today."

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Current signs of Nano induced insanity:

*2 hours spent prying off every key of keyboard and swabbing clean with alcohol before replacing, contemplating new message to put on keyboard to replace qwerty.

*one hour spent via video with girlfriend sing

Runescribe

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nov. 2, 2009 - 18 37

He charged heavy, but there was a reason we worked with him, and that was his habit of being nice to start-ups, knowing how we couldn't afford several handlers yet like the more experienced teams could.

My, but that's clunky.

littlesparkGlowing Halo

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nov. 2, 2009 - 19 35

"She named the ship the Titan Extractor, because of the fact that it was a salvage ship, that was tiny (the ironic part) and salvaged vessels that there something ten times its size or more."

Anyone interested?

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anechtaGlowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 00 24

“Breakfast, did you say?”

As you can tell, my novel is a deep and philosophical construction, exploring the meanings and frailties of human society.

thenovelwriter

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nov. 3, 2009 - 01 36

"What's a Dingo's breakfast?" Lucie asked. Tor let her laugh rumble and rise up from within before slamming her hand on the table making Lucie jump.
"Why it's a yawn, a leak, and a good look round".

JonnyArdern

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nov. 3, 2009 - 02 00

"The latest shipment arrived yesterday, and should be available for purchase now."

Paris is listening to a diary entry recorded on their world's version of a dictaphone, which is a talking skull with glowing red eyes.

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"Instruction on the Conventions of Invention and Construction."

Galadriel1010

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nov. 3, 2009 - 03 33

My last sentence was: “Watch out for him, girl. He needs us.”

And if anyone wants to read as I'm going along, the first two chapters are up at: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5481635/1/Gravitational_Potential

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Kythe

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nov. 3, 2009 - 06 44

'He could be proud in the knowledge that he had finally managed to make his parents fall in love.'

Last sentence I wrote and end of an emotional Chapter Three!!!

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2008: Blood and Shadows - Lost
2009: Fragments of a Life - Won, 17th November

elaineemilyGlowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 07 18

"It didn’t make any sense at all, she was not particularly brave and she was not a selfless hero, she was quite selfish and liked things her own way if she was honest."

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"Trust yourself. Think for yourself. Act for yourself. Speak for yourself. Be yourself. Imitation is suicide."

“Toto, I have the feeling we’re not in Kansas anymore.”

jellywellingtonGlowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 07 40

She could be very cruel in that way.

Written just now. Not a good sentence by any stretch of the imagination, but I didn't want to cheat :)

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2005: fell at the dreaded week two
2006: winner (hurrah!) with 'Loop'
2007: winner again (hurrah!!) with 'Gravestowne'
2008: winner again (yay!) with 'The Murder Club'

mrmatt

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nov. 3, 2009 - 08 30

He’d done rather well from it actually, so at least some good had come from it all.

Was my last sentence.

mrmatt

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nov. 3, 2009 - 08 36

“It was one of the first places I had tried actually” I said pontificating with half a Dodger

just wrote that one and it amused me, so I thought I should share.

Caz2008Glowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 09 09

The girl in the ticket office was still bristling at his remark. She clearly didnt think he had any good points but then he turned on the charm like a switch.

Galadriel1010

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nov. 3, 2009 - 09 57

End of chapter 3: "They looked at each other and shrugged. Jack's asked, “All hands to the pump?”"

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Rokkan

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nov. 3, 2009 - 10 07

I'm emulating Pratchett, so no chapters, but my current last line is:

I try not to lie to robots at all; they can analyse voice stressors, and lying to a robot can earn you a swift kick into the closest mace wall.

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NaNoWriMo debutante '09!
--2009: Sentience

Bunny SmeatonGlowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 11 53

The last tline that i have just written is :

He turned and saw the the black clouds striated with colours from bright white to pink, then green, then blue as the lightning seared the sky and the thunder roared.

Not sure i've got that right yet - but my inner editor is now going to go and have a nice long drink of wine.

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Bunny

Cath3

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nov. 3, 2009 - 13 04

My last line

Still he didn’t let it worry him too much, he wasn’t killing people, just keeping them safe so they couldn’t come to, or cause, any harm.

Hmm where to go from here?

This is still painful to write but least i have written something 3 days in a row. A big improvement on my writing habits so yey me!

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nov. 3, 2009 - 13 39

Mine is:

'In those terms, I fear that Mister Denning’s request is not only acceptable, it is the only course of action that we can take.'

And I'm retconning already.

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And that's all I have to say about that

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nov. 3, 2009 - 13 39

Mine is:

'In those terms, I fear that Mister Denning’s request is not only acceptable, it is the only course of action that we can take.'

And I'm retconning already.

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And that's all I have to say about that

Claire Rabbit

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nov. 3, 2009 - 13 45

'When he reached Vera, she bit him on the nose. '

Uhh...

Vera's a goat. He (Felix) just abseiled down a cliff to rescue her.

=]

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God bless yellow sticky notes...
2008 - Indigo City - Was on target until day 13. Then it all went 'boom!'.
2009 - Horizon - So far, so good. =]

starstildawn

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nov. 3, 2009 - 15 01

Wow, some of these are brilliant!

Here's mine: "Already I regretted turning him down."

MagentaGlowing Halo

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nov. 3, 2009 - 15 13

'Her mouth full of warm coffee, the taste of which she was savouring, she pointed to things on the tray, cream cheese and smoked salmon.'

Breakfast in bed with Mr Wrong. Only she doesn't know he's Mr Wrong yet. Awwww...

Also, while I'm not exactly hurting for wordcount yet, I caved and decided to throw in the sex scenes. In easily removable, italicised sections, so I can have the plain romance if I want later.

Oh, and that reminds me to remind you: this is an All Ages forum, so if the last sentence you wrote is a particularly saucy one, please don't post it. Wait until you've got something more family friendly (which could still be in the middle of a saucy scene, if you pick carefully...)

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Runescribe

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nov. 3, 2009 - 16 05

"Mills landed on the body. It went 'crunch'."

Less than five thousand words in, and I've already had three corpses.

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