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Likely_Story
Novel: Fourth Time's The Charm
Genre: Mystery & Suspense
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About Likely_Story

Location: St. Paul

Home Region:
United States :: Minnesota :: Twin Cities

Website: http://web.me.com/j_shea

Favorite novels: "All The King's Men," "Jim Jump"

Favorite writers: Chaim Potok, Cleveland Amory, Ursula LeGuin, Orson Scott Card, Neil Gaiman

Favorite music: silence

Non-noveling interests: animal welfare, "Lost," astronomy, scrapbooking and related crafts

Joined: novembre 1, 2007

This Year: Official Participant

NaNoWriMo History:
'07

NaNoWriMo posts: 39

NaNoWriMo buddies: 3

 

Synopsis: Fourth Time's The Charm

After three marriages ended in divorce, death and tragedy and after he crash-landed several careers, our protagonist searches for justice and discovers how quickly life becomes senseless. Tumbling toward destruction, he faces a choice of giving up or fighting to find a reason to live. Then love steps in from an unexpected place.

Nov. 2 Our story so far: We've met the protagonist and discovered a few of his foibles, and we've only just been introduced to his lovely wife and already it's time for her to go. She's been abducted but she won't go gentle into that good night not without a fight and without telling us some important information about her beloved.

Nov. 4 As the protagonist's wife is being taken to her doom, she remembers something her husband told her about his first marriage, and she realizes that they now share a similar emotion. Sadly she'll never be able to tell him, but she has a final insight into her husband.

Nov. 8 Thugs have carried away the unfortunate Calendra to her undeserving fate. A man on a bus nearby thought he heard a scream, but then maybe it was his hearing aid. My MC (main character) Richard paced around the apartment until he could take it no longer, struggling with a 9-1-1 dispatcher who was trying hard not to be bored, he persuaded her to notify the policel. Sgt. Sanderson and his partner Lt. Royal showed up at Richard's apartment and grilled him, making light at one point of a man worrying about his wife after an two hour absence. But Richard did get them to put a track on her cell phone, and he agreed to their request to pull her cell phone records and conversations. So now does the serious business begin? We shall see.

Nov. 9 Oy, criminals and crimefighters talk a tough game, don't they, but when it comes right down to it, they wanna live, they wanna survive, just like the rest of us, and even if they've seen it all, deep down inside a part of them wants good to prevail, justice to be served.

Our thugs are busy covering their tracks and leaving no witnesses and that means each other, and we're down to one out of three, and the big question is when will he bite it? Or will he bite it?

The police are on the case and just getting started, but as Sgt. Sanderson has learned from his 25 years in the business it's the always the stone left unturned that, the one nobody saw that will turn the case into a hot wire.

Nov. 14 My how time flies when someone dies. Our MC's beautiful wife is dead, having been unceremoniously stuffed into a plastic bag and dumped into the river. The bag washed up on shore downstream and was sighted by a rookie Park Patrol officer, who called the state investigators, not the Baltimore PD. So a mere 14 hours after he reported her missing, our MC is a widower, and his life is beginning its downward spiral.

Thankfully he has friends right now who will help him out. Thankfully he has a detective who will work to see justice done, but the really important question that lies ahead is how will he carry on. What will he do? Fourteen hours ago, he had no problem figuring out what to do. He would ask the one person who always knew what to do. Problem is, she's dead.

Excerpt: Fourth Time's The Charm

"… She was so afraid; her arms were too weak to lift. That she was in danger was certain, and the horrific realization dawned on her that most victims don’t fight because horror has drained every ounce of strength they might have mustered. …"

"… Gale, his first wife, looked beyond monstrous that night, he told her. His voice now dry and tight. He realized later he was looking into the face of madness unleashed and searching for release that would not be satisfied until everything in its sight was destroyed. It was the first and only time in his life he feared for his life. …"

"…Sanderson stopped and eyed Richard intently. Richard’s expression was wavering between shock and a glare. Sanderson could see he was struggling to contain his emotions of anger and fear.
“I’m sorry to be so blunt, sir, but I think you need to know just what could happen should we take this matter to the next level. And I want to you think a bit right now on whether you think we SHOULD take matter to this level.”
Sanderson didn’t take his eyes off Richard. Royal sipped his coffee, stared in professional silence at the table.
“Your wife could walk in in the next hour, late tonight, tomorrow morning, and depending on the situation, you might have a whole different problem on your hands.”
Richard was staring back at Sanderson now.
“So I want you to be sure that this is the course you want to take.”
All three men sat quietly for a beat.
“Because once the genie’s out of bottle …” Sanderson continued.
“There’s no puttin’ ’im back,” Royal answered then lifted his eyes toward Richard.
Richard looked at Sanderson, then Royal, then back at Sanderson, then made his decision.
“Put the track on, and you have my permission to get the cell phone conversations,” he said quietly. …"

A little bit about the thug:
"… People could not appreciate what he did for society, how he and his colleagues served as a sort of unseen force cleaning up the messes their affiliates had made. He never criticized them for such failings. In any operation, mistakes will be made but in the line of business in which he offered his services there wasn’t the sloppy tolerance that those in “legitimate” society accepted: defective merchandise, long lines in the customer service, unqualified bosses. No, in his world, there was no room for shoddy workmanship and wrong guesses. And there few mistakes did not require a heavy price. Maybe if you gave a wrong address, you’d get a hard slap or whack to the head. But for the big mistakes, there was only one response, one remedy. And he and Max both knew what it was. …"

And about our man in blue, actually he's a detective so he's not in uniform:
"… When he got back to the precinct, Sgt. Andrew Sanderson, unclipped his gun, set his briefcase on the desk and opened it, then sat at his desk. Royal sat at the desk beside him and both men set about their work, decideding quickly who should contact whom, who should do what. They were seasoned professionals, neither of them clamoring for the glory parts because they both knew that in the long run in these cases there were few glory parts. Twice in his work was he ever able to bring a happy ending to cases like this — not counting the false alarms. If this was a legitimate MP, he knew that this was going to be a tough case. But then Sanderson had picked this line of work and after 25 years on the force he still held the belief that he was doing what all police officers are supposed to do: To protect and to serve. More often it was to serve. He’d learned there were few chances to protect. …"

"… Richard pressed the “end” button, and the phone display went dark. Stuart turned his handset off as well. Silence spread through the room. Richard sat slowly on the arm of the sofa, and a numbness welled up from inside. That’s the best he could have described it, but he didn’t feel like describing it. He just wanted to go blank, mind, body and soul. Shock had shoved out all ability to feel pain or horror, but he sensed them pawing at him from the edges. He knew it was only a matter of time before they would get in, and that he would then need to do what you did at such times.
But the problem was he didn’t know what to do. Yes, he was glad Stuart was here, but he didn’t even know what he should have Stuart do. He knew of only one person who would know what to do, and that person was the last person right now who could tell him what to do: Calendra. …"

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