Okay Freya, my main character is a human who finds out she has been bestowed the powers of the norse goddess Freyja (the names were a coincidence and i'm too attached to change names now) fled to the vampire world after a series of tragedies in her own world (human world).
This vampire boy, Aiden is in love with her, but doesn't show it. She's falling in love with him too, but there are too many conflicts around them both for their feelings to create anything but a problem for them and everyone around them, so there's just romantic tension.
Anyways the scene is, the three vampire brothers of the old and very evil vampire king have entered the kingdom and are confronting the current queen about the ownership of the kindgom. Once the angry confrontation finishes, one of the brothers named Mathias goes over to Freya and reveals to her that he was in fact a guy from her school, Brayden, in disguise, Brayden by the way almost got Freya killed one time ending any friendship they had. But she naturally freaks out at the news of an evil vampire having been this close to her at home and causing her grief, so she's internally is questioning everything about her life in the human world etc etc. Anyways he's cocky and bragging and saying how he would love to have the powers she has on his side, and he's doing this creepily seductive smile and what not. He knows how Aiden feels about her even if Freya doesn't realize it. Mathias kisses Freya against her will and prevents her from trying to stop it because he's so much stronger than her, he bites her lip and starts sucking a little bit of her blood, but stops himself. Then he just disappears.
So my question is:
- How should Aiden react?
- How should Freya react?
- How should the room of Captains, Lieutenants, Friends, and the Queen react?
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Ok, just a quick question. Is Mathias related to Aiden? Or are the three vampire brothers just there, and then there's Aiden? If the two are related, you could play into that whole sibling rivalry thing. In either scenario Aiden would more than likely be incensed, but I think if he weren't related to Mathias, his first reaction would be to go tend to Freya. He could most probably confront Mathias later on.
If I were Freya, I would be completely freaked about the kiss (especially when he bites her lip and whatnot). She might be a little muddled after the fact (meaning she's not completely sure what's going on around her). If Mathias comes to tend to her she could initially either fight him off (feeling as if she might be under attack again) and then realize who he is, or completely ignore him as there's so much running through her mind at the moment.
Concerning the last question, I don't know exactly how you have your court set up, but the Queen and the others could have left the room after the confrontation with the three brothers to go regroup or create a plan of action. This would lead the interaction between Freya and Mathias to be almost a side conversation, but still in plain view of anyone else still in the room (such as Aiden). If you really want the Queen and the others in the room, they might initially just stare in shock. Afterwards the Queen might send a search party out to locate the brothers. This would especially work if Freya is under the protective custody of the Queen. Depending on the closeness between Freya and the Queen, she could take Freya into a private room to help her recover from the situation.
Hope this helps! :)
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