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1,339 / 50,000
Nov 1, 2009 - 16 43
Hehe, I realized that I am going to get to have fun with language all month long!
----------"To practice any art, no matter how well or badly, is a way to make your soul grow. So do it." - Kurt Vonnegut, Jr.
2009-Brother Monkey, Brother Lion, Sister Crow2009 -Bunnystar Galactica Psychic Bunnies IN SPACE
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Nov 1, 2009 - 20 38
My favorite line is actually my opening sentence:
It was not disguised, cloaked, nor in its infancy and had we wanted, we could have easily seen it coming.
----------A mind that is stretched to a new idea never returns to it's original dimension - Oliver Wendell Holmes
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Nov 1, 2009 - 21 20
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Nov 1, 2009 - 21 24
It makes sense in context? Sort of?
----------I hope I'm a punk rocking zombie when I die.
Or at least a headbanging one.
(Winner 2002-2008)
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Nov 1, 2009 - 21 31
...if he lived that long.
There's more I liked, but this was pretty telling for the scene I'd just written.
----------2009:
Diranda Studios: www.diranda.com
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Nov 1, 2009 - 21 47
My best so far...
As he pulled his bedroom door shut and jumped stiffly onto his bed, Rex had a bad feeling. Like something very strong was approaching, and not in a good way.
----------2008 Winner - Stray Kingdom
2009 - Stray Kingdom 2
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Nov 1, 2009 - 22 08
I'm rather fond of this bit:
Yep, it's dystopian.
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Nov 1, 2009 - 22 19
More than one line. It's what my novel opens with though :)
“Got a problem with gettin’ the job done quicker, Mr. Tallier?” he drawled, his eyes never wavering from the controls in front of him and the viewscreen just beyond them.
“If it means us getting killed, then yes!” Tallier exclaimed.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 02 00
In retrospect, setting the place on fire may not have been the best idea... though, to be honest, I knew it wasn't a good idea when I had it. It's amazing how easily you can run with an obviously bad idea when it's the only idea you've got, and I certainly didn't have anything else to go on at the time.
Opening paragraph, but not quite opening line.
40,000 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 02 11
"Then let us grief!" Daniel said, his eyes were trying not to cry; his heart trying not to break.
The line explain itself
----------Always do your best but never ever think that you are the best cause then, you would stop improving
5,231 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 03 03
I'll throw in my opening line as well, although there have been maybe two or three lines that I actually like pretty well so far...
"Deep in the heart of space, if space has a heart and didn't wear it on its proverbial sleeve, a game was being played."
If you are wondering..a card game was being played at that time. :)
----------"My heart overflows with a good theme; I address my verses to the King; My tongue is the pen of a ready writer."
~God (Psalm 45:1)
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Nov 2, 2009 - 03 32
I'm really pleased with the pace of my prologue. This isn't actually the first death, but the first significant one.
2009 - Losing Time (Science Fiction)
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Nov 2, 2009 - 05 05
It was Warren who spoke first, almost whispering, “Those aren’t rings. They’re debris fields.”
----------“Satellites,” Chang agreed, sounding as stunned as the others, “space junk.”
“Luke: What's in there?
Yoda: Only what you take with you.”
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Nov 2, 2009 - 05 45
It just was and it was beautiful and he could not get enough of it.
----------What do you mean, you don't do Science?!?!
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Nov 2, 2009 - 06 26
[Quote]
"You did what?!There was an apocalypse. You met the perpetrator of said apocalypse. And then you f*** her!?"
"She's really hot. And interesting. And it was all part of my master plan. Did I mention my plan worked. She was planning to kill you. Now, because I f***ed her. She's not. In lieu of flowers please just show your appreciation via acts of kindness and submission to my will. "
[/quote]
Keep in mind I write out of order then piece it together, this will happen towards the end.
----------A bored young girl lives through the apocalypse only to be rescued by her imaginary brother from his roommate’s sister.
http://defyalllogic.blogspot.com/
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Nov 2, 2009 - 06 28
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Nov 2, 2009 - 06 59
"The world was changing, and Rogan did not like it one bit."
----------Energy Drinks: 1
Cups of Tea: 2
Boxes of Cheezits: 2
Sleepovers: 4
SL: Thatch Feiri
Gaia: KillerQueen Bash
39,374 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 07 47
[Quote]A long time back once smart video recording camera phones were invented with the conjunction of the establishment of streaming video sites like YouTube, every waking moment easily became a massive hunt for ‘gotcha’ moments. It even took the honor system to new heights as friends had to trust each other that whatever accidents they may cause either out in public or simply during a physics class experiment that whatever they did would not suddenly end up as Internet gold the next day. But after building nearly forty intelligent robots and the experiences gained from having them around all the time, he knew there was no honor system on robots. Their very nature was to collect and record data constantly and could share it with each other faster than the blink of an eye under ideal circumstances. If anything, robots were the worst offenders in the case of eavesdropping and gossiping even more than teenage girls and old ladies in hair salons. In fact, he was certainly talking to Eli [my robotic MMC] now, but Erin [my robotic FMC, in ball form] sitting in his hands probably listened in, too, and he probably would not be any the wiser if he did not notice right now.[/Quote]
This is a musing by my roboticist Dr. Barclay, thinking about how he knows his robots are always talking to each other wirelessly so no news is ever a secret. Ironically, it becomes a plot point later on that I have him intentionally sever their wireless links so they can't pick up rogue signals (and also can't communicate wirelessly as a side-effect).
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Nov 2, 2009 - 08 27
3000 words in, I'm liking:
"Ivanov's silver form was losing the human perfection he had so carefully cultivated, and even Jenkins' always-jovial grin had been replaced with a rictus of pain."
and
"Within seconds, everything was silent except for the silent scrape of still-growing crystals rubbing along the pavement of the parking lot."
----------NaNo 2009: Lost and Found (19,052/50,000+)
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Nov 2, 2009 - 12 16
"At least I could be grateful that she wasn’t tempermentally inclined to take out her frustrations on me, say, with a tent peg in the middle of the night, like Yael clobbering Sisera in the Old Testament — not that she could rationally accuse me of being responsible for her being in the wrong place at the wrong time on a windy night in the Big Apple... but in my admittedly limited experience with the female animal, I’ve observed that blaming guys for their troubles is a game that most of them play full-time."
(... and yes, I'm a woman myself. But my MC is a hard bitten 1940s-style male detective. Hence his attitude.)
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Nov 2, 2009 - 10 47
Um, usually by now I've come up with a really great descriptive/emotional line. :-( Looks like the prose isn't going to be so hot this time, but at least I've got the word count.
Here's some of my faves. (A lot of these are meant to be funny...please let me know if you agree, I've noticed my sense of humor usually doesn't translate very well...)
(part of my description of the dorm room)
“Excedrin.”
“No. Excedrin doesn’t look like…” I poured a few into my hand. “Little pink ball bearings. Are these legal?”
“Yes! I bought them! In a store! Totally approved by the, uh, Edible…Drug…Association…”
“Food and Drug Administration?” I suggested.
“That’s the one!”
“And…when did you buy them?”
“In the twenty-first century, of course! Don’t be silly. When else would I buy them? I mean, you know, 2009. Obviously. Probably earlier in the year.”
“I’m so comforted right now.”
Title: Weirdness Magnet
Pages: 186
Semicolons: 156
Nights spent dreaming of story: 7
Geek references>plot?
Capes/Badass longcoats: 6
Status OMG finished! sorta. Interlude from "main story" to work on "Christmas special"
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Nov 2, 2009 - 10 54
Well, not much scifi in that line, I guess, but there is a sort of time travel that happens in the story, honest.
----------2009: Shunt
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Nov 2, 2009 - 10 58
From what's shaping up as the prologue
“Lady and gentlemen, I’ve asked you here today so that we may work together on a common goal,” he carefully placed a slide on the projector. “We can’t wait for NASA and another loss of ship and crew. If humans are to reach the stars and stay there then it is up to us to get it done,” he lifted the projector’s shutter, light spilling out large across the screen behind him, illuminating the ensuing chaos that was to birth a new era for mankind.
----------410 words on the page today, 410 words on the page....
You type away, let the muses play
411 words on the page..........
36,600 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 11 01
The crunch of its hind legs breaking instantaneously brought it to a more permanent cease."
Yeah, I have very little to work with when it comes with cool lines, as you can probably tell. This is my best so far. It's the opening line of my first chapter (or second, depending on how I organise the perspectives for my two MCs), and for context it's my MMC hunting in the woods, and the poor lickle bunny's just sprang a trap. I'll hopefully be able to churn out more when I get further into character descriptions and stuff.
27,285 / 50,000
Nov 2, 2009 - 11 57
Man, the ones I've read are pretty amazing!
Hmm. Here's one....okay, so a section.
Dr.Perrona, Bjorn, and Irene developed a special suit that didn't explode or vaporize when one tried to send it through time, and so they decided to test sending a worm through time. He came back fine, although his suit was too big. But that wasn't a change from earlier, just inconvenience. So they talked about what they should do, now that they had such a wonder in their possession. They didn't consider it could be a tool until that day when they discovered what may become of us.
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Nov 2, 2009 - 12 59
"It wouldn't be until one day when a particularly brilliant Glieshian developed space travel that they would be noticed. But that is farther off than my brain during math class on a Friday, and that's saying something."
----------NaNo '09- Cycles
Headaches: 3
Caffeinated Beverages: 7
Sanity Remaining: 65%
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Nov 2, 2009 - 13 31
“Search the place,” Abigail snapped at the rookies, “I want no survivors.”
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I'm having way too much fun with this so far :) And now that I'm writing the novel, Abigail's coming out much harder than I expected in the first place! YAY NANO!!!!!!!!!
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Nov 2, 2009 - 15 10
I've had quite a few "Oooh!" moments so far, but I think I'm happiest with the opening sentence in my prologue.
"Like all of us, Radford had wished for a peaceful death."
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Nov 2, 2009 - 15 33
The trip through the silent hallways of Parliament was quick, and before long, Kim Freeman, chair of the UNE central executive, and Prime Minister of the United Kingdom of Great Britan and Northern Ireland was behind his desk, and receiving an explanation as to just how the Brigade had been planing to kill him, and half the leaders of the world
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Nov 2, 2009 - 16 03
...Of course, that's open to a slight rewrite when the month is over. :\
----------2009 - Annika Travis