A bit of Sharing and Feedback

Sounds like it'll be a good story once you get it up and running :). Not my kind of story personally, not a big sports fan myself but I can definitely see some great potential. Stories your elderly family members tell you always seem to make some of the best novels.

Thanks for the feedback, Pardessa. It's more than a sports story...but that will be revealed later!

Your story starts with a conflict-laden premise and the opening scene shows that you are going to have a suspenseful story. I like the chapter title--it makes me wonder about the direction the fantasy story will take. I find your main character one that I could get interested in as her story develops. Thanks.

I'm a sad writer. I suffered a major setback today. I had about an hour and a half of writing done and out of nowhere my document closed and I hadn't had the chance to save it yet. I've tried everything to recover it and have come up with nothing so I have to do it all over again. I was so upset I actually started crying. My poor husband had no idea what to do. But I shall persavere! I wrote it once by God I can write it again!

Pardessa--How aggravating!!!!! I share your pain. Keep at it!

Well I kept at it despite my aggravation and managed to pull off 2,130 words :).

Mine is SUPER rough. I took my inner editor and cut off her fingers and put duct tape over her mouth...... If you don't like violence - my story is NOT the story for you. >_<

- perpetual redemption -

Sounds interesting. I'd definitely read more :). I'm usually not a big mystery fan but every once in awhile I find one that I can't resist. I'm a helpless romantic, I usually stick to those love stories that never happen XD. Keep your imagination flowing!