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Arike
Novel: Tear
Genre: Fantasy
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About Arike

Location: Dordrecht, Netherlands

Home Region:
Europe :: Holland & Belgium

Age:20

Website: http://www.thebookcase.nl

Favorite novels: All Discword novels, Harry Potter 1-7, The Prince (Machi), Memoirs of a Geisha, Pride and Prejudice, Henry V, too many others to write down

Favorite writers: Alison Croggon, J K Rowling, Terry Pratchett, Robin Hobb, Eoin Colfer

Favorite music: Delirious, Corrs, loads of vague songs for certain moods

Non-noveling interests: Aikido, singing, reading, fencing, HTML, cooking, travel, chess, films, cycling, walking

Joined: October 31, 2005

This Year: Official Participant

NaNoWriMo History:
'05 '06 '07

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Synopsis: Tear

When you've just travelled to a different continent to escape your bad reputation as the tossed-out left-over from your royal husband's marital banquet, you don't expect to run into more trouble than a woman simply surviving on her own can have. Vashti does exactly that. She runs into the notorious champion Kitari. He either saves the world or eats babies, depending on who you talk to. Fascinated by the man, she decides to follow him, whether he wants it or not.

Excerpt: Tear

The pawn shop looked a lot shabbier than the one she'd last visited. She hoped she would find better pickings here. “Hello?”

A friendly lady, grey-haired and round, bustled down an aisle to the counter beside the door. “How can I help you, dear?” This was promising.

Vashti took a deep breath and explained what she was about.

“A sale? Oh!” The lady's eyes widened at the sight of the bracelet. “Oh!” The exclamation was a shrill puff of purest excitement. “Ooooh...” This one went lower and more drawn out. “Oh.” Low and conspiritorial. “This needs a cup of tea and a good conversation, I think? Would you care to accompany me to the back room?”

Vashti nodded, glad for the offer. She was starting to get thirsty. "Sure." So she and the elderly lady settled down in a chamber completely full of knick-knacks, every single one of them related to sheep.

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Several hours of chit-chat later, Vashti and Mrs Trickadee had become good friends. No sale, or even a mention of one, had been made yet, but that did not seem to matter in this room. Time was an event, not a progression of ticking seconds, in this space with lambs dancing on strings from the ceiling. A grazing ewe with young formed the table and a seat for Mrs Trickadee, who flitted about so much he barely ever sat down. The couch Vashti was seated on was a field of green, clouds of white in every possible formation on it. “Embroidered that myself, you know. The green is from Leah's, lasts forever. Has she installed you well there?” Vashti was having some trouble keeping up with the conversation, since Mrs Trickadee flitted through the conversation as much as she did around the room.

“Those sons of her have grown into fine young man. Saw Dan myself last Wednesday on the market, carrying his mother's vegetables. Very attentive. I always though every man should be that attentive. My late husband was too, you know.” The only subject that came back with a steady regularity was Mrs Trickadee's late husband. “Oh, look at the time!” cried she, emphasising the statement with another peal of “Oh!”

Vashti blinked in question at her hostess “It's almost the end of the afternoon. Your husband will wonder where you are. He's probably also such a gallant specimen, yes?” At Vashti's nod, more an automatic confirmation than with any real thought of Kitari, she continued. “It's almost time for the game, too. And it won't be safe after that, “oh, no.” This was one of the conspiritial ohs. The ones Mrs Trickadee used with intrigue, taboos and real danger. Vashti didn't think this was a case of gossip. So she rose and thanked Mrs Trickadee.

“No trouble, oh!” This was a peal again. “We still need to agree on a price for your real bracelet. For my eyes have been on it avariciously this whole time, of course.” Vashti wondered how that could have been, since they'd been on the tea pot, all the things she'd pulled out to show to Vashti, Vashti's skin when she inspected the colour minutely to decide whether “milky chocolate” or “creamy coffee” would be a better description. After she'd decided in favour of the coffee, she'd gone off to make some to show Vashti how exactly like it was, and after that there'd been more talking. But Vashti would gladly agree to the avarice if that made the price any higher. She needed the money, after all.

“Goodness, oh, let's see where I left my hoard, then.” She bustled off through one of the many doorways in her shop. It spilled over into several rooms, some of which were off limits by some mysterious designation Vashti had not discovered, and some of which were open to the public. It went in degrees, too, so the room she'd brought Vashti to, while not exactly forbidden, was defenitely one that one didn't enter without supervision.

She came back with a small pouch that tinkled pleasantly. She opened it into one of Vashti's hands. Silver coins that formed a very fair counterpart to her bracelet gleamed in the soft glow coming from the skylight. It was almost dark enough to light a candle, Vashti noticed. It really must be getting late.

They traded, both happy, and then Vashti started to say goodbye. Only Mrs Trickadee decided that she really would get lost without an escort, and then went to get a light coat, which turned out to be a long wool cape and a broad-brimmed hat in matching aubergine. They stepped out into the twilight. Several houses had already lighted hearths or candles, since light glowed from their windows. They went along the main road, skirting a police force herding along some prisoners. Their green uniforms indicated they belonged to the military subdepartment from the general enforcement organisation. Vashti froze when she recognised one of people in cuffs. “Gad!” she breathed.

“Oh? What is it?” Mrs Trickadee peered at the rows of backs now already past, but didn't see anything, because she prompted Vashti again. “What did you see, m'girl?”

“One of Leah's sons, one of the teenagers.”

“Oh!” this was a short sharp shock of a syllable. “The dam finally broke, did it?” She shook her head. “The way those were going on, they were bound to get into trouble.”

“They weren't supposed to be outside.” Vashti frowned. “How? And why?”

Mrs Trickadee took hold of Vashti's elbow. “Let's find out, shall we?” She guided her along.

Vashti followed willingly, beside herself with both curiosity and worry.

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